Hey
You post in WIP, so I want to give some feedback.
Although, you have come far already, so this might not be something you want to go in and fix.
To me, the biggest issue is the animation.
Its just… movement. Not emotion. I don’t see an emotion of any of the characters, and their movements are all over the place. They don’t seem connected.
You want to breath life into them.
Did you shoot reference for each shot? Or did you plan them somehow? Via thumbnails and stuff like that?
It looks a bit like you just went in and animated, without a clear idea of how they felt, why they felt that way, and would be the best way to show this emotion.
Respect for doing this much work. It takes a lot of self dicipline, but animation wise, there is still a lot of work left for you.