I touched up my entry again because when I showed it to my good friend who was also my former art lecturer, he pointed out an area in great need of further development: the water! Now he has proclaimed it satisfactory, so I am finally at rest!
I copied and pasted the story and poem here because its part of the requirement.
No Peace Within
I have committed the greatest and vilest of sin:
I have brutally tortured and murdered my kin.
My being is stained with their blood under my skin,
And my soul will not rest for I have no peace within.
A giant knife carries me through the sea of blood,
Many dead hands push me past the sickening flood.
I am brought to a place built on the bodies of my kin,
They brought me there for I have no peace within.
I tried to resist with the knife in my bloodstained hand,
The corpses of my family persuading me to land,
While the crows mock me to wear my dignity thin,
My heart is already broken for I have no peace within.
I know I am here for all the things I have done,
I have come here to revisit my crimes one by one.
They are waiting for answers to redeem me for my sin,
Lest I fail, I shall never have any peace within
This is a story about a boy who murdered his whole family. He bordered on insanity and to save him, the ghosts of his family whom he killed, brought him to this strange world made up of their own corpses. There, he will revisit his past and its connection to his crimes in order to solve the question of his intention to kill each member of the family. Along the way he will face his own demons and his journey to salvation is only beginning.
Okay, I gotta resubmit my final TIFF file now. Sorry for the trouble, administrators!
Oh, a BIG thank you to you all, especially Walrus, Paperclip, individium, Mason_Roberts for your constant visit and crits! If I have forgotten anyone here, a big thank you to you too!
Long live The God-Rays Club! See you all at the next challenge!