Erm hi all you very good artists 
I m posting my quick version of photo no2. I can alreayd see a lot of mistakes, but I d like to hear some insight, tips and so on 
Sorry for the blotchy look, it s done with charcoal on A3, and I m not used to using charcoal at all. I m new to it.
Cheers all 
boeser_Wolf,
Great to see you here! Iām glad you found the OFDWs!
I think you have a great start hereā¦the proportions so far look really good. The main thing I would advise you to do with respect to painting is to focus on values, which it already looks like you know how to do, and to start with an overall darker tone for the figure so that you will be able to go darker in some areas and lighter in others, giving you as broad a range of values as possibleā¦what you donāt want to do is to go too light too soon.
Good luck, and I look forward to your update!
Tamara,
So sorry you are feeling under the weatherā¦good lord, no need to apologize!
I think youāve done a great job fixing the perspective of the stairsā¦much better, thanks to Mike for his help! I think also the fabric is starting to look great ~ particularly the purple fabric ~ thatās awesome! I would just work on bringing the other womanās toga up to the same level of rendering.
I would say that you shouldnāt leave the photo in the bkgrd ~ this should really only be a placeholder and a guide. If you would rather not paint such an elaborate bkgrd, I would just fill it with a color or some clouds or something which you paint, and remove the photo ~ it detracts from the lovely painting job you are doing, and makes the overall picture look like a pastiche, which you do not want to happen.
The left figure in particular looks great, I think there is still something just a little funny with the bottom of the hair ~ perhaps if you reduced the severity of the angle, it would be better.
The right hand figure has further to go, as I think her proportions are a bit offā¦her legs are too small for her upper torso ~ remember to always get the proportions worked out before āclothingā the figuresā¦it may be helpful to create a Photoshop layer and rework the drawing there, then use that as a guide for the overlaying of the clothing.
Watch the area under her right arm, and I would reconsider the drawing of the armpit area thereā¦your left hand figure is very well~drawn and resolved, and I would just focus on bringing the right hand figure up to the same level. This is quite a tall order for just two short weeks! I really commend you for tackling both poses at once!
Great work so far, and I canāt wait to see your next update!
fooxoo,
Great to see you here! I think your drawing has some really great qualities ~ the proportions are pretty good, and you have a nice touch with the charcoal. Do you work digitally at all? You are more than welcome to paint this either digitally or traditionally (tho you certainly donāt have to). Looking forward to seeing more of your work!
Cheers everyone!
~Rebeccak
I just saw a posting about these threads on the Concept Art boards today and am very happy to participate. It looks like a great learning opportunity and this is one area Iāve been lagging on. Thanks very much for putting it all together!
There are many inspiring sketches and paintings on this thread and itās great to see so many styles represented. Iād like to learn how to look more painterly with my people paintings.
Hereās my painting of the first photo. Now that Iāve finished, I can see a few problems. Her left arm/shoulder seems a bit off, as does her bum and perhaps the hair. I also think the knee could use some more work. Are we to fix and repost?
Amerasu,
Welcome to the forum! Weāre glad to have you here, and itās great to see your work!
This is definitely a WIP forum (we are housed under the main WIP/Critique: 2D, Illustrations and Concept Art forum, which means that you are absolutely encouraged to post work, get feedback, and post updates ~ itās what weāre about.
Iāve checked out your website, and you have some really nice stuff there! Iām happy youāve found our little corner of the world.
There are some really great things with your painting so far ~ her hands, right arm, upper torso, buttocks, and right foot are all independently well~done. Fabulous job on the hands, you are to be commended!
The problem areas are the head and neck ~ which I think need just a bit of tweaking to make work ~ and the lower right leg, which looks a bit small with respect to the rest of the figure.
What I always recommend to folks with respect to the head, particularly when it is covered by a mass of hair such as is true in this case, is to draw the head and neck as they attach to the rest of the body before adding hair. Right now her head looks a bit too squashed down on her shoulders, and I think if you were to draw a light outline of her head (without hair) and neck on a new layer above your existing work, you would see that her head needs to be a bit rounder and ride a bit higher above the shoulders.
The lower right leg, unlike the rest of the well~rendered musculature of the body, looks a bit sickly and weak by comparison ~ I would just reconsider the drawing in this area, and add a bit more structure to beef up this particular area of the body.
Another thing I think which could make this very good piece even better is to soften some of the existing edges. Currently the majority of her body has a rather hard~edged feel which I think would benefit from a bit of softening ~ not too much, but just a bit to simulate the soft focus effect of a camera.
Overall, you have a great looking piece here, and I really look forward to your update.
I also hope you will join us for OFDW 004, which runs through next Monday. However, all OFDWs remain open on a continuous basis.
Cheers!
~Rebeccak
shyamshriram,
Wow, you have been working so hard! :bounce:I think your first drawing in particular is really striking, and the second one is quite good as well. 
Great stuff, do you plan on painting either of these?
Cheers!
