Very nice lineart… This will becmoe a wonderful piece! Hope to see it in color soon…
Keep it up
The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: David Revoy
Awesome piece…I have no critique for you. Just cannot wait until it is done. Good luck.
An experimentation about colors. I try to find great value and work without add black to much in my colors.
The last colortest you did, makes a warm impression…
nice little details, especialy figure in the window…
Keep it up!
Looks good. I agree with the black. you should try avoiding too much. If you are going to use black for the foregrounds I think you should add some dark values of color in the background as well just for balance maybe.
I really like this! It’s really happy and has a great atmosphere.
Now I have a warm fuzzy feeling inside…
Great progress Deevad, about the foreground I agree that it is better that you avoid blacks, being preferable deep reds or greens. total black kills the image while deep tones enrich it. I think the small river is maybe too straight. Othrwise the image is getting fantastic. Keep it up.
Very nice sketchwork here, I really like the idea.
I see some people already commented about the viewers perspective, I think it would be a stronger piece if you put the snail more to the background, so the whole of it becomes visible (with the tiny figure of the owner beside it) so the main character gets more attention. Also maybe making them walk uphill (so the snail would have an even harder job going forewards) would maybe bring your main theme more to attention.
Mr Mu :
Man… this must sound silly, but I am really touched. This is so cool. Because this will be a terrific painting when it’s done for sure and to have that detail makes me somehow part of it.Thank you. I would also like to say that this is absolutely rock solid lineart. I absolutely love it. Did you use PS or Painter ink tools for this? Just curious. It’s coming out great and enchanting, just keep going.
Your welcome for the detail, and for my lineart technique I use a 0.3 black liner on a A3 to make it. After scan I made correction with photoshop and a simple round brush with pressure. I will make 100% my lineart on computer when I will buy a “pen display screen” but for now it’s to expensive for me.
mmbenya:
That is some very tight line art you have there David, great work! The idea of having the home on and in the snails shell is a really sweet idea. I will certainly be looking forward to seeing this progress.
Matt
Thanks, I will try to do it with the best I could.
jsn : Looking very nice Deevad!Heaps of detail!jas
I will try to add more details in painting without putting too much, it will be hard and painting will be long !
GaeasHerald : Excellent details man! I can’t wait to see color on it. Oh, and you’ve added a totally new scale to the picture . I also think the composition looks just right. Keep wips coming!
Thanks for your advice, it’s totally gave a new breath to the deepness of this illustration. I will try to remember in my future drawing to place more human for scale element , it’s a good tip.
beelow : Cool to see u have ur lineart up dude, good luck with finishing ur entry!
You are right, the more difficult will be to finish at time Now I’m in few holliday so , it’s appear me simple, but it will be less simple when I will start strong job !
Climax : Lovely! I Like the idea, and sketch and lineart are wonderfull go for it!
Thanks ! but now I found the head a bit big in my lineart…
Lync : Polished lineart already! I am impressed. Great concept, beautiful feel to the piece. I love it.
Thanks, the sentence who impressed me the more in my work was from Ryan Church who said in an interview that good pictures are only good concept/design in a pleasant composition. I try to follow this sentence guide. Not so evident as it seams to be …
sh@ke : holly~ur line art is tight mate~i’m looking forward to see some colors soon
Thanks friend.
oceanbluesky : Can’t wait to see this colored! Also agree with another post which suggested a change in the viewer’s perspective (which I think you said would be changed in Photoshop?)…this is really excellent work. Also you do such a good job sketching the face of the female character in the foreground it would be exciting to see other characters’ faces and expressions more clearly…like the little guy steering the snail and the fellow peering out a side window. Good luck!
For expression , It will come / It will come The most work I have is to done it . For the point of view , I just decide to keep the first and make more illusion of a more down camera with lowing background and put up the main character. I hope it will be good. Fondation of drawing are important.
Poshspice : This is fab David! Really tight linework. With some colour you’ll be able to bring out the more important elements of the pic and pull the viewer in. It’s a really fun image.
