The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: Cliff Cramp

#21

this may be a silly question, but what is the thing connected to the boat that crosses the rope? is it something coming out from the pier?

love the mysterious fog. reminds me a bit of the great mouse detective.
~B

#22

This painting reminds me of American Tail, LOL! Cool painting I’ll wait to see what u do next dude!:thumbsup:

#23

yeah first thing that popped into my head was american tail… excellent composition and values… really excited about this one. keep up the good work. no crits

#24

Its part of the Ancor

#25

That´s what i thought…

Yeah, PACKRATS :cool:, like it already.
The ship however should be viewed from a lower angle and the rims you used on the characters are too strong imO.
They´re getting off the ship, aren´t they?

Great :lightbulb:

#26

I’ll fix the perspective of the ship in the next pass. Working out the foreground and background shapes still

#27

hey niceee …micee… looking very good man good luck

#28

Nice work, i like your painting you have a great style, the soft fog covers lot of detail specially the water surface. keep up.

good luck,:thumbsup:

#29

That’s a funny concept, but I’d move the frame lower. If you cut of the top, the viewer will still be able to say that the thing on the right is a ship, and that’s because the viewer will still be seing the other ship in the background. :slight_smile:

#30

That’s cool. Good use of distant blues and warmer foreground. Maybe the rope could use a bit more perspective.

#31

Thanks everyone. I’ll work on some of those suggestions.

#32

Another small update. I still have to work on the ancor.

#33

I had an idea like this in my mind too :slight_smile: Looks cool :thumbsup:

#34

Hey, Cliff, nice strong shapes in those comps.
Have to admit, though, that i get confused about the direction of travel. Compositionally I would guess that the 2 mice are getting ready to board the boat. The addition of the figures in the lower right supports that… But I keep reading their body language as the left one lifting the right one up from the rope, so they are travelling left and away from the boat… like a journey ending. I’m not sure what you could do to their bodies to make it read more clearly, but I suspect you want the motion to read as rightwards-bound…

Good luck!

-mike

#35

walrus makes a good point… i suggest amking the mouse on top of the rope arm straight so it seems he is lowering the mouse down rather than bent like he is lifting a weight. also the lower mous could have his body twisted away from the supporting mouse with afoot on teh wood. just a suggestion. may not work but in my mind tahts what i would do

#36

Thanks everyone for the comments, I think this helps to establish the going instead on coming.

#37

wow stuart little to the rescue! thats cute., gudluck :slight_smile:

#38

haha, i love the concept! always loved the idea of little heroes , i’m gonna keep watching this one!

#39

It definitely does, what a simple and effective solution :thumbsup:

#40

Agreed. Good fix, Cliff!

-mike