Machineflesh 2D Challenge Entry: Mark Okon

#81

Great updates dude, not sure i like your most recent change to the character on the metal platform i liked the one a couple of updates ago.

The reason i liked the old one is that it looked as though the preson had a bird sitting on his/her shoulder, and by the closeness and flight of the other birds it kind of felt to me as though it implied that the birds where the persons pets. That man had bonded with nature. That kind of thing…meh it was just a thought.

The character for being so far away sees a little too crisp you may want to blur they a bit.:thumbsup: :smiley:

Otherwise it looks like its going really well. Keep it going.:bounce: :thumbsup:

#82

Sketchfiend: Good point regarding the person, both about the birds, and the blurring. I’ll try that out and see how it looks. I am still not completely happy with the person, but i’ll make sure it will work out in the end. :beer:

#83

:slight_smile: Great concept and the people really help give that sense of scale.

the metallic roots are really nice - makes you want to know what’s going on under the rest of the tree where machine meets flesh so to speak

A really original idea:thumbsup:

#84

I started working on the background, not sure if I am happy with it yet, so we will just have to see where tomorrow takes me!

#85

MrFreeman: “What is under the pipes?” Very interesting question, i neer though of that, but now that I think of it, perhaps there is room for revisiting this concept in the future for something else. :stuck_out_tongue: Thanks for the comments MrFreeman!

#86

Did some more work on the background. On the trunk of the tree, and little details here and there.

My question is what does everyone think of the background? Is there any problems with the perspective in comparision to the tree?

#87

Hi, I´m not sure it I can express correctly in english, but let´s go,
the saturation and the hue tends to goes blue as far as the horizon goes, under natural day-light conditions so in a yellow-dominant horizon you´ll have to find the way to pass the deep impression. I think the overall-tones looks fine, but the horizontal line must be a little brighter, less saturated and more gemoetric, unless you are dealing with a very irregular world. you can also experiment with blue but be very carefull while experiment yellow influence of the sun with the coulds and the blue of the sky.

hope that helps! :beer:

cheers

#88

Russo: Thanks for the feedback, I am going to try it out and see how it looks. YOu were also right, I am looking to create an irregular world, one that is highly polluted, which is why trees are required to be mechanically enhanced in order to survive.

#89

yeah, as of now, it doesn’t look too poluted. It seems like a nice sunset in a jungle somewhere in the near future.

I kinda like that though… yes, it’s very sad that we got to a point where we need to help trees grows artificially. But our environment is still very adaptive, so really nice looking scenarios such as the one you created would still be posible. (I think)

I don’t necessarily like how images / movies can be very ‘one-sided’ sometimes. There’s always + and - in everything that surrounds us, as well as ourselves.

enough of half-ass philosophy, nice work!
Good luck,
Bruno

#90

brunowerneck: Some good points you brought up. Perhaps the piece might work without the pollution idea, overall I think the piece works as it is. I might still try to enhance the background in order to suggest a polluted environment, but at this point i am not sure.

Thanks for the comments!

#91

Well I am at that point where I feel this piece is pretty much done. I like the colour, lighting, and overall apperence.

Before I go on to the submitting stage, does anyone see anything wrong with it, regarding lighting, colour, certain elements? I recently added leaves between two of the pipes, does it look good or was it better when the leaves were not there?

#92

Originally posted by Freewave
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Well I am at that point where I feel this piece is pretty much done. I like the colour, lighting, and overall apperence.

Before I go on to the submitting stage, does anyone see anything wrong with it, regarding lighting, colour, certain elements? I recently added leaves between two of the pipes, does it look good or was it better when the leaves were not there? [/B]

Lighting looks quite good, im impressed with the fact you managed to neatly get some colour reflected on to the pipes form the greenery in between them, looks good.

One thing i will mention is that the green glass tube that surrounds the ladder in the background looks a little flat, perhaps its just the perspective because its sitting very close to the horizon line and its hard to get feeling for it being cylindrical. maybe some different highlights or shadows would help.

The 2 pipes that a closest to the ladder look a little plain. Or perhaps the tree to the far left should have some indication of the same kind of pipes coming out of its series root systems. It would keep some continuity in your idea.

As for the sky it looks great but it depends on what youre trying to show, atm it looks as though the sky is almost clean and will no longer need the trees to filter the pollution. If you can id like to see a version where the sky is dark and smog filled and you can see a break in the polluted clouds with rays of light puring through.

Youve done an awesome job to get this far, congrats, i really like what youve done. I hope what i have mentioned has been helpful and if not forget i ever said anything…hehehe:beer:

Youve still got plenty of time to tweak and adjust your image, dont rush it. Have a good one bud.:thumbsup: :smiley: :wavey:

#93

SKETCHFIEND: YOu are right, I still have sometime before the deadline, I will consider your suggestions, and post something ASAP.

Thanks once again!

#94

the colors are splendid!!!
I like a lot! :buttrock:

#95

Hey…really nice work! Very nice rendering. I did want to point out that there is an odd bright light reflection on the third pipe from the left…is there supposed to be another source of light? I believe it would be shadowed except for the bit of green reflection…ok…gots to go…nice illustration.

#96

OHhh as I expected, my director just pilled up a ton of work for me, looks like a lot of all nighters for this challenge are coming up.

hephez: YOu like the colours don’t you! :beer:

Snotblow: Thanks for pointing it out, after looking at this thing for so long you tend to overlook these little things. Thanks!

#97

my opinion is that u probably need some more definied background. The tree in the first plan works fine with me, but the bg is an empty space… add somekind of horizont, mountains, vulcanos, anything… and than some more tiny birds way back, just to put some more life to this great picture.

#98

NinjaASSN: Good point, it does seem a little empty, as mentioned earlier, I will try to work as much into the piece as people suggested. Thanks NinjaASSN!!!

#99

Finally got some time to do the backgrounds and the little touch ups on several parts such as the tree in the back.

#100

dude, i am digging the way it has come together.

the sandy, bleached sky, the pipes are just dirty enough, the platform with the guy monitroing the tree (or just looking out).

have u tried punching up the contrast on the dark side of the tree (the near one and the on in the midbackground?) the setting looks like it is going into dawn. that typically yealds longer, deeper shadows. it is just an idea to look at. and probably my only beef… if u call it a beef

otherwise…

i m lovin it (not like macdonalds)