The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: David Freeman

#121

Beautiful. All new changes really works. This coming out absolutely great!
I’m looking fwd, good luck David.

#122

:slight_smile: Thanks notpill… having feedback makes it all worthwhile…

It’s been a busy night and I’ve nearly sorted the characters and appreciate all the great advice which has certainly helped.

I’ll try and post an update v. soon :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#123

Wow, some stiff competition up here. Good luck.

#124

Cause of English proficiency,my ideas is difficulty to express. But, I like your concept and the color very much, specially the middle boy! hope the succeed! .

#125

:slight_smile: Thanks anticz - your comments are really appreciated :slight_smile:

Thank you chinabear - I understand perfectly - and as far as your English - if only us Brits were as conversant in so many languages as half the creatives on this site!! :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

I’ll be posting an update very soon - I’ve ammended the girls hand / arms and added a lot of extra elements. I’ve also moved the robot and changed the angle of it’s head (thanks paperclip), so the relationship between characters is stronger.

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#126

Still a lot to do, but I’ve updated the characters so hopefully the proportions are more accurate.

I also have moved the robot to the right so that he looks closer to the children, as well as altering the angle of it’s head, so that it appears to be looking up at the boy.

I have added a map onto the table which I like, but would be interested to see what all you creatives think…

It’s a busy week at work, but I’ll try and get something more posted soon :slight_smile:

#127

Nice work David. I think when you had the map visable where we could see what was on the map was better. It drew the viewer into the story so we could be there with the children and almost share the experience.

Looking forward to more updates.

*Ed

#128

Thanks Ed…point taken about the map. :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

I suppose the map makes things a little messy on reflection, where as last night it seemd to add some depth. Well I’ll have another look at this tonight (if only I didn’t have to work!!).

Anyone think the proportions of the girl on the right are looking better??

#129

Hi David, your entry is looking gorgeous, i love the lighting, so warm and inviting! The kids are all looking great too the little girl on the right looks like she’s missing a bit of skull at the back of the head, if where the hat connects at the top of her head is anything to go by, either that or the hat needs adjustng just a little along the top line, I’m not sure. Her arms look fine to me, though maybe the bottom line of the coat is throwing people off, as it might look like that’s where her waist in too?

I do like the addition of the map, but loved the glowing lines on the table from your last entry, they added a really mysterious feel to their journey, and if they were actually lit (via magic or other means) then even in shadow you’d be able to see them (if not moreso), so you could illuminate them on the right hand side of the book and compass. Or maybe you could have glowing lines on the map?

But it’s looking gorgeous so far. Keep up the great work!

#130

:slight_smile: Thanks for your comments Zephyri…

I’ll have a look at the girl’s head - I did paint her without a hat first, so it could be just the way the hat is positioned.

That map…mmmm… I’m working on that…

Thanks again for the advice, etc… :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#131

fantastic atmosphere, love the piece. keep on goin, great style and great mood. rock on mate

#132

the kids look great , adventurous bunch of little people, good job dude :thumbsup:

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#133

Not a great amount of changes, but I noticed the boy didn’t have one of his arms because of the way I had painted the children (and they overlapped where I thought the arm should be). So I’ve added that and also simplified the foreground as it was looking to busy.

Still a few details to add, but time to focus on the rest of the composition…

#134

It’s looking good David.

I like the map/table now. The girl on the right looks better with every update. On examining her a bit more maybe her head is too big for her body or her body needs to be wider. :hmm: I’m not sure really.

*Ed

#135

Great work, your color palette is incredible. The lightning is particularly well done, you’ve got a winner in your hands.

#136

:slight_smile: thanks EdP-Art… your comments are really appreciated…

i think I’m going to focus on the rest of the image, then return to the characters a little later - I know what you mean about the girl, though it’s partly because the children I used as reference are younger than they look beacause of the way I’ve added all their garb and younger children’s heads are bigger in proportion to their body (well I think that’s true from sketches I’ve drawn and if not, not a bad excuse??)

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Cheers slickgreekgeo… you’ve made my day with that comment… better get on and finish this soon!!

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#137

this is looking better and better man, i stil llove that robot i think he/she/it really adds a lot more to the image. and im digging the left girl, her little hand in her mouth gig is cute, great job so far =)

#138

:slight_smile: Thanks for your support adonihs…

Glad you like the robot - I’m thinking along the lines that the robot is the some sort of shaperone (is that how you spell it?), guiding the kids on a dangerous and exciting journey into unknown territory.

I quite liked the idea that this journey was an assignment - homework set out for the children during school / pre-school holidays.

The ancient ruins in which they stand mark the edge of the unknown and clues as to what path to take adorne the ancient stonework, along with artifacts spread out on the stone plinth in the foreground.

Busy day at work today, so I’ll have to wait until tonight to carry on :frowning:

More soon :slight_smile: :slight_smile:

#139

I felt i must post something to you cause i am watching your work with a great inspiration from the begining…All the stages of your process are very good differently each other. Also very artistic…Taste of your work is always good but when you detailed it, i think it is broken a little… Especially i didn’t like the robot in the middle…this is as someone put it there to sabotage your job…There is a different approach breaking apart of your whole work… I hope you don’t angry to me:shrug:…Anyway, This is one of my favourite…congrats…:thumbsup:

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#140

Starting to look really impressive dude, keep it up, I so love the those children! Much can be said with the poses of those children!:thumbsup: