The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: David Revoy

#81

man I really love your painting style it looks great!

but I understand your wanting to change everything to get everything right…

keep at it…

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#82

assafk: Hey man, I watched your work at the DSG and I loved it every time
This is a great concept! I really like the atmosphere… It looks like a great journey…
As for the color version:Theres some shadow on the main character, coming from the bush in the foreground, and it bothers me a bit… I think there sould be more light and wormer colors on this character, and more shadow and colder colors on the snail.
Maybe a tree in the left part of the painting, so some shadow will fall on the snail?
The snail stands out more than the elf and IMO it should be the other way around.

Thanks assafk, I hope one day I will can re-train my self in the DSG Training Room but for the moment I’m too busy since chrismass ! Thanks for your advices, they will find a great application in my way to follow the WIP. Thanks again.

slickgreekgeo: Looks great so far.

Thanks !

DoInferno: Hey, this is getting really interesting! I liked the look with the colors. Linework is great also!

Thanks a lot, sometimes, I start to loose trust in my work. Poeple on this challenge are very very talentous, and it’s not evident when I arrive to keep trust in myself in watching some other thread for exemple, thanks !

Slav: this looks soo wholesome!hugs the snail hmm slimy…

to hug this snail ? only if there is a lac / a shower / or a bath ! :smiley:

Cyberone: its looking very nice indeed!!i hope you keep the fun cartoony feel!!ill keep watching!

I hope I will not disapoint you with the painting steps. To keep the comic style when I do modeling is very hard for me, I try but… I always arrive to a “cute sugar pseudo reality” , so a bit far from cartoon. We will see in some weeks :slight_smile:

warpyy: love the 90’s tv cartoon style

So we may be could be good friend :wink:

calisto: omg this is amazing! the colours are beautifull! this reminds me…did you watch howl’s moving castle…? i’ll be watching this!! its so cute!!

Thanks Calisto ( beautifull nickname), I will try to command this film, and will say you later what I think of it in PM.

Dominus: great ideea and nice sketch!

Thaanks !

ragdoll: This is looking fantabulous! I also noticed that people now a days are using creatures as mobile homes! Looking forward to the final render! good luck! -rj

Thanks ! For mobile homes creatures, one of my first idea was to make them live “inside” the shell of the snail, but after I imagine a night, the slimmy walls… beurrrrkkk. On witch animal would you prefer to place your mobile home ?

RedSquirrel: hey this is great, I really like your colour test so far and theres a nice atmosphere to it. I like the element in your original concept sketch with the driver of the snail getting angry with the person passing by but it seems to missing from the line art and the colour test.

Thanks to remind me it, this is the second main point of my drawing and your right, I let it a bit unexpressive on my line-art.
(line-art witch is my favourite milestone, cause It’s like when I draw my comics :cool: )

#83

GaeasHerald: You don’t waste any time do you? The color test looks nice, it really fits the look you’re aiming for. In my opinion, some darker tones in the middleground and foreground could inject a bit more life to it. Thats as far as I can crit it. Cool progress.

Thanks a lot about tones, I will apply this during the coloring/modeling. Keep give me good advice, thanks , and thanks a lot.

jpedro: great concept Deevad. the colors are great too. i also very much liked the rich guy in your very first concpet sketch and his angry little look. i think that is quite important from a story telling point of view and hope that this wont get lost in your final image. but this is already magnifique!

Thanks, I will work this characters , and maybe totally redesign him, cause for the moment it was just a rich angry face. I will make sketch soon. Thanks again !

Loris_ : Sweet! The main character’s looking nice. Cute and nice expression; i like the eyes. I have no comments for this… i’m just waiting to see it with colors keep up.

Thanks Loris, you will see that I redesign this character, I hope you will still like the new version ( a bit “foxy” ).

mmbenya: Hey David, excellent looking updates! I like your choice in colors a lot. Also great greyscale modeling. Matt

Thanks Matt, I was really shy and worried to show a “cross step” of my grey modeling ( it’s so “…” compare to all the quality in this forum, it’s make me a bit sick only to think of it , but your comment about this greyscale image make me recover my happyness . I hope you will appreciate the new design.

Norvman :man I really love your painting style it looks great!but I understand your wanting to change everything to get everything right…keep at it…

Hi Norvell, thanks for the understanding of my plan of mirroring all. I have a lot of things to change about composition, and a lot of suggestion I was not agree will be entered in consideration ( as this [famous now] problem of perspective. Thanks again, and I hope you will be there to help me in my future sketch milestone for all the other design.

#84

Hi Norvell, thanks for the understanding of my plan of mirroring all. I have a lot of things to change about composition, and a lot of suggestion I was not agree will be entered in consideration ( as this [famous now] problem of perspective. Thanks again, and I hope you will be there to help me in my future sketch milestone for all the other design.

[color=Lime]yes I’m here for the duration… finding lots of cool stuff to watch being created

just do me a favor and squezze a bit of time to crit my Journey entry in return…

I honestly will apreacheate the input…

I’m not as far along as you are yet but I’m getting there…

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#85

You def nailed the character, very good. I think that you may hav used a bit too many colors, although it’s colorful, it could be distracting with so many colors. Still, that’s unfair to point out at this point, as it’s unclear if this will ‘work’ with the rest of the image. Great work regardless. Looking forward to more.

