Secret Agent Entry: Mohammad Ali Shakeri

#28

Thanks Mic, very good point, this is my first experience with zbrsuh and drapery, so it is kind of natural to over do things, it was looking wrong to me too, so on the last part( the girl pant) i done a better job with less wrinkles, by your suggestion i will redo the the clothes
very very thanks, please stop again at my wip and crit me

#29

first try on composition and lighting

#30

nice lighting,keep it up and good luck for the rest of the image.

#31

Here i redone the wrinkles with using a photo as reference
thanks to Mic for advice

#32

Thanks Younesfor support, i will make it better and better

#33

WooW really great work . specially your interior lighting is too realistic i love it. but you know … the scene is perfect but i don’t get anything related to Secret Agent matters . maybe you should add something like blood or guns to make it a little close to the challenge .

#34

Hi Pouria, thanks
of coursethere will be a gun, but it would be on floor , not in his hand, as my agent is after his job and a hard night, so he is resting and listening to his daughter piano playing, mine is not action or sexy, it is just a bit dramatic

i will wright a better story near the end with helps of friends as my English isn’t good enough

thanks for support

#35

That’s looking much better!! Although, I would suggest that you simplify the folds at the hip area on the pants. Sometimes, when I seek reference or set up some drapery, they tend to give me more folds, so I tend to simplify it so it just looks more pleasant. Anyway, keep going!! :slight_smile:

#36

hi there, a lot of progress, tahnks for help bro, I wish you luck, keep going:beer:

#37

Nice folds you have there. I agree with mic…if you simplify them a bit it will look even better.
About the head and hand: I’d work more on them. (wrist area especially)
Keep walking! :slight_smile:

#38

Thanks Michor , i just simplify those wrinkles, but will upload them when i have time to work on them a bit more, really happy that a talented artist like you crit my work

Hey Afshin, thanks dude, you too

Thanks Norbert ,i worked on head, wrist and folds, but i’m missing the pressure of arm on the leg, i also take the lower arm a bit longer for a better proportion ,as soon i edit that too, will upload it and looking for your crits again

#39

hmmm… i’m not glad with it
there is things wrong with it but i’m afraid of time

#40

just want to play with light and colors , as i’m working on modeling process, so everything maybe changed in future

#41

Composition crit: I think that more space is needed above the girl’s head. Try to zoom out a bit…or move the camera up. See if it looks better…

#42

Thanks to Norbert, i just give more room to the girl

next i will work on characters model, and textures

#43

hi ali,nice thread…keep going and good luck

#44

Hey it looks really good, it is all coming together nicely. I agree with nfuchs it definitely needed some space above her head.

#45

This is quite an interesting scene. I look forward to the finished product. Bonne chance!

#46

coochaki - thanks mohammad, you too

iskanderMellakh - thanks dude, on the last update i gave more space above the girl head, but by trying to zoom out or moving up the camera i will lose other things, it’s a bit tricky but i will try my best for some free space above her head on the final composite

vmulligan - thanks, wish i don’t disappoint you

#47

long time no update and at last update with this crap, sorry about that

will upload something more complete next time