Project Rain Storm

#21

I see what you mean on a few points, especially about her not being proportionally tall enough. I have tried correcting this along with some things around the bust, and even some of the background elements on the right side.

Although I think she seems a bit tall, maybe its just me… Also I think the arm on the right needs to be moved a bit to the left (her left arm).

If you could please point out where there are still anatomy problems I will appreciate it and do my best to correct them.

Thanks again to everyone, you are all a great help!

#22

Hi

I did a quick paintover, but what I did was trace your wife’s picture, and overlay that on top of your painting. I rotated it a bit because in your painting she is leaning forward more than in your reference photo. I focused mostly on the centerline from her neck, between her breasts and down to her belly button, and then adjusted your sketch a bit. I ignored the hand on our right, your reference photo shows a huge hand but that is a camera focal length effect. I also moved her head down, and moved her eyes down a bit on her head

It’s seriously not perfect, but I think it shows her body better ( I gave her a slightly smaller waist just for the hourglass look)

Hope that helps

D.

#23

Ahh, a lot of what you did makes sense, her eyes definitely need to come down a bit. I am also going to work on a few things with the torso position as you did in the sketch. I might have something up by later tonight, if not then by tomorrow for sure.

Thanks again.

#24

Okay so I THINK that it turned out pretty good. Rotated her body, tried to fix the chest and HER right shoulder. I also lowered the eyes and tweaked the size, positioning of the hair a bit. I also modified the dress and actually rotated the entire figure clockwise a bit to reduce the amount of leaning forward she was doing.

The dress still needs work but I would really like some opinions now to see what other anatomy or body size/shape mistakes I’ve made. In the meantime i’m going to work on the background a bit while I wait.

Thanks again guys, can’t tell you enough how helpful you all are.

#25

Much better !

D.

#26

Didn’t change much on the figure but im tooling around with the sky in the background. Clouds need a lot of work but its getting there…

I’m trying to bring the clouds forward a bit so they are above her head, etc. not just in the distance.

#27

It’s to do with how you put the shadows on the things. I had the same trouble until quite recently. Clouds are a lot harder then they look, you just sorta have to work it out. Once you get it, it seems obvious. Here’s two shots that should help you. Panoramic stitches, both of them.
Oh and how does this attachment business work? I can’t work out how to actually show the things as a picture. The attachment limit seems to be filling up for me and I don’t like separate image hosting.

#28

coming along pretty well mate,perhaps,alil more attention on the folds and weaves on her dress(lower portion) also the grass flowing direction on the background should go with the direction of where the hair flows:)
other than that,i think Draigr has mentioned about the clouds.keep it coming mate,i look forward to see it done

#29

Hi there guys and gals. I have re-worked a bit of the sky and am still tweaking the clouds, also, I should probably mention that I want the sky to look a bit fantastical (if thats a word…) and not necessarily very realistic. I also tweaked the lighting on her face and body a bit including the hands.

Also, I’ve included a pic of the face so far at 100% size so you can get a better idea of it.

As usual, ANY critiques or comments etc. would be appreciated. (Is it me or does HER left arm seem a bit long?)

THANKS!

#30

Decided to work more on the hair today so I figured I’d throw a quick update up.

#31

Hi again

Sometimes it’s just easier to show than talk; here is an adjustment to her face that I think helps make her more real. I cheated, used Andrew Loomis’s template of the ideal female as a multiply layer and then cut and paste. Everything is the same below the nose, except I defined her jawline a bit. Hope it helps.

Cheers

D.

#32

Finally getting around to posting an update. I feel like the piece is nearing completion. I need to polish a few things:

The dress needs work still
Still not happy with the sky
Foreground needs a bit of work
Tree needs…something
Her right hand isn’t done

Anyway, here it is so far:

#33

You kow what I really love about this piece? There is just so much movement. I feel like there really is a storm coming- I just expect the picture to start animating at any moment.

#34

I think anatomy has been covered. On composition, I think you should remove her from the center and bring her to the viewers right edge of the picture. Her left arm brings the eye towards the background with the right arm continuing to bring the viewer towards the background also. Maker her pose a little dynamic. Does she really want me to come with her? Demonstrate her need in her fingers, arms, and hips. The newer pose ref picture you provided is a better pose. I love your effort. You have got a lot of great help on this picture. It’s baisically a one on one with 20 teachers. That paintover is priceless. Continue to work. You’re definetly improving. Do 2, 5 and 10 min gesture drawings from photos. I like using a magazine. Mags offer a variety of poses. Photo albums work too.

#35

I started just moving the figure around and I agree completely. I have always felt that the right hand side with the tree just didn’t seem right for some reason and moving her to that side a bit has DEFINITELY helped. I don’t have time now to post a pic but will have one up within a day or two of the new and improved layout.

Again, thanks for all the help to all of you.

#36

Okay so I’ve been doing a lot of tweaking. Moved the figure to the right, shaded and colored the ribbons, worked on the tree, finished the bush on the left (but need to move it closer, looks odd), etc. etc.

I feel like this piece is nearing completion but am not done yet, the right hand is not done along with a few other things.

#37

Okay so I fee like I’m about 95% done with this besides a few small things. I decided to post a link to the full resolution version below. The colors are a bit drab compared to the original but I don’t know where else to host it to get the colors right. Any crits are welcome.

Full Resolution Pic

#38

Her arms have allways the same diameter, you should do them thiner in the elbow zone. And I think their should be some more shadows in her face to give us a depth sensation between the nose and the eyes. I think the face is very planar.

#39

Wow I am such a slow painter :hmm:…I have been busy with a few things I have going on right now but have been working on this as much as I can. Below is what I would consider it nearly done. I have to work on the lighting on the figure around the face. I also have to tweak the lighting on the grass and vegitation behind her.

Other than that I am just about happy with it. Any crits, comments, suggestion, praise(? lol) would be much appreciated!

#40

This has really come a long way; the only thing that really sticks out as a problem is the mountains. Everyyhing about them is so soft and fuzzy, they look like clouds themselves (especially since your clouds have much sharper edges). The mountains definitely need some sharp angles and planes, like these ones.

Cheers

D.