I’d push the refraction of the glass panels (at least 1.5 refraction), the underwater caustics, and some fog for the water. Bluish fog that gets bluer the farther away you get. She seems a little unbalanced in the composition. Maybe that’s the camera angle or some lens distortion.
Steampunk Myths and Legends Entry: Sabrina Bott
warpv
#302
Good morning Sabrina! Yes, I’ve finally updated my thread, probably not with what you were hoping though… But yeah, your new updates, wow, this is really heading the right way! You will be ready to cross the finish line soon on that steam-trike of yours! 
If I only have a few comments, I feel the pipe to the right somehow doesn’t have the same perspective as the tunnel…is that possible? Also, the lady is looking a bit sick, with her white as sheets skin! Maybe play around a bit with color tones for her skin to give her a little more life! Besides that, all the other little things that were mentionned, bubbles, etc…will all add greatly to the final image. Can’t wait to see it!
Lemog
#303
Last changes are good for me…enough dirty things on glasses… about more details, as Roshan said… bubles will be the last next good addition :wise:
You know… the cloe up view is very very good… I like much… for the final, maybe something between the both will be better, not ?
especially good to see the quality of your models :applause:
daWinky
#304
Hey Roshan, yep, bubbles are noted and I’ll play around with the smoke color - thanks:) !
Nicolas, hehe, and the progress is also as slow as the evolution:D …thanks for your visit!
Hey Nathan, you’re right, there is a camera disortion, but it’s consistent for all the scene elements, so she should look ok perspective wise:shrug: …Thank you for dropping by!
Oh Christopher, just seen Your “update”:hmm: …I’m sorry about it, but I’m very sure there will be a next challenge and I hope to see you then! About the pipe, it’s all rendered with the same camera…It’s just not parallel to the construction, perhaps I should change this? And the Lady is a victorian Lady (no sun, umbrellas…), and a redhead (always pale)…and she looks healthier than me atm:D …but I’ll see if I can play around with the colors…Thanks a lot for your hints!
Hey Lolo,
I’m not sure what you mean, to take just a clipping of the whole scene as final?? Beside of that I’m of course happy to hear that you like it:cool: …thanks!
I go and paint some bubbles…
-sabrina
warpv
#306
Hey Sabrina! Somehow I just felt the pipe should be parallel to the structure. If I had built a structure like that underwater…I’d have run the pipes parallel to the tunnel itself, not in all sorts of direction…I don’t know, just nit-picking really!
And about her skin color, it’s true, after all, she DOES live underwater…I mean, how much can you tan there…really… But she does look quite sick…maybe just a bit more color to her skin…maybe they have some sort of Victorian style tanning booths down there!!!
Womball
#307
The glass refraction would look great on the curve surfaces. It would probably have to be rendered as a seperate pass though.
daWinky
#308
Morning Lolo, oh yes, thanks for the overpaint, I see…and agree that this looks more interesting, unfortunately I’ve just rendered out the size to meet the guidelines…this would be too small then and I doubt that I can render it again and make all the postwork in the remaining time:hmm: …but this would certainly be a framing I use for my personal gallery…
Christopher, I’ve adjusted the pipe a bit, not really parallel, but almost…a compromise so to say:D …
And you make me unsure now about the skin , I really think she’s all right, but I have a look on it on other monitors, just to be sure:scream: …perhaps it’s the blue-green tint that makes her so unhealthy…thanks again for the critical eyes!
Nathan, well, it’s architectural glass with good settings for reflection and refraction and I just got the results I wanted:) …perhaps it’s better to see in the previous, more clean renders…And how do you want to show the influence of refraction in a seperate pass, it’s about the interaction with the environment after all…
Again it’s not possible to update:banghead: , still server problems it seems, so I try it again later…very annoying, I’m meanwhile so blind for this picture, that I’m desperate for feedback…
Have all a nice day!
-sabrina
Lemog
#310
Morning Sabie… I understand now that risk to be short to change a lot… anyway, your framing is good… I’ve proposed that because your characters desserve to be saw more close… the both are very well made :love:
but of course, an image could have a second life after the challenge :deal:
Nice day for you dear…
daWinky
#311
Hey Konstantin,
It`s great, I love it!
This is exactly the comment I need now to keep on painting:D , thanks for your support!
Hey Lolo,
but of course, an image could have a second life after the challenge
a second life, hehe, that’s good and I count on this…and I also heard people saying there is a life after the challenge, I’m looking forward:D …don’t know how you can stand the constant challenge and workload of the expo project:scream: and the challenge video on top of this…
Still no upload possible, I don’t want to wait for the resurrection of the server. so here is again the whole composition so far and a detail shot…
Enough stuff for the outside? I think I should start to work on the trike…
-sabrina
Sorry for the big pictures, I remove them and make a proper upload as soon as this is possible again…
Lemog
#312
Just 3 little remarks :
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bubbles too strongly visible… too much bubbles ? too large… too sharp… and maybe some particules everywhere in the water… as little bubbles, plancton, little flying/floating material… not too much visible… but a rich living water…
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outside objects… for me, just need few plants between glasses and pipes… (as vertical stripes… don’t know the name…)
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it missed something on the floor, front of the vehicle… but don’t know what for the moment… an object… but or course in report with the story…
Nothing more to add for me… it’s near now… the pics come beautiful… really… 
Sincerly… I don’t know too 
huhuhu
Lemog
#313
maybe I know what objects could fit… a water bucket and carbon bag…
or a water pipe with a tap, and a water puddle pool on the ground…
Your vehicle need something to work, not ? :wise: hihi
madshooter
#314
I agree with lemog. Bubbles are too strong right now. Maybe reduce the transparency in photoshop or something. Overall its getting better and better. Great job:thumbsup:
daWinky
#315
Lolo and Roshan, ha, thanks, you are my rescue here:love:
Ok, I make the bubbles more discreet…and Lolo, I guess you think of some sea weed, good idea…for the front of the vehicle I can only think of some more pieces of luggage…but a pipe with a tape is also nice…I see what I can do!:arteest:
-sabrina
antone-m
#317
been a while since my last reply here …was away for a while but am here now watching your amazing updates as usual no crits just keep going
warpv
#318
Good morning Sabrina! It’s coming along nicely! Now…where is that “I agree with Lolo button”…I can’t seem to find it! At any rate, Laurent’s coments were dead on. I also like the luggage idea. And where is that Victorian style umbrella…?!
The outside for me is looking pretty good, but I feel like there’s a bit missing to fill the inside of the corridor…it’s looking a bit empty still.
Did you change her skin…?! Cause in the close-up view it’s looking better! Maybe it’s just playing tricks on my eyes!
Anyway, keep it up, you can see the finish line!
daWinky
#319
Lolo, so I just put some more bags there if I find the time…of course in style;) !
Weee, Tony, here you are again, I’ve missed you around! Thanks for the ‘keep going’, I’ll do my best now for one more day:bounce: …
Hey Christopher, I’ve not really changed the skin, just played with the overall tint - good if you like her better now:) ! And yes of course, the luggage…the hallway is a little empty…I’ll add the bags if I can quickly make something that looks good, but it’s just a kind of gangway after all…
Last update for today follows, so I have a little time tomorrow for the very last additions:scream: …
Wish you all a great weekend!
-sabrina
daWinky
#320
OK, still no upload possible:banghead: , I hope it’s not just me, but I can’t enter the submisson page…
so again a detail shot and the whole scene, most additions are only visible in the high res…
as always crits and suggestions are very welcome!
-sabrina