Great work you’ve done on this so far. Congrats for getting as far as you have, you’re among a very select few!
There are some really nice touches - the scenes with the shuttles above earth… the shot of Patricia crying (and the fade to get to that close-up) are two of my favorites… But I wanted to comment to you about my vary favorite scene:
There’s one shot you have in here about 2/3 of the way through: The camera between two columns and slowly pans up to take in the full shape of one of the Stone’s chambers. It’s a fantastic shot, I love it! It’s really the first time you get a great sense of the shape and scale of the Stone’s interior. I think the correct expression might be “a money shot,” a longer, disticntly memorable scene. That being said, I feel that you short-change it. It’s such a great take that it’s worth dwelling on for even a bit longer, to let the audience take it all in more. Instead, it not only gets cut short but worse, it cuts to more than a full second of black. Might I suggest that you fill in that time with more of that scene…?
Anyhow, great work… best of luck to you!