I try to done it, but color is not my cup of tea. Thanks you to appreciate the fun of my picture.
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Thanks for your comments ! They give me the energy to continue.
MichaelMotion : The last colortest you did, makes a warm impression…
nice little details, especialy figure in the window…
Keep it up!
Thanks, the character at window will be fun.
Loris_ : Looks good. I agree with the black. you should try avoiding too much. If you are going to use black for the foregrounds I think you should add some dark values of color in the background as well just for balance maybe
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Thanks Loris_ , It’s a good advices and I will try to take care of them.
paperclip : I really like this! It’s really happy and has a great atmosphere.
Now I have a warm fuzzy feeling inside…
THANKSSS ! The best comment I could receive :):love:
Ramitxon : Great progress Deevad, about the foreground I agree that it is better that you avoid blacks, being preferable deep reds or greens. total black kills the image while deep tones enrich it. I think the small river is maybe too straight. Othrwise the image is getting fantastic. Keep it up.
Thanks Ramitxon, this advices are great and I will try to apply them the most.
yoitisi : Very nice sketchwork here, I really like the idea.I see some people already commented about the viewers perspective, I think it would be a stronger piece if you put the snail more to the background, so the whole of it becomes visible (with the tiny figure of the owner beside it) so the main character gets more attention. Also maybe making them walk uphill (so the snail would have an even harder job going forewards) would maybe bring your main theme more to attention.
Thanks to took time to read the comment of the others too. It’s a real mark of attention I appreciate.
I understand a lot this illustration could be stronger with another point of view, but I must carrefull about something : If I try to make too much underline the bigness of the snail, or try to put distance between them, I risk to go totaly outside of my main subject.
Object in this scene follow more desire of a composition and a story, than the construction of a true perspective / point of view. The “flat” rendering of the scene is here to give more the effect of an old illustration for chidren. So, the big snails should keep a fun in the picture and not a place too much mpressive, cause it a secondary element.
I don’t want to go in the sens of 3D with a too much techniques witch impose a lot of artistic restriction, That’s why I take this permission of little deformation to have more the result I look for.I hope with my WIP you will can see where I want to go with those type of choices.
Thanks again to advice me with details your wishes, it’s more hard than to let a standard message and I really like it. So sorry to can’t go in your way of advice.:shrug:
Wow David! That looks brilliant! I love to see you being ‘like me’ in terms of ‘loving that pittoresk feel’ of buildings. I mean that ‘Miyasaki-style’ with little houses, lots of details, lots of romantique, feeling of ‘a place being lived’ make some art really pop out. And your concept/idea is being one of that!
The snail looks really cool: a nice expression and lots of ability to put nice textures there. Also it looks like ‘that it could be real’, in terms of construction. I really love the ‘sunny mood’: it gives the image a kind of ‘summer traveling’ feel, which is very nice!
The way you interact with ‘the posters’ is really nice and kind, as there are not really so much entrants anymore who really response to comments or critique.
All the best! I’m watching you! :wip:
-Gijs
Well that is just so cute ! Are you going to leave it in the colored-in line art look, or go for a more “painted” look? I think painted would really be nice, the image has a real 19th century feel to it …
D’Arcy
Hi David,
Damn bro, youre already coloring?!?! Youre flying through this challenge! Anyhow, I think your image looks really nice. The color test looks good and at this point its the most important thing to make everything in your image come together. I actually like the outline look but a painterly look could work just as well. My only crit is the black leaves and bushes in the foreground. Maybe you could add some blur to them to intensify the depth of field? It may not look right since it is line art and could mess up the consistency you have going. BTW, beautiful work on the small details. Th image is definitely one you have to sit back and explore. - J
Totally delightful! Great imaginitave concept, wonderful drawing and colour.
Gord
Dutchman : Wow David! That looks brilliant!
I love to see you being ‘like me’ in terms of ‘loving that pittoresk feel’ of buildings. I mean that ‘Miyasaki-style’ with little houses, lots of details, lots of romantique, feeling of ‘a place being lived’ make some art really pop out. And your concept/idea is being one of that!