#86

norvman : [color=Lime]Yes I’m here for the duration… finding lots of cool stuff to watch being created just do me a favor and squezze a bit of time to crit my Journey entry in return… I honestly will apreacheate the input… I’m not as far along as you are yet but I’m getting there…[/color]

[color=Lime][color=Orange]Ok , I will wait to have 30 min of pause in my work to read yours in total and take time to “take” your project in mind. ( it ask me a lot of concentration, to arrive to feel the other WIP, and a bit difficult for me to give right advice if I don’t read at all.) I wish you will understand it. Thanks to answer so fast.

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slickgreekgeo You def nailed the character, very good. I think that you may hav used a bit too many colors, although it’s colorful, it could be distracting with so many colors. Still, that’s unfair to point out at this point, as it’s unclear if this will ‘work’ with the rest of the image. Great work regardless. Looking forward to more.

Thanks, you are right for colors, for the moment I just put pure area colors ( took from my color test ) up on a grey layer for modeling, this color layer help me to take in consideration the tone “value” of the colors, in the future I will work only the saturation and brightness in other layer. It my way to work, each things and each step. Your WIP took a great way , and I will take time to read all and participe to it. I verty appreciate your presence on my threade, Thanks!

#87

I like started out on this with major ambition,so my original idea had too much detail. I in turn had to simplify just to keep with the time constraint. Luckily with your progress, I think you’re in the clear. It looks amazing and I’d like to see all the details once you’re done, so good luck and amazing speed.

#88

I’ll def be paticipating in this thread, as you’re a great artist. And starting with a greyscale like you did IS a good idea (if you see my WIP I constantly change the color tones and values, so in the end it’s probably more time consuming if you start with colors first).

Looking forward to more!

#89

Very beautiful! I love the colours. Great work!

This is progressing wonderfully!

#90

I dont know what effect are you trying to reach, but I’d add some more realistic textures to the painting.

I don’t like toon-like pictures at all - maybe that’s the problem :wink:

#91

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Ok , I will wait to have 30 min of pause in my work to read yours in total and take time to “take” your project in mind. ( it ask me a lot of concentration, to arrive to feel the other WIP, and a bit difficult for me to give right advice if I don’t read at all.) I wish you will understand it. Thanks to answer so fast.

[color=Lime]well if you hadn’t noticed I haven’t been getting may comments on my stuff yet… coarse I really haven’t gotten past my concept stage yet… so…

plus you don’t have to stop now to go comment on it… wait until your done if you like…

keep working on this one it’s shaping up great! :thumbsup:
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#92

Nice work, I like the lineart a lot, the colours are yet to faded to say anything but the lineart rocks :))) Keep it up David :slight_smile:

#93

Great start.I like ur color.:thumbsup:I love sketch.Cool.Good luck CG Challenges.:thumbsup:

#94

Loving those colors man. The girls looks better as well. Indeed more foxy than the child she was!! :wink: I’ll be a bit careful with the ear, cause now that texture it looks a bit weird, and also her right hand (left to us) maybe add a bit of shadow to seperate the two parts of the arm (dont know the words in english) because now it feels as one continues shape. Just a very subtle shadowing, nothing much. I like her eyes and hair. When I look on the face she seems fine but when I look closer to the mouth something is not right with the shape on the sides of it. I find it too curvy if you get what I mean. Maybe is just me. :smiley:
Oh, and you could try adding some textures for the bird or some clothing parts and accessories to make them different and more interesting.
Anyway, just few suggestions from me. Keep up the great work. I like how this is being developed. :thumbsup:

#95

Hi David

I just love the color so far, especially the bird. It’s a bit over the top saturation-wise, but perfect for the image so far.

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#96

Hi all, my great advicers,

I decide on this beginning of challenge to change subject cause I found too much “out of subject/instruction” the one I did before ( no epic background / no visual depht / and not a lot about a “beginning” but more about the way to travel ). Plus, For my first idea ; I’m now too much in affection for my original line-art, and I will simply colorise it as for young comics picture, you will find it in future month on the 2D gallery for sure. I was a bit disapointed by the painting style on this illustration. So, It’s close !

Let me introduce now one of my sketchs for future project and say me what you think of it:
my background story :

"Each time a young habitant of Tine-darel ( the village in the high of the old geant forest ) have the age to become an adult , he must goes at night and come back with one poem or proverb of 14 differents villages.

This picture show how the village behind the door look at the begin of the journey of a teenager.

My composition in spiral is here to transmit the way a journey goes and become “cyclic” (lot of days, same scenario ) but each time more near to the final aim.

Thanks for your futures observations & advices to complete well this one.
-David

#97

David,

I´m really sorry that you´ve dropped your initail concept that character design was good but I fully agree with your reasons why. However be careful. Youve now moved onto designing a very detailed environment with a story in mind.

