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Strange Behavior (Illustration) Entry: Laurent Mordin
bluemattersoda
#23
whoa man! this is coming along quite well, especially with all the little details. Well done, and good luck!
OKMER
#24
Yap agree,It’s coming along nicely.Cool pic!
Try maybe to low down a bit the dark tones in the background to create more depth.
…Tes valeurs me semble un peu près la même partout que ca devrais changer selon la profondur du pic…juste une suggestion biensur…
For me the charcters seems a bit too static too.
Just my 2 cents…huhu
Good luck! 
nwiz25
#25
hey dude! crazy cool concept i must say! 
me with Remko too! … plus add some fog in order to create more depth … let the castle appear far away … all in all … awesome!
good luck my friend! 
cheers!
MDN67
#26
OKMER: Thank for your comments, J planned to work on the fog has l background to add of the depth, concerning character, I go completely worked again one of them to give him more movement as have him to me advised guero
nwiz25: Many thank for your comments, I go to work again the fog because manypeople make me this comment
MDN67
#27
I changed the character of the medium, that which was back, I replaced it by a character more moving which leaves, nauseated by the behavior of the dragon, this change is made on the council of guero. I placed closed a up for better seeing work on the character
MDN67
#28
As we advised it, I added a “lava effect”, so that I can exploit an another light source. I took advantage of it for added some fog for the depth. The next update I would add light effect on the dragon and on the environment
What are you think of this added?
MDN67
#30
An other update
By working on my pic, I thought that the sky was not rather lively and that vapor of the lava was too yellow, I thus retouched the saturations and the tints, n° 01 is before and n° 02 after
What do you think of this changes?
MDN67
#31
I change and refined the gates of the two bridges because the first style was too heroic fantasy and the castle is medieval. I added fog on the castle for more deep
guero
#32
Hi MDN67 I see you are moving along, great. Few comments.
Esthetic wise the old entrance gates were less obtrusive and fit better into the image.
The new gate doesn’t seem like it belongs in there, it seems like it was designed by different builder. Also doesn’t fit with the environment too clean, seems like the cement is still wet 
Devil heads are kind of cool, keep them.
Lava glow is tricky just keep on experimenting.
Characters, I assume that you are putting a lot of time into rendering those characters develop a workflow. Start with dynamic stick figures it’s all about capturing the pose. If your stick figure reads well the rest of the rendering is just candy. Another thing use large mirror and strike the pose yourself get into the character. Once you decide on the pose ask someone to take a picture of you for reference. Also put some drama in it, the character that is walking towards us looks like he is disappointed, he should be pissed off, raging with anger. His sword should be on the ground left behind. Knight in blue seems like he is scratching his ass. And the girl is tapping his shoulder telling him everything will be ok it’s just a rash, put some medicine on it just kidding. Again drama, drama, drama. Since the image supposed to be funny have the bold guy pull down his pants and show the dragon his ass. Just and idea.
Dragon. To every action have some reaction, like i mention the dragon head on the left should be laughing at the joke, that would be a nice contrast to the one with the mask. Also the dragon head in the middle needs to be fixed it seems like he is looking back, he should be looking at the head with the mask.
Boarders. Fix the top boarder put more clouds in there because once my eyes scan the image and stop at the castle they don’t want to come down.
I hope i was helpful, good luck and have fun.
MDN67
#33
Quero, thank you for your new comments. Concerning gates, you are right and I go Modify it makes too clean. For the middle character, I wanted to give him an offended expression, and I think that I succeeded with the wave of one’s hand, for the first head of dragon, I do not think of making her laugh, she did not notice the joke yet
guero
#34
Too bad there’s not too many constructive comments 
that would give you different views. Do what you can and keep it up.
krrrk
#35
hi laurent,
nice pic and idea,
i agree with the comments on the characters, they still seem a bit too static
and those gates should look older, less clean
but my main comment would be on the dragon
why not have the whole dragon behave strange and
give each head a different funny mask
so there is more going on between the dragon and the warriors
now the dialogue is mainly going on between the right head and the middle head
the 4 warriors are not really interacting with the dragon now
except for the left head which is looking at them
I don’t know, just a thought
and I do like the mickey hand, but it’s placed a bit wrong in the picture,
I think it would be better if the dragon holds it more to the right (his left)
now it is placed right behind that blond warrior, (looks almost like he’s holding it)
or maybe it’s better if you replace it by a balloon or something
make the dragon look like he’s ready to go to a birthdayparty
greetz and good luck
MDN67
#36
KrrrK, thank you for your comments. J understand, what you want to say as for guero, but concerning the posture of the characters or of the dragon, it depends in what period of the action( we are, I wanted to give the impression that, only the third head had a strange béhaviour, the first one( did not realize it yet and continues has to have an aggressive attitude, the second, look at the third with an severe attitude bus he, does not want to make a joke. For characters, they looks at the dragon thoughtfully, more in spectator than in warrior because they are completely amazed by this behavior, only the character of the middle is disenchanted and prefers to leave On the other hand, you have right concerning the hand and I go can be to take your idea of ball
guero
#37
Hi Laurent, you are doing great job but you are not at the finish line yet. The way i see it is that main idea is understood by everyone is just the minor ideas are lost in translation. Think about how the judges will read your image, and the good indication are peoples comments. Is everyone on the same page? Not right now, and most likely the judges will not see it your way either. Now nobody says that you have to please everyone or change anything just because someone is says so, but if you care for other people to see the same thing the way you do, you have to analyse the image and ask yourself why they don’t see it my way.
Keep it up.
