More will be added soon to this character.
Steampunk Myths and Legends Entry: Amir faghihi
Amirgdx5
#22
O.K here is the new foot and the steam engine on his back …i think i might add wing`s to this character! What do ya think?
walrus
#23
Neat design, and a neat myth, too… one that I wasn’t familiar with, so thanks for the background! I feel like his arm might be too stubby for the length of his body. You might want to try fooling around with different proportions. You have plenty of time, so don’t feel that you have to base your whole work off of your first sketch. More sketches can help you come up with a lot of differnt shapes and forms that you may not have hit first time at bat. (Or maybe they’ll comfirm that your first sketch was the best… but you’ll enver know 'til you’ve tried some more sketches!)
As for the technology, I like the thng on the back and the fact that his legs are mechanical, but the legs especially feel more like complicated science fiction legs and not very mich like steampunk legs. The shapes in them are very chunky - try adding some more gears, or some victorian-style scrollwork, or something with lots of rivets. Check out some references and see how you might think about applying a bit more of the steampunk aesthetic…
Good luck!
Amirgdx5
#24
Its an honor Michael to get tips from you 
so thanX for your constructive comment :bowdown:
i agree with you on the arm and foot thing 
the arm well be redrawed and the foot well have some rivets and some non modern science fiction part`s,thanX to you,
as for the sketche`s i did allot of them and this was the better one
i have a question! should i have the mask on him in a way that would show that he hasen`t got any eyes,and connect it to the back boosting engine?
ace4016
#25
Actually, I like the mask idea here: http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/22/16020/16020_1226924299_medium.jpg
Looks cooler, more menacing, and can have some steam pistons for the hinges; and you can connect it to the back (with leather straps of course 
). Looks nice so far; keep the updates coming and don’t be afraid to show us some failed sketches or ideas
Amirgdx5
#26
Hay ace
I actually loved the mask,i just have to put some time on it a try things out,and i will put the sketches here as i go along.
ThanX for your time on my post 
Ps- I love snoopy 
mrpeace
#27
If the character is not physically DISABLED, than definitely the character’s legs is twisted too much…The face even looks like the one from ALIEN. Try around few more designs…on the head and the overall boady too. Make it more STEAM with gears and stuff…
By the way, Great backstory…its really good.
Amirgdx5
#28
ThanX mrpeace, as for the face, when i was drawing this i had no image of Alen in my head …i will add the mask and then we will see how it will turn out and i will make it more steam punky
*I will change the : LEG + ARM
**Adding : Back Boosting Engine + Stemy Mask + Other Arm with the "bloody mace"
Wings? yes?..i will give it a try :arteest:
Amirgdx5
#30
O.K hand added, foot changed,steam boost back ready to go =) and noe the back ground!!! wohooooooooooooooooo!!
Rupy
#31
Hey Amir,
haha I love what you did with the character, different style thats for sure, was reading over the story, really interesting actally, will like to see where you go with this, cheers and good luck!
Rupy
ace4016
#32
Nice work on the paintign so far Amir. Just have a few suggestions or so. I was looking back at the earlier sketches and such, and I really liked this one a lot: http://assets.cgsociety.org/challenge/entries/22/16020/16020_1226924299_medium.jpg . It felt more dynamic (and I like the shading better :P). The boiler design seemed more streamlined and fit the body better than the last boiler; I think the mask also adds to the steam punky feel as it’s an iron element (without the mask it just seems more organic); and the placement with the foot was weird, but interesting; i kind of liked it (and if the foot were pointed a little more towards the viewer, it might work out just fine). The problem I see with the current boiler is how far off his back from the bottom it goes, where the earlier designs kept it shorter and it looked more like the boiler belonged there; at the moment it seems like the boiler/engine is more detached and maybe shouldn’t be there. The position of the left arm also seems out of place and further takes away from the dynamicness; feels like his arm/hand should be in a lower position or so and maybe a bit towards the back. Although this is completely dependant on the total composition of the scene.
Also, I’ll have to agree with Walrus’ comment earlier about the legs; they are done well, but they seem to clash with the rest of the body. Looks like a lot of work went in that texturing and all. I’d definetely play around with the most a bit, and some of the designs on him just to get a tighter fit of things so everything belongs. Also, have you sketched out a layout for the scene? Curious as to what will be going on in the scene, not just this one character. I know sometimes what helps me with character designs and poses and such are the placements and layout of the entire scene so that I know why the characters are doing what they’re doing and such. These are just my opinions/suggestions though; you don’t have to follow them, just trying to stir things up a bit
Hope to see some more updates and sketches soon! :bounce:
Amirgdx5
#33
Hay Rupy thanx for visiting and good luck to you 2
ace4016 I really appreciate your words and i will make some twist`s on this so dont worry, i would be adding the mask though and i will see what can i make out of this.
thank you for your time and your constructive comment
i still got time so i wil try more things and abut the scene , its going to be a cave and in front will be a lava fall :D as in water fall,and the walls will be filled with skulls and the aves perspective well go far destand on the upper midel of the scene
do drop by in 3 or 4 day`s from now,Ive got a job and i go to gym so i run out of time 
Let`s Rock !
Amirgdx5
#35
ThanX AUMAKUA i digi paint with my mouse 
i hope i get 1st place …yeah right!!:rolleyes:
and then i can have a WACOM wohooooooo!!! but i dont think i would win !:argh:
O.K back to the sketching !:banghead:
decosouza
#36
Painted with a mouse… I don’t know if I can do this with my pen…
Good concept mate and I like the way you’re going specially with the legs. I think the left foot is out of leg…more to the left than the leg. still looks very good and maybe this is your intetion. Very good work… keep up it!!
varma
#39
Hei Amir;
You have a very interesting theme and kind of exiting concept going on! I liked the
sketches a lot and I’m really curious too see how this will develope, I will need more
time to come back and read more and reflect on the story and the link you provided;
cause that sounds very mythical and exiting!
Good luck, buddy!