I wonder if u can connect both the characters the child, dog and the woman holding the map, hmmm :? I think that would help even more the piece! Good stuff though David!
The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: David Revoy
The boy, the dog add depth to the image, expressivity to the image, ça depasse tout mes espoirs.
I like it this way a lot. Now, just one thing: the girl and the boy are not connected. What I mean, is that they don’t seem to be related one to other, maybe if she was looking at the boy (or the boy looking at the girl) it would give you complicity and people would know that they are together in this Journey?
(il me rapelle remi sans famille, je sais pas pourquoi XD).
Very good, one of my favs in the challenge, no doubt
edit: aah j’ai vu le motif /me va faire pareil de son coté, tiens, quand j’aurais un truc plus elaboré
How about merging some of your ideas. You could turn the girl around coming our way, with her upper body half turning as she releases a bird. The boy looking up, delighted with the scene. In tune with the house-nest locale. Be careful about cutting the boy’s feet.
Is it necessary?
Don’t know what you think about about turning the blacksmith around and move him away a little bit from the frame if there is any room.
I would go like some have suggested, and open up the scene by moving the 4 houses and the back edge, but not the tree, to the right. I also have to say that I’m not a big fan of the duplex house on the right.
Finally the sky needs to be lighten up and turn it a little bit to the blue side.
Other than that…great entry. Keep it up.
love your style, dont think there is anyone here who does these funny houses and faces like you did. cheers.
Absolutely beautiful work David, this image is progressing at a wonderful pace! :buttrock: The addition of the new characters brings a lot to the overall story!
Matt
Wonderful works, David =) I´ve watched that your first WIP was a snail-house and I was working on a snail house too hehe but you did it before:) .
Now it seems that you´ve changed the concept. If you take again the snail concept, I´ll stop my idea cause you put your work on march 1st and I put on march 10th. Even I didn´t watch to your thread until now (sorry,hehe) I think it´d be fair as far as I´m concerned.
Good luck artist! =)
Zalo
Hey cool stuff David! Your picture has a very unique style that I find very refreshing. I’m really sorry I haven’t checked your thread more often, seems I’ve missed a lot since i last posted here :sad:. Keep up the good work!
Most Fantasic Ever! But Whose Journey Ist This? The Boy Or The Girl? Better Decide 5w+1h First Where? Who? What?,when?,why?+ How? Story Frame Describe About The Whole Concecpt Love It To See It Finished Soon (more Flower Pleaseee…) Have A Great Happy Day( Not Daze Haha)
beelow I wonder if u can connect both the characters the child, dog and the woman holding the map, hmmm :? I think that would help even more the piece! Good stuff though David!
Connecting them all will be easy cause they are all drawed with my style, in my universe, so (lol) it will be the simpliest integration for me in the word. But I have in mind that I have a lot of work !
Jori The boy, the dog add depth to the image, expressivity to the image, ça depasse tout mes espoirs.
I like it this way a lot. Now, just one thing: the girl and the boy are not connected. What I mean, is that they don’t seem to be related one to other, maybe if she was looking at the boy (or the boy looking at the girl) it would give you complicity and people would know that they are together in this Journey?
(il me rapelle remi sans famille, je sais pas pourquoi XD).
Very good, one of my favs in the challenge, no doubt
edit: aah j’ai vu le motif /me va faire pareil de son coté, tiens, quand j’aurais un truc plus elaboré
Hi Jori,
You are right about the sight of the girl, but a simple “turn of neck” sometime force to change the entire position, that’s why I emit some reserve about this future changing // not evident. For remi , now I focalise a lot on this.
I find my character design to much “cowboy” or “Indianna Jones”. May be I will change it to a more traditionnal fantasy approach ( Link > Zelda / chronotiger / dragon quest / secret of mana ).
jayday How about merging some of your ideas. You could turn the girl around coming our way, with her upper body half turning as she releases a bird. The boy looking up, delighted with the scene. In tune with the house-nest locale. Be careful about cutting the boy’s feet.
Is it necessary?Don’t know what you think about about turning the blacksmith around and move him away a little bit from the frame if there is any room.
I would go like some have suggested, and open up the scene by moving the 4 houses and the back edge, but not the tree, to the right. I also have to say that I’m not a big fan of the duplex house on the right.
Finally the sky needs to be lighten up and turn it a little bit to the blue side.
Other than that…great entry. Keep it up.
Thanks for give your help, but some of your proposition didn’t go to the ‘secret direction’ of my illustration. Thanks again to took time to write me all of this message.
warpy love your style, dont think there is anyone here who does these funny houses and faces like you did. cheers.
Thanks a lot Warpy, you said me a very beautifull compliment with your post.
mmbenya Absolutely beautiful work David, this image is progressing at a wonderful pace! The addition of the new characters brings a lot to the overall story!
Thanks a lot mmbenya, with this words now I’m more sure of keeping this character.
GonzaloGolpe Wonderful works, David =) I´ve watched that your first WIP was a snail-house and I was working on a snail house too hehe but you did it before .
