First of all, thanks for the comments. They are being quite helpful.
I am considering on adding some more artifacts on the scene, but I think I will keep the bird on his hand.
Not really a child. He died when he was 24 years old, so he looked quite young
It’s hard to get “whitish” materials without looking incomplete (although yes, this is incomplete ) From the references I find, usually royal male moroccan costumes are quite frugal, not much embroidery or such. And the materials look quite rough, natural. But I intent on putting that kind of details.
I found one nice white costume (I don’t think it is moroccan) which I like in terms of tones. Let’s see if I can get the link.
Hopefuly the image will get more consistency as the details start to sit together in the objects of the decor. And for that I have some references too, but need to understand how they will work as a group. Even if it will part too far from the theme, it’s allright. I need to practise anyway
Very nice progress, Joana! I am loving the costume. I think it will be cooler if the figure has some mechanical hand to add to his mystery. Or a mechanical bird perching on his arm. Or even both.
Nice progress! Are you having fun with this challenge?
Dear Jerome: I was indeed thinking of a mechanical bird. But maybe that is too obvious? I will be happy just to finish this, I am not worried anymore to being faithful to the Steampunk subject.
I am having fun, and I would like to have some time to the “other” challenge as well
I am trying to find the time to continue with it. Sigh. I have been feeling very exhausted lately. Wondering where all my energy has gone to.
I also love to join the other contest. It sounds more fun to work on!
Maybe the guy can have a mechanical body? Maybe that’s why he was missing during all those years. Mechanical body stuck to a mechanical chair keeping him alive as he issues commands from his ‘throne’.
I think you can work a little bit more in the geometric composition. The table on the right I think is a little bit to far from the main subject (character), doing a second action area and distracting a little bit IMO (I think that pillar on the center\background devides the two action areas). Maybe a more close composition can help, doing the main focus on the character and all the props\assets with a more low profile.
Maybe this painting can help on the translation of my thaughts (composition and lighting).
É raro fazer críticas, só as faço a pessoas que percebem o que digo!
Feliz Natal para ti!
Bj,
-Malanjo
It’s looking nice so far. I love the texture on the face, very weathered and period. Malanjo has some good points on composition. I think you could also do some unifying of the color palette too: Right now that table is easily the most saturated thing on the page. I find it grabbing my eye and calling attention to itself and away from your main character. You might consider trying some warm colors for the background elements and/or darker lighting in that area to keep the focus on your protagonist.
Also, you asked is making a mechanical bird is too obvious? No, the whole point of this challenge is to do something Steampunk. No offense, because it’s coming along really nicely, but so far you’ve completely missed the mark on that score. I think the mechanical bird is a great idea, otherwise, why are you in this challenge?
This reminds me of Vermeer’s paintings. Very serene and calm. His arms look unusually short though. Kind of like midget arms. I think the upper arm needs to be elongated to at least 1.5 head height, and the forearm about 1 and a quarter heads. You could probably get the same pose by bending the longer arms too.
That’s what I call constructive criticism guys! Thank you. Precious stuff here.
Malanjo: great suggestion (beautiful painting), good composition, gorgeous light (and I love Napoleon). Thanks!
Walrus: I’ve deviating from the subject long time ago, I know that At the moment I am just focused on doing something that I like. Thanks for the input!
Womball: isn’t that something? I have a guy with really short arms here. They got shorter somewhere in the process… I wonder… :argh: Just kidding. Actually it looks right from other angles… I guess the pose and the large coat don’t do him justice. I will try to fake the arms so that they look longer.
Thanks again, going to retake my scene and think about all this.
) From the references I find, usually royal male moroccan costumes are quite frugal, not much embroidery or such. And the materials look quite rough, natural. But I intent on putting that kind of details.
