Mario Antonini has entered the Grand Space Opera 3D.
Grand Space Opera 3D Entry: Mario Antonini
luigithekid
#2
Ok! I’ve been here for a while, but this is the first time I ever post.
I finally got the courage to enter the Challenge. Just thought I give it a shot, for fun and learning purposes.
luigithekid
#4
Admiral Sasgrith was the risk taker everybody avoided. He would lead the most outrageous missions with any crew crazy enough to follow.
So when the time came to reassign the exploration of Star System 84hj53z1, better known as “Little Black Hole” for all its previous explorations failures, Sasgrith was the obvious choice.
Not only was the mission successful, he and a handful of loyal “sailors” explored the entire system. He found a colony in a little planet with three moons, and called it Silver Grounds. There, with the arrival of new colonists and the guidance of the Admiral, the colony prospered, even thrived…
…It was one of those rare occasions where the three moons of Silver Grounds lined up, and the whole colony was preparing for celebration. Suddenly they called Admiral Charlie from one of the Command Centers, the one near the energy cores, and informed him of the incoming asteroid shower. It was estimated that the meteors would hit one of the moons, sending it out of orbit, and that collision with their home was inevitable.
Thus, there was no other option for Sasgrith. This was a risk he could not take, for the sake of the people who had built his treasured home, he had to evacuate the citizens. And in the midst of the festivities preparation, the colony was flooded with grief and sorrow, for everybody had come to love their colony, their home…
Yet after everybody had been evacuated, tha Admiral remained there with but a few “crazy” followers, as the counselors often called themselves. He was transfixed, waiting for the inevitable, watching his dream come to an end before his very eyes…
luigithekid
#5
After posting the story I knew that the sketch needed a LOT of work, even though I cant draw, sometimes even I dont understand my images. I could really use some comments and critiques.
Thanks!
ARSA
#8
:wavey: Hello there! Nice start you got going on here 
For your sketch I would add some red lights inside the compound where the Admiral Sasgrith is found to simulate “emergency state” and having more people running behind him, like a rush-blur.
and in the outside field I will add some landing pads and some comunication towers… And lights since I bet is gotta be dark in that planet.
arturro
#9
Hi there! Nice concept and first model. I have the same feeling as ARSA, and would advice axactly the same!! 
Keep workin’:bounce:
luigithekid
#10
Thanks for the input!!!
ARSA.- Yes, definitely red lights, emergency warnings, and probably some type of monitoring system. Altough I dont want to put people running or blurs, since I was thinking that this was a moment when all evacuation had been done and its like a ship sinking and the captain, resigned yet proud, sinks with it.
I’ll also add more buildings outside, I think you’re right about the lights, specially because it can add a lot to the mood of the empty colony, since all the ships will be already spaceborne. Big thanks!!
arturro.- Thanks for the support!
rattlesnake
#13
hi…i think the story is really nice and the sketch pictures the story really good…
im here to enjoy your entry and wish u good luck man…ill be following your progress…the reactor modeling looks nice …keep the nice work
TiTaNiuM_sAMuRa
#14
It’s looking very nice so far. Remember, though, that you’re trying to show a civilization that spans galaxies.
luigithekid
#15
young_927. rattlesnake. TiTaNiuM sAMuRa.- Thanks for the support, it really means a lot! 
ARSA
#16
Hello there exelent work so far…
regarding your model, I would suggest adding hologramic lcd screens around the tower, like floating aron the tower
semi transparent & glow are welcome
-cheers
yngwix
#17
Just three thoughts already discussed, which I had considered important enough for me to post on your thread:
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[li]Seems like you have a great story in your hands to develop. What I would expect of this development might be nothing more than a logical construction of what this written story of yours is trying to communicate. Thus, I would probably keep working on those great sketches trying to find out which things would probably be changed in order to achieve your idea: this people are desperate watching their homeland being destroyed and there is nothing they can do to make this debacle to stop.
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[li]I am still wondering whether being through out of this caos would be your first priority on your last-minute-survival list.
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As Jerry Seinfeld once said :lightbulb :
“Now they show you how detergents take out bloodstains, a pretty violent image there. I think if you’ve got a T-shirt with a bloodstain all over it, maybe laundry isn’t your biggest problem. Maybe you should get rid of the body before you do the wash.”
But thinking the opposite, I just wonder whether caos is taking everything down in the most quiet, slow and peacefull destruction this people could ever live.
So, regarding point one, it is very interesting when you think about your image in terms of choices and how these choices give shape to the final image. This thinking would easly apply for red lights, emergency warnings, monitoring systems… hologramic lcd screens… which would finally lead us to point three.
[li]I like the idea of getting deeper into this great story understanding aesthetics as both means and ends. Whether to create empty corpses without content in order to achieve a sensual image (related to human senses / subjective) or create layers of logical contents for the viewer to be discovered could be something interesting to think about.
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Great job then…
Keep in touch!
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