I Need Serious Help ~

#21

Actually, the composition bothers me and doesn’t really convey that immovable strength. I think that’s because of the way the creature looks like she’s liable to slide off that orb she’s sitting on.
I would make her sitting alert and erect, not leaning to the side - the whole composition’s left-heavy (our left) and makes me uncomfortable and not in a good way.

I agree totally with what people have said about the confrontational gaze - you need the figure looking out, directly at the viewer if you want to indicate confidence and/or menace.
And the wings provide so much opportunity for ornamental beauty - more variegated color could definitely focus attention on the figure, not the background.

Somehow too, the head and wings seem to belong together but the body seems separate - maybe thru a nice transition from neck to chest, color-wise, you could make them look more unified, as if they belong to the same body. As it is, I tend to almost see it as a big bird perched atop a headless humanoid body.

Anyway, lots of good suggestions from the forum - looking forward to seeing your next iteration! :slight_smile:

#22

I would never have thought of some of the things you people were bringing up! Thank you so much for your advice!

I will have to start over to impliment the changes. In the meantime, I created a sketch of the same character, using as many of the suggestions given to me as I could manage.

The image was too big to post, so I have to link to it.
The Vessel

In this drawing I was still trying to get across the same message as I was in the original art I posted here. This time however, I was sure to convey the real menace this character represents.

Am I heading in the right direction yet?

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#23

whoa - that was fast!
Quite a departure from the first image…a little hard to read in the scan, but already so much more dynamic. I for one think you’re on the right track here - although if you wanted to create a singular, iconic image just of the original creature, you could.

I’m sure you could still convey the power of the creature by depicting it in repose, and by itself, w/out another figure in the composition. It just depends on which way you want to go and how narrative you want to be. Just be careful again that the second figure doesn’t upstage the main subject. I like your enthusiasm! :slight_smile:

#24

now thats what i call bam baby new notches extreme. but becareful. ill explain.

u have a nice dynamic goin on right nowbetween the girl and the god but … with the arm brought across his body like that it is almsot a defesive posture as thought he might actually be a little afraid of the girl, hes a god he should defiantly be taking on a power stance plus hes part eagal, have u ever notice how eagels stand with thier chest out proud powerful.

i really like how his wings fill out the comp from right to left leading the eye, id work that up a little, nice use of darks to lead the eye from the girl up over his shoulder to the head where all we see r his eyes. i might suggest droping his arm and placing along side of the darks so that the lights can catch on the muscles fro some nice detailing efects plus itll act as a great device to help keep the eye moving in that space since your bringing it up around that way anyways.

the rays of light act as a good tool to bring the eyes backk down from the wings to keep us in the compistion.

not sure what the sphere is???

major major improvement though u r defiantly on the right track!

oh one more thing becareful hes not looking at he hes looking at us, if she gonna be in there u need to have that focus be placed on her right now it feels wrong, simple fix just tilt his head down

#25

I think a few things have been misunderstood, heh!
1> the “god” is a she .
2> It’s a raven.
3> She is meant to be looking at the viewer, as if she knows you’re watching. (It was just a strange idea I had - to kind of make the image a personal experience you know?)

I’m still working on perspective, but I just wanted to try out a few of the ideas that everyone has given me! I really liked the one about color…I might try that one next. n.n

#26

WOOHOO!!! that new sketch is AWESOME! it’s like “ah! another one destroyed and the next is YOU!” hehehehe I love the more dynamic, off-balance pose, like the raven goddess is in motion. I’m really curious whatcha gonna do with the world/ball thing in there. big thumbs up

#27

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