The Departure

#1

Hello fellas, this is a little painting I did. Wanted to practice mechas because they are hard. Any critiques would be greatly appreciated!

Ian Jun Wei Chiew

#2

Here’s a couple of ideas:

I’d like to see more of the doorway, and more of the outside, this has a veyr claustrophobic feel to it, and it’s hard to tell that it’s going anywhere.

Your light sources need some work - you have a defined light source with the sun (implied), but the lighting does not match, there’s an ambient light near the front at the door, where there should be distinct rays of light, and only a bit of the ship would be lit, if you draw lines from the sun to the ground through the opening. The blue light would be reflected a LOT more, and in reality, you should have a ton of green light as the yellow of the sun and blue of the engine combine.

Your blue at the back competes with the bright light of the sun, and the eye bounces back and forth between the two, and the focus of the piece, the ship, is lost. At a glance, you don’t see “ship”, you see “bright white blob” and “bright blue blob”.

The indistinct rocks don’t work with a highly detailed ship - your details and level of detail should match - ie. if you draw out the ship, you need to draw the rocks out, too. The kind of treatment your’e using for the rocks is fine for a conceptual piece, but you would use the same loose style of painting for the ship, too.

The ship feels like it’s at an angle to the ground, it feels awkward.

It’s nitpicky, but the entire piece does not feel realistic - in a small enclosed space like that, you would not want to fire up engines, as it would probably bring down the roof, and could blow back onto the ship - and people would most definitely not be able to survive. I could overlook this, though.

#3

Thanks a lot for the feedback! I agree with you totally, I should have planed it out a lot more. I should practice drawing something that is realistic, instead of just it being fancy :frowning:

#4

A dark shadow underneath the platform as well as some darkness on the undersides of the ship would help quite a bit IMO. Nice image.

#5

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