Jason Maguire has entered the Grand Space Opera 3D.
Latest Update: Final Image: Final
Here is my final image submission, just want to say a huge thanks to everybody that has offered me critque and encouragement.
This contest has been a great amount of fun for me and a huge learning experiance aswell. I’ll definately be sticking around to see some of the great works (far better than mine) you guys are doing turn out. 
Hi guys, I’m looking forward to participating in this. I’m working on the story and concept art now. 
Whats that over there? Cried Jotham as the ship ran ashore.
A blue glint in the distance had caught his eye.
Jotham was an explorer, he had travelled far to get here. Many dismissed the rumours as myth, but Jotham was not easily swayed.
Could this be it? He said, dusting off the find.
Poseidon
A large crystal, too heavy to carry lay in the sand before him. It shone with a light brighter than the heavens themselves.
The myth of Poseidon was one long told in Jothams homeland. A dark tale of wealth, power, betrayal. And of death. Long considered to be Merely a cautionary tale told to scare children, Jotham always believed otherwise.
He ran back to the ship and grabbed some raggedy rope to tie around the artefact. As he began to hoist it backwards he became hesitant, the implications where troubling. But nevertheless, he felt this something he must do.
He took the crystal to the wisest men of the lands, who with careful study informed him that this object, this object of supposed myth contained the very knowledge and power of the gods themselves!
With this discovery he vowed that he would create a civilisation of nobility, of wisdom. And so the city of Atlantis was born.
Jotham gathered together the finest leaders of the land and created a chamber of elders to rule the city.
Centuries passed and the crystal provided the inhabitants of Atlantis with many blessings, eternal life, wealth, science. In time the city towered larger than any other and rested upon the ocean itself.
But Jotham was not happy. The inhabitants of Atlantis had changed, greed and power had begun to corrupt them. Soon the other elders decided that with there power they could conquer the world itself.
Fearful of what he had created, Jotham journeyed to the highest tower of Atlantis and thrust his dagger into the crystal, destroying its power and the technology it fueled.
As the city gently sank into the ocean, the elders gathered around the crystal to see what could be done, but it was hopeless.
Many escaped to the stars to begin anew. But the elders, remorseful of what they had become remained in the chamber, and accepted their fate.
Still very rough at the moment, working on it!
Thanks for the welcome Fahad.
hey, nice concept you got going on … though, maybe it needs to be in space? you can just change the setting and it’ll stay just as good (even better, since this is what the challenge asks for)
back to the concept:
i think it’s great, i can see lots of rubble falling from the ceiling, and we wittness this from inside the chambre (and perhaps looking out into space?)
maybe people trying to escape (except for the elders)?
like the mantle/table and crystal, though maybe even exaggerate the size of the crystal compared to the people, make it huge! it is symbolically, might as well illustrate that symbolism physically (artistic license)?
anyways, keep up the good work! 
your modeling looks awsome! I really am looking forward to seeing this piece unfold!
Should make water inside the room, slowly filling the chamber up.
Thanks for your comments!
though, maybe it needs to be in space? you can just change the setting and it’ll stay just as good (even better, since this is what the challenge asks for)
I think you’re right, I’ve adjusted the story so that alot of them escape to the stars which would mean that this marked the beginning of a galactic civilisation. So I could show a bunch of ships escaping through the large window.
Honestly I prefer it where they all die but I should really stick with the contest theme. 
heh … yeah i can understand that. would be nice to work on as a personal project one day … ?
anyways, keep up the good work.
cheers
hey man, you’re very good. those are really nice models you’ve got there …
one area to work on:
the ears, specifically the area nearest to the face, it looks like the ear has been glued on rather than blended into the head. (i.e. it looks like the ear is a forign object) hope that makes sence. also the top part of the nostril, looks a bit like it’s been pinched from the inside of the head, though perhaps it’ll look ok when it’s finally textured.
keep it up.
cheers
the ears, specifically the area nearest to the face, it looks like the ear has been glued on rather than blended into the head. (i.e. it looks like the ear is a forign object) hope that makes sence. also the top part of the nostril, looks a bit like it’s been pinched from the inside of the head, though perhaps it’ll look ok when it’s finally textured.
Hey you’re right, I’ll put more work into those areas.
Many thanks for your comments.
Hey guys, havent updated for a while. Im back to work now.
Made a start on the body, Ive modelled him straight into his pose to make the wrinkles easier to model. Not entirely happy with him at the moment, any suggestions for improvement?
I’ve put together a very rough render to get an idea of how it’s all fitting together. I’m redesigning the exterior at the moment, please ignore the horrible buildings I put in the concept.
hey eagle, i’m glad you updated, was getting worried that you might have forgotten 
the model of the old man looks great, my only crit would be that the shoulder doesn’t look natural (maybe a little too rounded and/or large).
and since he’s old, i wouldn’t give hime the stance you’ve given him now.
meaning: the back of the man should have a long curve, instead of a sharp curve at the bottom of his back (now his stance looks like that of a young and healthy man in his 20s or 30s) and even if they had superior medical technology, his age would still show in his stance.
hope this makes sence.
keep it up.
cheers
edit: ok here’s more or less what I mean:
Some nice work here Jason…I agree on the shoulder,it’s pretty minor.I think the scene should still be opened up a touch at least.Widen up the room a bit,and then make the window/opening even wider,opening up the skies and BG even more so…Jut some thoughts for you…All in all you are doing some nice work here,I like it…Keep it up…
The material has a very “heavy” look to it which i like alot, do you know what I mean by that? The way it’s rippled and stuff. Infact it reminds me of the bit in Star Wars where Hans Solo is encased in lead, or frozen or whatever.
