Steampunk Myths and Legends Entry: Joana Garrido

#22

Hi Joana

It looks great. Nice progress.:thumbsup:
keep it up and good luck.

Iban

#23

Nice cloth:buttrock:
Nice work:thumbsup:

#24

What’s new:

  1. Changed the camera
  2. A different lighting approach
  3. New modeling: chair, table and some artifacts

I know it is going apart from the theme (has it ever been near?), but I intent at least to have it almost finished.

Let’s see about that :stuck_out_tongue:

The clothes will be different as well.

#25

From your website I can tell this is going to be really cool,
your art is so eerie! :smiley:
Good luck!

#26

This looks indeed very promising :thumbsup:

#27

Very nice progress, Joana! I am loving the costume. I think it will be cooler if the figure has some mechanical hand to add to his mystery. Or a mechanical bird perching on his arm. Or even both.

Nice progress! Are you having fun with this challenge? :smiley:

#28

Dear Jerome: I was indeed thinking of a mechanical bird. But maybe that is too obvious? I will be happy just to finish this, I am not worried anymore to being faithful to the Steampunk subject.

I am having fun, and I would like to have some time to the “other” challenge as well :stuck_out_tongue:

How about you?

#29

I am trying to find the time to continue with it. Sigh. I have been feeling very exhausted lately. Wondering where all my energy has gone to.

I also love to join the other contest. It sounds more fun to work on!

Maybe the guy can have a mechanical body? Maybe that’s why he was missing during all those years. Mechanical body stuck to a mechanical chair keeping him alive as he issues commands from his ‘throne’.

#30

A small update: a kettle - it will be on the table.

#31

Pretty nice work on the kettle, the texture is terrific! looks like a real old object…

#32

Great stuff. I’m liking the classical portrait composition and lighting a lot.

#33

Thank you! A classical portrait is indeed my intention :slight_smile:

Ahh thanks… I just think the lower end of the feet looks too clean. I’ll try and change that.

Yesterday I did a quick test of the props on the scene and oh my… you cannot see all those details. Well…

#34

looking great so far - keep it up! :thumbsup:

#35

Very nice work so far Joana, the kettle is very convincing ! keep us updated with such great work :bounce:

#36

Main additions:

  1. Textures on the furniture, props and face

  2. Some changes on the costume (still not happy with it)

  3. More ambient light (still not happy again)

#37

Hi there Joana! Nice progress! :slight_smile:

I think you can work a little bit more in the geometric composition. The table on the right I think is a little bit to far from the main subject (character), doing a second action area and distracting a little bit IMO (I think that pillar on the center\background devides the two action areas). Maybe a more close composition can help, doing the main focus on the character and all the props\assets with a more low profile.
Maybe this painting can help on the translation of my thaughts (composition and lighting).

É raro fazer críticas, só as faço a pessoas que percebem o que digo! :slight_smile:
Feliz Natal para ti! :slight_smile:
Bj,
-Malanjo

#38

It’s looking nice so far. I love the texture on the face, very weathered and period. Malanjo has some good points on composition. I think you could also do some unifying of the color palette too: Right now that table is easily the most saturated thing on the page. I find it grabbing my eye and calling attention to itself and away from your main character. You might consider trying some warm colors for the background elements and/or darker lighting in that area to keep the focus on your protagonist.

Also, you asked is making a mechanical bird is too obvious? No, the whole point of this challenge is to do something Steampunk. No offense, because it’s coming along really nicely, but so far you’ve completely missed the mark on that score. I think the mechanical bird is a great idea, otherwise, why are you in this challenge?

Anyhow, good luck!

#39

This reminds me of Vermeer’s paintings. Very serene and calm. His arms look unusually short though. Kind of like midget arms. I think the upper arm needs to be elongated to at least 1.5 head height, and the forearm about 1 and a quarter heads. You could probably get the same pose by bending the longer arms too.

#40

That’s what I call constructive criticism guys! Thank you. Precious stuff here.

Malanjo: great suggestion (beautiful painting), good composition, gorgeous light (and I love Napoleon). Thanks!

Walrus: I’ve deviating from the subject long time ago, I know that :wink: At the moment I am just focused on doing something that I like. Thanks for the input!

Womball: isn’t that something? I have a guy with really short arms here. They got shorter somewhere in the process… I wonder… :argh: Just kidding. Actually it looks right from other angles… I guess the pose and the large coat don’t do him justice. I will try to fake the arms so that they look longer.

Thanks again, going to retake my scene and think about all this.

#41

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