need critique or help :)

#1

hi :slight_smile:

i trying upload my recent work on 2d showcase gallery, unfortunately i do something wrong, or my graphics is just not good enought :/.
Any sugestion? help !

link to cg portfolio :
http://j4q.cgsociety.org/gallery/

this is feedback for CGSociety Crew :

We are sorry, but your recent art submission to the CGTalk Gallery has been declined. Your image is still hosted on your CGPortfolio. (“return to the vault, Jakub Mathia (2D)”) We at CGSociety.org would like to offer encouragement for your next submission. Your submission has been declined for the following reason(s): * Your image currently does not meet the general quality level of the Showcase Gallery. The following are a list of possible reasons: -There might be noticeable artistic or technical problems in your image. -The context of your image may need a more creative presentation. We suggest you post your work in the WIP forums so that other members can help critique your image and troubleshoot elements like composition, perspective, lighting/values, colors, anatomy/figure, as well as line quality, brushwork, modeling, textures, lighting…etc. They might also help you think of a more creative presentation, such as using a more interesting background for your subject, or choose more interesting camera angles, expressive poses and facial expressions. Once you have spent some time improving your image, please feel free to submit it again, and we will be glad to reconsider your submission. The CGSociety Crew http://www.cgsociety.org/

#2

Hi,

Upon first glance, your image is very difficult to read. I think the main reason behind this is the lack of strong hue/value contrast : there isn’t a clear center of attraction for the eye, since everything is drowned in cold, dull middletones.

One way of improving this would be to identify what you want to become the center of your composition (for instance, the artificially-lit tunnel) and make it the brightest / most contrasted spot in the picture. Sticking to the example of the tunnel, look at reference pictures of nighttime cities : any artificial light will shine well beyond its daytime brightness, once juxtaposed with a dark environnement.

Other things that strike me:

  • the snow (if that’s what it is) effect doesn’t work very well for me, but I’m at a loss when it comes to suggesting any improvement
  • storytelling details such as the men on the roof are tiny and very difficult to make out (once again, lack of contrast)
  • the brightest spot, i.e. what attracts the viewer’s eye, is currently the empty ground on the right. Not very interesting.
  • the central ruin could be more interesting, i.e. add more details that tell each their little story. Right now, it feels like a bland, generic ruin.

I hope this helps.

#3

This image has potential. When I viewed the larger version in your gallery, I finally noticed what the main subject was in your image (at least to me anyway). The tension between the man approaching and the guy with what looks like a gun near the front of the bus. These details are totally lost even when you view the larger version in your gallery. I’d zoom in on that interaction myself.

#4

tnx for Your attention. ill think over about your critique.
greets.

#5

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