The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: David Freeman

#141

Thanks emptyparenthesis…

Your comments are fair enough and no i’m not angry by your opinion. I worry too about overdoing the image and I have removed some of the clutter, but have to say that I like the robot. I feel this adds another dimension to the piece which I didn’t want to be just a study of three children. It will all make sense very soon!! :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

Thanks again Beelow…

It’s been a busy week, but it’s 7pm over here in the UK, so I think I’ll settle on down to a good few hours on this

More soon

MrFreeman :slight_smile:

#142

Hey ok…You know your job. I don’t say don’t put that robot, i am just talking about execution you see…There is a very good mood which is hard to catch…THis robo is missing it completely. At least i felt like that… Waiting impatiently…:bounce::bounce::bounce:

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#143

Better and better, you’ve got a great command of color. Foreground elements and kids are reading well. The robot is’t quite there yet though. Needs to be tightened up a bit. The tree on the left is creating some tangencies with the girls back pack. Maybe consider knocking that back a bit. Other than that this is looking great. Very dreamy.

#144

Just move the elbow down a bit on the left-hand fella’s arm and you’ll definitely be on your way. Is he munching on his hand, by the way?

It’s turning out beautifully, I love it! Your stuff in general is really inspiring to me. Carry on. :slight_smile:

#145

Thanks emptyparenthesis …your comments make complete sense and I hope to work on the robot more, once I’ve finished working on the background. It does look a little cartoony, so I’ll sort this… :slight_smile:

Thanks also anticz… again - the robot is being worked on… I’ll have a look at the tree tonight as I see your point… great advice :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

Cheers Theresa (paperclip)… mmmm…The fella is actually a girl, but I’d better make this more obvious!!! I’ll also have a look at her elbow, thought this okay… as far as her hand, I liked the idea of her deep in thought, hands in mouth as kids do.

I’m working on a new update and will post when I feel it has solved the background and other points (especially thosed mentioned)

more soooooooon… :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#146

Hey - lovely light. I’m imagining the time of day as twilight, so the characters are about to head off beyond their tea time and into the excitement of the night.

Perhaps a few more visual cues would add to the sense of journey they are about to undertake eg: a hint of a mountain range behind the tree on the left or a key / map / or having the book open…?

love the tiny robot :slight_smile:

Q

#147

:slight_smile: :slight_smile: Thanks QUILLS

great ideas - I’ll definitely use them… new wip is really coming along, so will post Very soon…

freelancing until Wednesday, so I’m working late nights on this so progress may be a little slow today, but should pick up - especially as there’s not long left!! :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#148

I think I’ve finally cracked the composition and feel that it’s working at last.

Sometimes I overcomplicate things, trying to use weird and wide angle perspectives - and this is one image where this is not needed.

I had a brain wave with the ruins in the mid-ground area which adds depth and links foreground and background. I’m just sorting out the travellers pathway / route and I’ll be getting close to the final composition (which is a good job bearing in mind time left)

#149

I think I’ve finally cracked the composition and feel that it’s working at last.

I would agree.

I’m still diggin’ the robot.

Fantastic work…can’t wait to see it finished! :buttrock:

#150

Cheers OliveBeard…

Thanks for the comments…

My freelance job ends tomorrow, so I can then spend a couple of days solid on this thank goodness as time’s running out.

No more comping woolly rhinos…hurrayyyyyy…

#151

It looks great David… Lovely bold use of colour!

The foreground bits of ruin do exactly what you say. They add a whole heap of depth and the perspective helps draw the eye to the kids and the cool little robot. My only small crit would be that the girl on the right seems quite far forward (and big) compared to the central boy and the robot, but she’s low and the robot overlaps as though he’s in front of her. Something about their relationship doesn’t sit quite right. maybe if she was turned a little or overlapped the robot as though she was in front of him but turning to look… i dunno… whaddya think? Is it just me…?

Good luck getting everything finished.

#152

:slight_smile: :slight_smile: Thanks Jonny… I think you are right about the girl… I would make up some story about she’s half giant or grows fast for her age, but instead I’ll probably scale her down a wee bit.

Not sure about turning her face to look at the robot as it took a long long long time to make her look human in the first place and I don’t think I’ll get time, but we’ll see…

Great advice :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#153

The illustration is really interesting and has mood. The kids look so sweeet :slight_smile: Good luck with the finish !

#154

Thanks Wojtala - glad you find it interesting…

lot’s more completed last night, but thought I’d get in another evenings work before posting…mmmm…time’s running out very fast… :slight_smile:

#155

Hi David :slight_smile:

Your piece is looking absolutely gorgeous - the colours are wonderful and bring such a life to the painting, also the perspective on the background is spot on. I’m sure I couldn’t add any advice since your clearly know what you are doing :wink: but just thought I would cheer for you!

#156

:slight_smile: :slight_smile: Thanks Elsie…

Locked away in a darkened room with only my wacom for a friend (no I’m not that sad really), You’ve made my day with your cheering…

I least it looks like I know what I’m doing (even if I’m not entirely sure)… and I hope the final image will be worth the wait…

:slight_smile: :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#157

Hi David! I really like your latest changes in the composition. I think the background carries a great load of meaning here. And therefore it seems to me the ruins in the mid-ground area must be more interesting (forms, textures etc.) In my view it looks a bit simple now. Good luck! :slight_smile:

#158

:slight_smile: Hi Sergey… Thanks for your comments…

I think you are probably right about the ruins and I’m working on this at the moment as I have actually got a day off…

Unfortunately I’ve got so much work on at the moment, that getting to finish this is proving rather tricky…

More very soon…promise :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#159

Bit of a crazy week, so have not got as far as i’d hoped, but here is where I am at the moment.

I’m starting to work in details without overdoing it as I like the painterly feel and don’t want to loose this quality.

I’m currently working on the ruins and clouds and will update soon…

All comments really welcome at this stage

#160

Again very neat’o stuff, David! :thumbsup: :scream: Its good to read your freelance project is about to be finished, so that you now can fully enjoy this one! :twisted:

About the composition I was ‘worried’ about: its getting really more interesting now, as there now are becoming two points of interest! :slight_smile: I think that -once its finished- this piece of art is the most justified on a big print, as you then can study the different ‘points of interest’ (just 'my way of thinking :wink: )!

All the uncoutable very best for the next 9 days! :scream:
-Gijs