~Rebeccak
:love: Thanxā¦yeah i just started to study Anatomyā¦im trying, and yesss i want to paint it nowā¦BOTH, will try to post ASAP
Thanx for watching
Shyam
Thanks very much for such an in-depth critique, Rebecca. Itās all very helpful to me and Iāll take your suggestions and fix her up! I will definitely join everyone for OFDW 004 this week.
shyamshriram, your sketches are lovely! I especially like the first one you did. Itās very substantial. Iād love to see it painted.
The fixed version. Thanks for the suggestions - very helpful stuff and now I think the painting is definitely improved. Her right knee could use a bit more work now that I see it in preview but Iām going to call it done for now.
Amerasu,
Great to see your update! The edges and the shape of the head have definitely improved ~ great work there! The extra work on the foot is really nice as wellā¦it really helps to bring a bit of grittiness and reality to the piece which I like.
Your color scheme and general color environment is beautiful, and suited to the subject. I love the sort of fawn~color environment which you have carefully built up in the figure and in the bkgrd. Really nice work.
The one thing that I would say about this piece at this point, and I can completely understand if you would like to stop at this point, is that the lower half of the body ~ eg, the buttocks, legs, and feet ~ look as though they belong to a slightly larger person than that which is suggested by the upper torso, arms, and head. I think a slight adjustment in scale might help to really finish off the piece, and tie it together. However, I think you have done an excellent job, and I really hope that you will join us for OFDW 004, which still has this and next week to go!
Great job, and thank you for all of your hard work here!
Cheers,
~Rebeccak
Heres my atempt. Im trying to start drawing on some real paper, since I have been drawing to much on the wacom.
I dont have a scanner or a digital camera, so I had to use a VCR camcorder.
Thats why the quality is top notchhhā¦
Comlock,
Nice work there, thanks for posting! The upper torso and head are especially nice. I feel the lower torso and legs are a bit too big, but overall this drawing has a very nice line quality to it which I enjoy.
Just to let you know, you are more than welcome to post work here, but we are currently onOFDW 004and will be starting OFDW 005 this Sunday or Monday. You are welcome to join us there!
Cheers!
~Rebeccak
Thanx for the critiques=) I see what you meanā¦
oh, I didnt know that. Ill participate in nr 04 then.
How do I find the newest one? and how do I find all the OFDW 01-04 ?
Comlock,
No problem! Here is a link which should be useful for finding things ~ see post #3:
[b]Tutorials, Workshops, Anatomy Reviews & More ā¦ [links within]
[/b] [left]You can also search this forum for āOpen Figure Drawing Workshopā should the need arise. L(
Cheers!
~Rebeccak
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mabuffaloe,
Welcome to the forum! Great to see your work here.
This is a beautiful piece! The main thing I notice wrong is that her right foot looks too big relative to her body ~ but the rest is quite nice! Hope you will join us for OFDW 005!
Cheers,
~Rebeccak
I feel ashamed, coming back here so late, but I worked a little more on my pieceā¦ hereās the result so far, if anyone happens across it, Iād be grateful for some background suggestingsā¦ I was going to go for an ornate headboard in carved wood, but Iām all ears. If there are problems with the material folds, itās probably because I did them without any reference winces just for practiceā¦
And mabuffaloe, lovely shading, especially on the feet, all those lovely creases and skinfolds!
And now I shall go and explore whats happening on the more upto date threads.
Zepyhri,
Weāve definitely missed you! But wow, I can see what youāve been up toā¦this is GORGEOUS!!! My first response was, WOW!!!
Youāve done a beautiful on the fabric and wings, so I guess the last question is, what to do with the space behind her? One thing I might reconsider is the color of the floorboards ~ everything about this piece says āopulenceā, and the floorboards to me say āwood cabinā. A minor thing that could be differences in our monitorsā calibration. I nearly zapped Augustusā poor eyes out when I increased the saturation and contrast on his image!
But thatās a minor critā¦
Did you actually PAINT that foreground fabric texture? If you did, good lord! We must know the secrets of your process!
Well, once you are completely finished with this piece, I really think a Tutorial will be in order. Hopefully you have saved versions of this as you have gone along?
I am really wowed by this, and enormously pleased to see it come so farā¦this is really why the OFDWs should be open for as long as possible ~ hey, we all have lives, and are not always able to squeeze in all the stuff we want to ~ and I would hate missing seeing work like this for the sake of a time limit.
AWESOME work, and I hope to see perhaps one more update with the bkgrd filled in? That, of course, is completely up to you.
Cheers!
~Rebeccak
Wow, Zepyhri, that is absolutely beautiful! I love the colors! I see what Rebecca is saying about the floor boardsā¦ maybe increasing the polished, reflective look and the saturuation would be all it needs As for what to put behind herā¦ what about a big, heavy, dark headboard? I wouldnt even think it needed to be super ornate as the rest of the painting is filled with detail. Although something like this would look pretty cool: http://www.tudorhousefurniture.co.uk/downloads/website/bed205.jpg Or maybe this: http://www.civilization.ca/tresors/treasure/images/171_1c.gif And yes, you have to tell us how you painted that fabic pattern!
