Sketchbook Thread of default-rol

#161

lmao!:scream:
Go for it! Sell your soul - it pays off…

lmao!:scream:

#162

@Mr.Mu

LOL!! that link was ace. :thumbsup: I did my degree in Newcastle-upon-Tyne, and lived near Byker for a while, (where that guy lives.) We do things like that “up North.” I should probably have bought it… :scream:

MIKE

#163

hey mike. Nice work so far, I await the character designs and props and other stuff you gotta do by wednesday, good luck!. This all reminds me of Edd Gein, what a guy.

I like your anatomy studies by the way… nice.

Keep going

#164

Lol…selling one’s soul on the internet…I wonder how much mine would fetch? :surprised :scream:

#165

Less talky more drawy! :wip:

#166

Hey all :scream:

I’m up and running. Only a few images left to draw and I have got the full set!! :thumbsup:

Here is the start of the storyboards, images 1 to 24 including text. If anyone spots any continuity problems or errors - please, please, PLEASE shout up!! I’m handing this in soon :smiley:

More updates throughout the evening… :scream:

MIKE Got the caffine inside him…

#167

More… :slight_smile: (will post again in the next hour or so.)

#168

Panel #21? (you really should number your panels :smiley: ) a chair appears from nowhere. You should put the chair in the other shots so that we know it’s in the room and not hidden under the figures clothes or something.

I’d move the "Different time of day from panel 15 to panel 13. Then the whole sequence would make more sense. If not, the figure seems to jump suddenly from the window to the desk.

Other than that … looking good! :thumbsup:

#169

@Kirt - Thanks for the supersonic feedback!! You rock :buttrock: You are totally right about the chair and where to put “The time of day changes.” in to the sequence. Thanks for that.

Here are the rest. :smiley:

MIKE

#170

Hmmm … that last panel with him using a glass on the wall seems odd. I mean, he has this electronic stuff to watch the house and he’s using low-tech to eavesdrop?

For effect and shock, maybe just a quick closeup of Mr. Sticha’s eyes (in shock/surprise)? You could even hint or allude to the creature by putting a silloette reflection in Mr. Sticha’s eyes.

#171

@Kirt - You’re on fire tonight!! Great suggestions!! :thumbsup::buttrock:

Last ones… :smiley:

Well, that is over with (for a minute at least. Tomorrow, revisions a la Kirt style, and the animatic + Powerpoint presentation - musn’t forget that… :argh: :cry: )

MIKE :bowdown: :bowdown:

#172

Hey … more pages. :smiley:

OK, I have to admit you lost me there on the next page after the glass on the wall. I suppose it tells the story, but in my opinion seems kind of dull and lifeless. I think you should be building up the suspence more through this sequence. If you do a small series of flashbacks I think it’ll tell the story well and keep the viewer more interested in what might be happening.

So, you have this sequence where Mr. Sticha recalls seeing something. Then you could have another sequence where the main character is investigating the trash of the suspect. You could have empty bottles of toxic chemicals and formaldehyde that he picks out to examine for a second … and then mouth the word “poison”.

I’m not sure if you have enough time to fit that in there (as I haven’t heard the song and not familiar with the timing). But if it works, then I think it’d build the suspense more.

Additionally, I think you should throw in some weirder camera angles through here leading up to the end. Throwing the viewer off balance with some carefully placed overhead or worm’s eye views will make the sequence more disorientating and disturbing. Tilt the camera and try other things rather than straight medium shots.

Extreme closeups can be effective also. They have a tendicy to restrict the information given to the viewer. So, they can’t help but wonder about the parts that are not in view.

I don’t know if you have enough time, but it would be helpful if you had time to rent and watch Alfred Hitchcock’s Psycho and study how he uses the camera to build up suspence and horror.

#173

@Kirt -

Thanks for all your help so far. These sound like great suggestions. :thumbsup: I hadn’t considered using the Hitchcock style for the piece, but now you mention it - it’s obvious!! LOL.

what I think I need to do given my timeframe is, produce an animatic for the piece with the elements I have, but trying to alter the feel slightly where I can. Then adjusting it really and add in new shots (as per your suggestions) on Thursday (after trying to rent Psycho on Wednesday night :scream:,) for the storyboard hand in on Friday.

Great!!

Thanks again - you have been so much help. :bowdown:

MIKE

#174

And now for something completely different… :scream:

MIKE :slight_smile:

#175

and the rest… :slight_smile:

MIKE :slight_smile:

#176

Hey Mike, :slight_smile:

You were right about your figure drawings improving ~ I like this drawing in particular:

[left]Oh, hey, and those last 2 are great also! :slight_smile:

Definite improvements in sense of overall shape and form…and I think your line confidence is increasing as well.

Well~done!

Cheers, :slight_smile:

~Rk
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#177

The teacher makes the student Becks… :bowdown: :bowdown::bowdown::smiley:

MIKE

#178

The teacher makes the student Becks… :bowdown: :bowdown::bowdown::smiley:

:scream: Lol, Mike…you know these Workshops aren’t graded, right? :curious: :scream: No need to brownnose for an ‘A’! :scream:

Cheers, :slight_smile:

~Rk laughing with Mike :smiley:

#179

On a serious note :wink: I think these two drawings are really coming along well in terms of shape and sense of structure:

 [img]http://img520.imageshack.us/img520/7648/seatedfemalebackpencil0pf.jpg[/img]
 
 [img]http://img520.imageshack.us/img520/4100/seatedmalecharcoal7qm.jpg[/img]


Nice work! AOAH better start peddling! :thumbsup:

I can see that last piece easily becoming a really nice traditional or digital painting. :slight_smile:

Cheers, :)

~Rk
#180

A “mutant turtle”… :smiley:

MIKE :slight_smile: