Master and Servant 2D Entry: Gerardo Lin

#21

Hi everybody, I got myself the right kint of pencil, right kind of paper and drew my first attempt of a composition. There are still a couple of main elements missing, but I’m trying to research as much as possible before making them, cause that will yield far better results. I decided not to go for a sad and dramatic scene, instead it will be dark and perverse. The afflicted son thing wasn’t working for me, so he’ll be obssesed and psicotic (the rest is unchanged).
Things that are missing:
a) in the mirror there will be a reflection of a blood covered wall and the stabbed corpse of the maiden.
b) at the top left corner, closer to the viewer, there will be a hand holding a knife, and he’ll have the words “Mommy loves me” cut into his flesh by his own knife.

I think this way it’s more shocking and with a slight sense of black hummor.
Please tell me what you think of it :slight_smile:

#22

i think it will turn out great,nice sketch!

#23

The lineart at last! Don’t pay attention to the grid lines on the wall and the dress, cause they are there simply as guidelines for the patterns (fabrics and wallpaper). Not much else to say here. I’m open to any suggestions. Cya!

#24

it’s starting to look great:)

#25

This is starting to look great! I like the ideas very much, very original. If i may suggest, you could add some intricate designs on the mum’s dress, lace or something on the skirt fabric. Maybe not at this stage. I can’t wait for the coloring! :thumbsup: Sorry for not posting all this time, i’ll be more regular in posting now!

#26

Scary. This women must be a monster. I like the contrast between the quiet pose of the mother and the violence of the scene and her son’s feelings. You did a great work on the furnitures and paid attention to detail. I espescially love her hands position. Looks like Mona Lisa. Finally her grand secret is revealed !
About the composition, i think there is something wrong. Not a big stuff. You have all the elements in your scene, but still something is missing. Maybe try open just slightly the perspective lines because it’s a bit flat ATM. Good use of the mirror, but i’d like to see just a little more of the lover-murderer than a part of his arm. I don’t think it would lower much visual weight of the knife if you would crop him out a little less. Last thing, you depicted the mother as an important character who is litterally devouring her son’s life and mental space, but she is a little small on your picture. Maybe taking her closer and using a slightly lower point of view (from bellow) would help increase this feeling. Just a few thoughts.
Great progress. Keep up :thumbsup:

Edit : i just realized that with the mirror image, the mother happens to be between her son and his slain lover. It’s brilliant, Gerardo !

#27

Noob and Dunkelgold: Thanks for the comments guys :slight_smile:
Oro: Your constant support is a source for motivation for me, thanks a lot man! :slight_smile:
Lovelybutterfly: The intricate patterns are meant to get there eventually, that’s what the grid lines are for. We are on the same page.
Montclaris: You ask a lot of me, and I appreciate that you think so highly of me. That suggestion of a new perspective is fascinating, but I’m not really sure how to do it, and keep the mirror at the same time. I’ll have to get back to drawing right away. I do wanna keep the son as just a hand, cause it felt too “conventional” to have both master and servant in the scene. I love it that you noticed her being in between. I can’t keep secrets from you:bowdown:.

#28

I like your consept

#29

Damn that’s a scary one :slight_smile:

I like the “psycho” theme mixed with somekinda oidibus syndrome. I hope those guys aren’t related to my family :wink: and that dead chick in the mirror is cool addon. :slight_smile:

Best of luck!

#30

I think you have a solid idea coming, however, avoid using text to tell the viewer, try your best to tell the story through expression, gesture, colors etc.

#31

a shadow! yeah that’s what i think is needed. was looking at this picture wondering what would really kick it up a little bit. i think in the reflection in the mirror having a shadow cast from the son facing towards his love (not mother) would really carry the story that much further. Also I don’t think it’s necessary to have “mommy loves me” on the wrist. it looks a bit forced in there. There should definitely be a window with a lovely atmospheric view behind the hand in teh foreground. and finally, i think that everything is a bit low to the ground, that all of the stuff back there is really squat including the chair the mother is in, i think those could use a bit more height on them to give the idea of her “overpowering” her son in a subtle way. she should seem regal and imposing, but right now she looks like she’s pratically on the floor as do her belongings.

oh yeah, and maybe having the girl in the mirror looking towards the son with a mix of blissful love and the beginning stages of morbid fear:) I like the idea behind this picture alot, that’s why I’m goin nuts with suggestoins, gettin alot of cool ideas from this pic. keep it up!

#32

waiting for more images…it’s looking great so far:applause:

#33

Thank you guys for the kind comments, you really encourage me to push forward with my pic. I actually don’t know if I’ll be able to finish it, cause right now I’m flooded with exams and I haven’t had a single second to devote to this since my last update. I’ll do my best.

Korayarts, Oro and Arto: Thanks for the support!
Twoheaded: Yeah, you’re right, having text is a very mediocre way of telling the story of a picture. I’ll take it away for the next update.:wink:
Marginis: It’s good to know that you like my idea. I agree with some of your suggestions, but I have very litlle time to review previous steps, so I won’t be changing much of the scene for the moment. Please don’t think that I don’t appreciate your comments, it’s just that with only two hours per week into this project, I can’t afford to go back and change things.

#34

i have a loot of exams too…but i’m still pushing on :slight_smile:

#35

Calling all stations ! Calling all stations ! GaeasHerald must come back to the contest !

#36

:cry: Mission aborted guys :cry:
I’ve put my priorities in order, and realised that I don’t have enough time to pull this off, at least not properly. Anyway, I wish you all the best of luck, which for what I’ve seen is not at all needed. I’ll try to keep posting in your threads as much as I can. Cya next time :wink:

#37

no worries Gerardo. There will be other contests for you.
I’m a bit disappointed, because your idea looked promising, but do for the best.
Good luck for your exams and c you next contest, mate :thumbsup:
BTW, how many exams a year do you have to come accross ?! You already had one during last contest IIRC !

#38

Montaclaris: Lets see… 5 to 7 exams per set, 2 sets per semester, and 2 semesters per year…
That would be around 24 exams a year, if I do well :hmm:… I’ve had my first three this week and I’m reeeally happy with my results. Thanks for asking.

#39

I see… that’s four exam sessions a year to get rid of to make student’s life more enjoyable ;).
Nice to hear you did well. C you.

#40

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