Machineflesh 2D Challenge Entry: Nicolas Richelet

#21

La suite…

#22

Ahhh!
Ok well, maybe you should do more little details and try to do something in the background.

The head of the man is really too big.
But keep this feeling!
:slight_smile:

#23

Here’s the difference between the 2 characters (not so subtle, but maybe i’m wrong) :

  • Man : wings, burner stabilizers, air entries on the chest, antennae on right ear.
  • Woman : fins, underwater propellers, palms.

I’m trying to make the image viewer understand that the enhancements have been made by the same company, but are a bit different and have a different usage.
Just to show that they are victims of the same (world?) company.

The differences you mentioned are quite obvious but they are no more dramatic than the differences between me and my girlfriend.

I think anyone who sees this picture would think they are the same species just one is a man and the other a woman, and the biggest reason for this is the wings on the woman. They are so large and prominent that they way overshadow the fins on her feet.

I believe the UPC symbols and the X shaped nut appartus things they both have all over would be enough to suggest they come from the same company, but in my honest opinion the picture doesn’t work if it doesn’t dramatically display at first visual glance that these two people belong to different race/species/function whatever.

#24

the initial concept is good.

u can improve the overall painting by:

  1. have the guy lip kiss the girl
  2. draw the other hand visible. if not, they look either flat or with only 1 hand
  3. add in a dramatic background
  4. maybe u need to crop the drawing abit tighter to focus the ‘love’ theme.

good luck~!

#25

Thank you very much for your comments !

Quizboy, You’re right : I think I have to remove the “big fins/wings” on her arms, maybe put a big one on her back, and put little fins on her arms. Thank you for your precious comments :thumbsup:

Matsuru : All of your suggestions are envisaged, except the fourth one…the image size must be 2675/3636 or 3636/2675. That’s strange because that limits the composition, but i’ve asked about that rule in the Question Thread, And Leigh tell me to fit the necessary size.
I’m working on a dramatic background, actually it’s a bit flat…I approve

Riddick : Head scaled ! Thanks !

Thanks again everyone !:bounce:

#26

very good concept, i like the idea im looking forward to see more.
sorry about the inglish.
KGuevara

#27

If the girl is in water, you may want to push the darks in the water and have the figure be lighter in value than the water if she is light skinned and nude. If not, I would push the colors in the skin in both figures. Rather than using only values of one color, play with warm and cool shadows and highlights. Keep it up. The idea is interesting.

#28

Not statisfied with the previous one.
I’m trying new color ambient.
Here’s the WIP result.
Many things to change, especially for the machine parts.

#29

ummm… last version very nice!!! :applause:

#30

Putin c super tu vien de marseille ma poule ^^
Jsuis de toulon VIVE NOUS!!
J’aime bien ton image la dern version est pas mal mais le contrast bizarre fait quon voie plus ytrop ce qui se passe mais ca peut etre surreel apres tout ^^
GOOD luck for futur ^^

#31

Yeah ! Le sud rulez ! :buttrock:

Good luck à toi ossi ! :beer:

#32

sorry, kinda gives me a feeling that the metal was an after thought. Maybe if you embedded the metal more.

#33

Thank you very much for your comments, i’m gonna tweak this soon :thumbsup:

#34

I changed the design a little bit before the next attempt at coloring…

#35

Love the concept, looks like a dream i once had. Looks like the story it tells is kind of sad, dont know. but i do like it, at this stage the line work looks great but im not sure about the coloured version looks very washed out and you seem to loose some of the nice details. Its a wip of course so i cant wait to see what you come up with:thumbsup:

#36

Another colorin’ attempt.
I think i’m on the right way now :wink:

#37

Its getting cooler and cooler Got an idea maybe u wanna make the back groud city glow i think would turn out nice because the atmosphere is dark so a certain glow brings out everything. Dun make the cloud to glowy make the city surrounding glow. ^ ^

#38

Thanks,

you’ve got a good idea, i’m gonna make some glows on the city, and make the far sky brighter. :thumbsup:

#39

the story continues… :slight_smile:

#40

Liked your concept the best!

I had the same idea-of a meeting between a maremade and an “angel” which are both mecha-enhanced…

Finaly my work took me to a different place.

Like the composition-it looks like a poster for an anime movie - I don’t know why, maybe because of the “flat” composition…

can’t wait to see it finished.