Hello all!!
I and my friend Charu have recently started work on our 3D short film which is the final project of our course.
At this point we estimate this film to be 2 mins long and we have around 3 months to finish it (while learning maya simultaneuosly). I’ll post the character sketch and colour scheme tomorrow.
Please guide us to better the story, and shorten/tighten it if possible(as we want to have a short one so later quality in prodution is not compromised due to time constraints).
CONCEPT : How a girl who is obssessed with eating realises her mistake and starts on
the correct path.
SYNOPSIS : About a fat little girl who eats all the time and anything she can put her hands
on, even her dreams are filled with icecreams and candies.
She is busy stacking her bag with food and misses her school bus one morning.
Turns into a super-girl to fly off to school. But she is unbale to lift off due
to her fatness. She gets glimpses of her eating all the time, in weird and
unimaginable situations in past. This makes her realise the down side of over-eating
and she walks to school droping all the stacked food items from her bag and pockets on
the way.
STORY : Toffees, icecreams, doughnuts, lollypops, gems, etc. are floating away upwards in an endless space. Holding on to the tip of an icecream cone is a very fat girl, also floating weightlessly with the food. She spots a colourful lollypop and tries to reach for it when suddenly there’s a loud sound of an alarm. (The scene ends abruptly with a pop)
The alarm clock is ringing on a table. A hand slams on it to turn it off. As the hand slides lazily off the clock, it lands on a bunch of chocolates scrattered on the table. After taking a moment to feel what is beneath, it quickly snatches a bunch of them.
The girl is standing in front of a bathroom mirror, sleepily putting paste on toothbrush, hardly managing to keep her eyes open. The chocolates can be seen stuffed in her pajama-top pocket. She takes the toothbrush to her mouth and eats up the toothpaste off it, chewing it blissfully.
Now she’s dressed for school and is packing her bag. Lifting her over-sized lunch box she shakes it to judge the content. Finding it very light and small she’s gives a grumpy and irritated look to it. Now we see her sitting in front of an open refridgerator, throwing all sorts of food items (burgers, icecreams, cakes, etc.) into her school bag. The bag, like a magical hat, takes them all in. School bus honks outside just when she takes a whole cooked chicken out of the fridge. She takes it and forces it in the now stuffed bag.
She runs to the bus which leaves seconds before she makes it. Out of breath from the small run and dissapointed she just watches it fade from view. After gaining composture she looks to the left. Then to her right. Then looks behind with a naughty smile. Nobody’s around. She lifts her right hand in the air and swirls around turning into a Super-girl (a cape and mask is added over her uniform). Happily reciting ‘up up n awaaayyy…’ she closes her eyes and tries to lift off the ground. Upon opening them she finds herself still on land. Wondering, she bends to gives a better thrust to the lift off. ‘Up up n awwaaayyyy…’ But is still on ground. Tries many quick jumps but fails each time. Now she’s really wondering what the deal is. A thought
bubble pops up into which she looks. It shows images of her from the past, each labled on the bottom right with the date and day. In them she’s snatching food from a dog, eating noodles while in toilet, holding a chocolate bar safe out of water while showering, putting outrageous amount of cream in her shake, stealing from her dog’s bowl, snatching mangoes off tree in a famous indian animated film ‘Ek Anek’, etc. The rolling images seem to be never-ending.
This makes her realise the reason and regrets not being able to fly to school.
She walks off in the direction of school dropping off on the way all the food items she had stuffed in her bag. A crab is thrown too, which bounces close to camera and gives a blank blink.
THE END
Any critique will be greatly appretiated!! Do tell even if u think it’s crappy…most of u know oceans more about it than us. We can still change the story if required.
