Hey Dan -
That looks great! (That scene would actually make a good lighting challenge.
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It sure doesn’t look like it needs much work, I’d think just a few tweaks. I agree with gent_k that maybe the post glow could be reduced. If you want a glare to emphasize how bright the windows are, maybe the wall paint could be made a bit glossy instead?
I wonder if there’s motivation to make the lighting a bit less symmetrical, with a window visible on one side of the hallway and the other side being under a stairwell? I mean, look at the end of the hall, back right corner, the way the back wall under the stairs is bright and the side wall next to it is dark, maybe that could be reversed so the wall facing the bright window went brighter?
For the lightbulb, I could imagine it being back-lit with light only at the edges, or more reflective or translucent, but going bright along the top where it screws into the cord and dark in the center doesn’t entirely make sense.
The way that thin vertical board casts such a dense shadow all the way along the hallway is surprising for a room with several big windows. I’d focus on that, because that vertical shadow lines up so perfectly with one plank of the floor, and then the plank next to it does something Escher-like and goes from being a part of the floor to sitting on top of it, so that becomes the area that most traps the eye.
-jeremy