Prison facility

#1

I am back:)

This is a matte for a Star Wars fan film.
What is your oppinion how can i make it better?

thanks

bence

#2

Hi kbarts, :slight_smile:

It’s looking very nice! :slight_smile: But, am not quite sure, why there are 2 moons in your matte? I’d suggest you to have the smaller moon in your matte, & remove the bigger one! The 2 moons are somehow distracting the vision, & not allowing my eyes to stay focused at one point in your matte!

It’s just my personal opinion! Overall, it’s looking fantastic! :thumbsup:

#3

Thanks you.

In the brief theere was two moon, so I needed to put 2 moons on the image. but i tried to not put them too far away from each other. They work a bit better closer.

#4

Great to see a new matte from you Bence! The two moons works ok IMO. Its a difficult concept to pull off but i think you did it well. Im viewing the on an iphone on the train so its difficult to see details, but the overall atmosphere looks good. Will have a proper look when i am back at my computer.

Hope this means we will see more new work from you soon! :slight_smile:

Nick

#5

Hey,

Here’s my 2 cents

  • Composition: The right corner is dead, the eye focuses on the first 60% of the image.

Idea: flip the image and/or move the moons to the right, and flip only the midground hill+castle(structure) so they ‘point’ towards right.

  • Elements: I feel the moons are too much alike. Try making the bigger moon with another color/texture like blue or something?

  • Elements: I’m not getting a star wars feeling on this one, mostly because of the structure which looks more fantasy than sci-fi…at least for me

    Hope it helps

#6

Thanks your comments.

About comp:a starship will be landing behind the fg trees on the scene and i think it will come from right.

I changed the bigger moon, i will post it.

I have got a sketch from the structure and I used it. So it is not my design:( But I agree about that.

Now i am watching the pic on my iMac in the office and it looks too dark. At home i saw a lot of details in the foreground trees, but here it is burned out:(

#7

here is an updated version.

Changed the bigger moon and moved the central mountain a bit right.

#8

Great image :slight_smile:

I’m no matte painter, just browsing the boards, but it seems very obvious to me the your two moons have very different light sources. They’re at different colours and different directions.

cyphyr

#9

Thanks cyphyr!

yes the moons are has different dark side becouse the planet shadow. Thay have one light source.

#10

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