Erik Solem's WIP Critique thread

#1

Hello Everyone! So I am in the process of giving my illustration portfolio a complete over-haul. This is one of several WIPs that I am currently working on that I hope to polish up enough to put into my portfolio.

This piece is part of a larger personal project that I have been working on for some time now. The girls name is Lily and she is my main character. She is a badass, cool and calm when it comes to terminal force. But she also struggles with self loathing and depression from having to rely on violence to survive in a harsh world. Ok so I would say that this piece is maybe ~70% done. The background is still very rough and the colors don’t really look quite there yet. Im not happy with her face yet either (which I would like to be the focal point). Looking at it now I also see several tangents I can fix. So please critique away! Thanks!

#2

I might be kinda late but thought you would still want some feedback :slight_smile: Its a nice draw, I can’t even draw a beautiful circle :arteest:

In the first quick view of your draw something felt off, something a little strange, upon paying attention to it I could notice it was the pose, I can see that the main idea was that Lily did a quick and clean cut into the enemy’s head, thus beheading him, that’s a nice concept! :slight_smile:

But here’s where the strange takes place, I can see from Lily’s pose that she had just done the attack, and her body still has the momentum from that quick attack, so I would expect her hair to be pointing to the opposite direction of its current position, the enemy should still be holding the weapon because the attack has just happened, and his head should still be in the frame, maybe falling off, but nonetheless still in frame.

In the other hand, if you drew the enemy’s weapon falling off with the main idea that the attack happened perhaps seconds ago, that would explain why his head is not in the frame, but if that’s the case Lily’s ponytail shouldn’t have momentum at that point, and her body should be resting in a different position.

Nonetheless great job with the illustration! :slight_smile: