is this finished?


#1

hey all you master of art :wink:
I always make stuff and think it “good”, then i come here and have a look it the gallery and see that mine is far from finished…
so this time i set out to keep working until i didn’t know what to do to improve it (unless starting over from scratch)
so i got to ask…
is this one finished in your opinions? what could i do more to better it?
and if finished what kind of quality level did i reach here? (as i always assume it’s not nearly high enough to try getting it in the Gallery)

please be harsh and honest :wink:



#2

hmm not much critique. is this to little to go on?


#3

What are you trying to convey? To me this image seems to be missing a story or a concept. The flat white background is not helping that. From a purely aesthetic point of view I find the DOF a little off. Also, the shadows on the bottom half of the statue are very hard. I like the texture though, it looks like you put a lot of work in that.


#4

Yea, its tough to get away with a white object on a white background. You may want to darken your background.

I would just turn off the DOF. You couldn’t get that kind of blur from that distance with a 1.2 prime, or even with a macro lens.

It might help to move your camera further away.

The regular 3D WIP thread gets more traffic, so you might have luck posting there.

-AJ


#5

Style reminds me of “The Eagleman Stag” short film. Maybe looking at that will help you strengthen/challenge this look you have chosen. Also your sharp shadows on your words seem to not match the softer shadows on the rest of the piece. Good luck to you.


#6

aside from the advice above I feel this could really be improved with more dramatic lighting and a good shader. The bust would also benefit from a decent weathered bump map.

the depth of field has to go… just because you can dosn’t mean you have to. :slight_smile:


#7

thanks for the critiques.

the white on white was to give it an over clean look, almost a dreamy, hopeful futuristic feel.
i was thinking about how we always belief the future is going to be better while most people say the past was better… if that makes any sense :slight_smile: hence the text.

so also the dof in the second one is still too much? was thinking of a 50 mm/1.8f lens

any suggestions as for the background?
i will try the worn out bump.


#8

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