The snail looks really cool: a nice expression and lots of ability to put nice textures there. Also it looks like ‘that it could be real’, in terms of construction. I really love the ‘sunny mood’: it gives the image a kind of ‘summer traveling’ feel, which is very nice!
The way you interact with ‘the posters’ is really nice and kind, as there are not really so much entrants anymore who really response to comments or critique.
All the best! I’m watching you! :wip:
-Gijs
Hi Gijs, you touch me a lot with your comment, your words about “pittoresk buildings” / " Miyasaki-style" is typicly what I try to have in effect. It’s you identify it, it’s personnal winning from me. My spring of inspiration are in 3 video-game of my childhood, [color=Yellow]Secret of Mana (Seiken Densetsu 2 ) , Zelda on SuperNes/Nin64 and Final Fantasy 7 on PSx/Pc, I was totally took by those video game, and now my dream is to transmit this optimistic and sugar fantasy mood into my illustration and my comics.
You are really sensitive about what you write, and thank you to follow my thread, it will give me energy. And I will do my best to answer each comment. Thanks again !
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adel3d : great progress.it is obvious that the work will be awesome.
Thanks adel3d, I will try to go the more far I can in my techniques / feeling / mood to make the point about my young carreer of illustrator.
DArcy1: Well that is just so cute ! Are you going to leave it in the colored-in line art look, or go for a more “painted” look? I think painted would really be nice, the image has a real 19th century feel to it …
Thanks for 19th century style I really grew with Alphonse Mucha paintings , and the hat and dress of this period. I really find a beautifullness to this period ( in europe ). Ha if I could be a painter/drawer in this period ! For the color question I will make it down here. Thanks to understand it and to read the answer to Mecha Hate Chimp. ( I do this to not repeat myself
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Mecha Hate Chimp: Hi David,Damn bro, youre already coloring?!?! Youre flying through this challenge! Anyhow, I think your image looks really nice. The color test looks good and at this point its the most important thing to make everything in your image come together. I actually like the outline look but a painterly look could work just as well. My only crit is the black leaves and bushes in the foreground. Maybe you could add some blur to them to intensify the depth of field? It may not look right since it is line art and could mess up the consistency you have going. BTW, beautiful work on the small details. Th image is definitely one you have to sit back and explore. - J
Thanks, I really apreciate your work when I started in Daily Sketch about mid-November of 2005 , I remember you drew a good concept during the monkey period, if I’m right. So name in Cgforum that sometime I can make mistake. And more cause your pseudo & avatar have “monkey” idea in… All of this make work to much my memory…hum…hum…
Thanks for “your flying”, but it’s mainly cause of hollidays of 4 days I have now, (that’s why I have time to do it ).For my black outline : I took the decision to not make them, and to paint over, it will take more time, but I don’t want of a comic style for this one. I want a painted style, with a bit of “pastel effect”. Your idea of the blur for background totaly resolve a problem I had, [ I’m to shy to ask in the forum “what I should do ?”] . For the black in front, I will transform it with painting over dark tones, this blacks line will be goods guide. and thanks a lot for your sentence :"Th image is definitely one you have to sit back and explore" It is unbeleivable how this sentence can be pleasant to receive after spend some couple of hour to start something.
Gord MacDonald : Totally delightful! Great imaginitave concept, wonderful drawing and colour.
Gord
what I can answer to this… Oh ! yes! I remember : THHHAAAAANNNKSSS GOORD !
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Haa… If frontier could be less far, I surely would to invit all of poster to have a drink at home … it would be surely sympathic party ))
Just wanted to let you know how much I’m enjoying your concept and watching your illustration progress. Your line work is wonderful, and I’m going to bookmark your thread to see the end result.
Great start David! I’d just bring the human/elf forward a little more in the composition. Even if the snail is important to the journey, some part must be dominant… The alternative is to bring the snail forward, making him and everything on his back the main focus. Then add a few human/elfs or other charcters nearby as the supporting part of the story.
My my you really work fast :eek: ha ha ha good concept about how long will be the journey with the slow motion of the snail