Now it seems that you´ve changed the concept. If you take again the snail concept, I´ll stop my idea cause you put your work on march 1st and I put on march 10th. Even I didn´t watch to your thread until now (sorry,hehe) I think it´d be fair as far as I´m concerned.Good luck artist! =)
Hello Zalo,
Feel free to use your idea , about snail house, I’m not the inventor of the snail house in the world for sure and ideas fly everywhere and are made to be shared. I see your thread , you make a good work
GaeasHerald Hey cool stuff David! Your picture has a very unique style that I find very refreshing. I’m really sorry I haven’t checked your thread more often, seems I’ve missed a lot since i last posted here . Keep up the good work!
Thanks GaeasHerald, what you said about my style is unique
dzygn Most Fantasic Ever! But Whose Journey Ist This? The Boy Or The Girl? Better Decide 5w+1h First Where? Who? What?,when?,why?+ How? Story Frame Describe About The Whole Concecpt Love It To See It Finished Soon (more Flower Pleaseee…) Have A Great Happy Day( Not Daze Haha)
Your request about flower is recorded and will be apply soon, I have to devellop some concept. For explanation about story, it will come at the end.
AWaqas Lovely, everything looks cute!!
Thanks a lot for your message !
Hi !
I take some weeks of reading here thread and not continu mine, Cause I was in trouble with my way to paint it. I discover in the Walrus’s thread gold of knowledge, and this make me want to try a same technic with outlined colored and a work layer by layer. Here is my lineart for this new project. Comment’s and crits are ( -as you should know in my thread,lol- ) welcome.
I don’t really think you had to start all over again just to try my technique! In the end, it’s the results that matter, not necessarily how you get there, and your pictures have been really looking nice and have great color without getting there the absurd way that I do. And at this point, you reeally have to be more concerned with just getting to the finish line rather than taking the scenic route, imho. There’s not a lot of time left!
That being said, good luck!
-mike
Thanks Walrus for your post,
I usually draw comics and colorise them with CMYK and keep my outline for the Black channel. That’s why, I had a hole between my 2 kind of work:
My cg works, all on computer
My comics work , all with lineart but black.
I have the lack of 2 tips I found in your thread, it was the outline colorisation ; and a depht layer. Other colorisation techniques ( shadows/light/color layers ) I made to colorise some page of my comics.
For this contest, I started with the big nail with house on the back with a lineart equal as my comics work. I forgive the project cause I was unable to keep a black outline and I wasn’t interrested with the rendering . For the second I paint directly on one layer the outline and all. My rendering get more and more blury with time, and now look as a big pizza of pixel :wise:.
I start all again, cause with the colorisation technique I will be more fast than to finish the old one. And rendering interrest more me to finally start to do a reunification between my comics / illustration style.
So thanks again for this tip, it’s more bigger for me than you can expect for sure, cause it will resolve with time the problem of “drawing schysofrenia” between those 2 differents styles I have.
Thanks, I’m here more to learn than to challenge. I hope you will win all and more cause you merit it.
Sincerely - David
Here is a first result of rendering with a layer technique. I have now to detail them and work the reflect of water, and some details as moon / main light. I have too to work my outlined colors and finally details / details / details.
Hi, I want to say that this looks very nice! However, it looks like the boat is rowing on clay/sand. I assume you have not finished this part yet, but I point it out in case.
I like the scene… reminds me of my Enid Blyton days.
Ah, I see! Well great, I’m glad that my thread has been so helpful! And thank you for saying such kind things about my piece…
Okay, so have I buttered you up enough so that I can make some constructive criticisms about the new composition? First, it feels like the end of the journey to me: She’s almost as that cute little house and there’s all that space behind her to the right that looks like she’s already travelled. Fastest solution I can see is simply flipping her boat horizontally. You wouldn’t even need to flip her necessarily - don’t some poeple row boats while sitting backwards? But right now it looks like the boat is heading left and it might help tomake it travel right.
Secondly, is that the moon in the sky? Or it that another round plant growing off of that root-bridge? If it’s the former, perhaps moving it more into the sky so that it’s not touching anything could help? And if it’s the latter, coloring like the other plants could help.
Anyhow, good luck, and glad that I could be of any help!
-mike
hey david,
a few years ago i took these pictures, its a house shaped like a bird, it might be good refrence or inspiration for you. imo it fits your style perfectly. its a funny story i found this house while i was doing a trip and the lady of the house invited me in while i took pictures of the place. her husband is the designer of the house, he is also an artist on his own.
this is the WITCHES room, thats how they called it
msg me and let me know if you like or not. i can remove this post if it clutters your thread
cheers man.
Hey David.
First of all, you have really nice stuff here - I love your shading and coloring. Very nice work.
After being implored by Warpy to give you the opinion I said to him about the current WIP, I agreed, so here it is:
Though it is all very nicely done, we all saw that lately the judgment in these challanges is very originality, idea and message oriented - and not mostly technical and artistic. I find it hard to title the current wip as “the journey begins”. It seems very little like a BEGINING of something, and more like an end - looks like she got where she was looking to get to…
So, I hope this helps.
cheers.
very nice painting and i love the style. It looks a bit flat at the momment though. Maybe fade the background elements more. apart from that though it’s really cool. good luck with this.