But how can you sumarize all that story in just one image?

I can´t give you an easy answer and discovering that is alot about what this challenge is about. :deal: You need to work character and environment with the same level of detail and try to keep things simple.

Right now I don´t see where you character will fit into this composition. Also try to include in your illustration elements that will help tell your story. You need a teenager, a village, a sense of journey…

Plan these out on your sketches you have a story now study how it can be told Without words.:slight_smile:

Good luck

#98

made with ArtRage 2 - concept sketch.

#99

asbassie: I like started out on this with major ambition,so my original idea had too much detail. I in turn had to simplify just to keep with the time constraint. Luckily with your progress, I think you’re in the clear. It looks amazing and I’d like to see all the details once you’re done, so good luck and amazing speed.

Thanks, but with my project to restart, I don’t know if I will can enter very litlle details in my next. May be I will do it more “brushed”.

slickgreekgeo I’ll def be paticipating in this thread, as you’re a great artist. And starting with a greyscale like you did IS a good idea (if you see my WIP I constantly change the color tones and values, so in the end it’s probably more time consuming if you start with colors first).Looking forward to more!

My grey layer / color layer are a difficult gymnastic for have a spontaneous result. I will follow the traditionnal numerical painting way for the next one. It will be more easy to place direct value of grey/ color where I want. Your thread is becoming unique, your workis amazing, keep it up !

enialadam Very beautiful! I love the colours. Great work!This is progressing wonderfully!

Thanks ! I hope you will still like the future new project.

Drakula: I dont know what effect are you trying to reach, but I’d add some more realistic textures to the painting. I don’t like toon-like pictures at all - maybe that’s the problem

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norvman: [color=Lime][color=Orange][color=Lime]well if you hadn’t noticed I haven’t been getting may comments on my stuff yet… coarse I really haven’t gotten past my concept stage yet… so…
plus you don’t have to stop now to go comment on it… wait until your done if you like…
keep working on this one it’s shaping up great! [/color][/color][/color]

I observe each day your thread, (yes, yes , It’s true.) I will post at the moment I will be sure to can bring you great advice. Thanks for your presence on mine.

Katea Nice work, I like the lineart a lot, the colours are yet to faded to say anything but the lineart rocks )) Keep it up David

Thanks Katea, you will understand easly why I decide to keep this old project as a comic style. In painting style you are one of my reference, you paint very well and your project for thejourneybegin is great.

juniorlucky Great start.I like ur color.I love sketch.Cool.Good luck CG Challenges.

Thanks

Loris_ Loving those colors man. The girls looks better as well. Indeed more foxy than the child she was!! I’ll be a bit careful with the ear, cause now that texture it looks a bit weird, and also her right hand (left to us) maybe add a bit of shadow to seperate the two parts of the arm (dont know the words in english) because now it feels as one continues shape. Just a very subtle shadowing, nothing much. I like her eyes and hair. When I look on the face she seems fine but when I look closer to the mouth something is not right with the shape on the sides of it. I find it too curvy if you get what I mean. Maybe is just me.
Oh, and you could try adding some textures for the bird or some clothing parts and accessories to make them different and more interesting.
Anyway, just few suggestions from me. Keep up the great work. I like how this is being developed.

Thanks for your detailed feeback , Loris, I hope you will still agree to bring this type of good advice for my new one. Thanks again !

DArcy1 Hi David,I just love the color so far, especially the bird. It’s a bit over the top saturation-wise, but perfect for the image so far.D

Thanks Darcy1 !

Yone David,I´m really sorry that you´ve dropped your initail concept that character design was good but I fully agree with your reasons why. However be careful. Youve now moved onto designing a very detailed environment with a story in mind.But how can you sumarize all that story in just one image?I can´t give you an easy answer and discovering that is alot about what this challenge is about. :deal: You need to work character and environment with the same level of detail and try to keep things simple. Right now I don´t see where you character will fit into this composition. Also try to include in your illustration elements that will help tell your story. You need a teenager, a village, a sense of journey…Plan these out on your sketches you have a story now study how it can be told Without words. Good luck

Thanks Yone, you probably arrive to the moment when I need the most this type of help on my thread, it’s really sensitive approach you have to help me like this. Thanks again.
Something born in me, little by little , and I will have to sketch a lot before to find the right theme. The realisation will be not long. I’m a very fast artist and I can make easly a fully rendering detail in less than 3 days. But the theme, the right theme will be my more difficult part. That’s why I decide to experiment a lot to find it. I hope to see your futures observations on my work to help me. Thanks.

And thanks again for all messages !
-David

#100

New concenpt, hmm… Right choice, the other one had a special appeal, but it wasnt really epic. :sad: As for the new scketches, it’ll be hard to show all the story behind the picture. Probably the storyline details aren’t as important as the mood and the feeling of the piece ;). I personally like the first skecth better (the one with the treetop village) cause it less conventional than the other one. I would, however, make a close-up of the main character and the situation, which are after all the key elements. The angle in the scketch is right, but the characters don’t have enough visual weight.
Hope these comments help. Good luck with your new concept!