I had some free time today, so with the aide of my friend Jarom Later, came up with a prelisten of a possible score. Of course we can’t write a score until the project is in post production, but we can toss around a few ideas to the storyboard. The audio quality is poor, I know. Final thing would be recorded in a studio, for this I just used my wireless mike. Nothing’s set in stone, but the main idea is there. The sax part especially is changeable, I just added it ten minutes ago to add some more flavor (we plan on really writing a good sax and trumpet part to accompany the piano) I put together a little presentation using the storyboards. Some parts work great, others not so great, but this isn’t really an animatic. But yeah, just a quick couple hour piece of work, showing the general idea I had. Crits are welcome as always! I hope you like it. 
http://www.dave-logan.com/animation/simplelife/prelisten.html
PS: The preloader’s a bit messed up for some reason - the percent bar isn’t working. Just let it load, it’ll start playing automatically.
Prelisten
This may be difficult to point out areas that I like and didn’t. It runs through so quickly in .swf … I can’t pause and take down notes. :argh:
First impressions: [ul][li]The intro and ending bits are cute.[]The piano in general sounds too repetitive and upbeat in many scenes.[]Reminds me of Charlie Brown for some reason. [*]Sax is a really nice addition through most of it.[/ul]
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After watching it about 20 times in a row … 
Some Details: [ul][li]The intro sequence (through scene 16) is paced too quickly and music too energetic.[]I liked the segment begining with the cube that hops away (scene 17) through the multiple hits on the wall (scene 31).[]Everything after scene 31 was a distraction because all I could focus on was the piano.[*]Up until scene 49 and 50 where it got cute again.[/ul]
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It may be easier to get a feel for the pace when we have a working pre-vis reel. But still, not too bad for a first try. Some of it is workable. If you can do that in a few hours, I’m looking forward to what you come up with by mid-July. 
Thanks a bunch, those are very good points. Yeah, I felt a little Charlie Brown vibe too, hah. Partly becuase of the tune we wrote, partly because of the octave we played it in (which is part of the tune… but oh well hah). Very true about the begining, I think we’ll eithe rmake up a new tune for it or mess around with the intro and ending bit. I agree that most of it is too peppy, but we went overboard on that because it’s better to have to pull back than build up pep. So in scenes 31-48, do you just want the piano scaled back, or both the sax and piano (and eventually trumpet)? Thanks!
oi mate well done! I just got possibility check this out and I really liked it alot! but there is some points which I would fix! there is too much of piano and its somehow disturbing it sounds like piano is in control all the time! ofcource you dont know completly whats hapenning in the short! but I would like to see lots of more variations in instruments! and if atmosphere is changing from happy to sad I would also change instruments maybe piano for happy orange and saxofone for sad! ofcourse you can play both differently but thats just me I would make difference between those 
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