Eon (3D Scene) Entry: Cláudio Jordão do Carmo Viegas


#21

[color=silver]Originally Posted by Claudio;
…I haven’t read the book yet… I’ve just found it on the net a few days ago… and… well… does any one want to give me a hand? Or do I have to spend a month reading it!? :)…

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[color=silver]If you have ANY questions regarding the book, please feel free… I have read it a few times by now and especially since I based my “trailer” idea on the first half of it, I have seriously taken down a lot of notes.

As for “idea”'s about the “Inviting” and the voyage back; I think you are doing pretty fine to an efficient level. So these are not really crits[/color]… but “idea”'s as you asked for. Hoping it to inspire you to find some way of composing it all together.

For [color=white]Patricia; in this particular scene I would try to think of ALL the people and places that I love most … and the small details in beautiful things I admire… and then I would try to picture how I would be possibly feeling had I suddenly lost ALL of them in a couple of hours… and literally knew that they were all gone and “no more”.[/color]

You seem to have already rendered misery into [color=white]Patricia’s face… no doubts there. but I thikn such a drama IS what that voyage back is mostly about.[/color]

But since you have a mind of presenting the ghost and the talsit meditation, I guess the grief and glass-eyed’ness of [color=white]Patricia would also blend into curiosity.[/color]

As for the [color=white]Frant;[/color]
Apparently the [color=white]Frant by nature are bond to helping… and it is rooted to their difficult survival against their constant meteor showers.[/color]
So shall there be a problem or difficulty that the [color=white]Frant is not able to help upon, they literally suffer and feel pain. They are seemingly very open to channels of suffering, and have enormous empathy to others.[/color]

In the voyage the I would presume the [color=white]Frant to be in serious pain and confusion on not being able to do anything about Patricia’s suffering.[/color]

I think I could sort of criticize your [color=white]Frant on how he is at the moment… I would picture that he has very friendly eyes, but not cute like yours… a kind that simply pierces through, and has a very sad expression of literally being able to read through you.[/color]
Not to mention that it is prticukarily stated that they have BROWN eyes (OR at least this particular [color=white]Frant does):[/color]

Page 254;
[color=silver]The Frant peered down at her, its large brown eyes unblinking. It held out one hand, spread its four slender fingers and curled them again. “Please,” it said, its voice like a badly tuned calliope. “I cannot help.”
[/color]But well non the less… it is apparent that he is not final… Just hope you have some use to my series of rants above.

Good luck Claudio :thumbsup:

Black


#22

Hello Theuns, thank very much for your comment… I’m really glad you like my characters.

BlackDidThis, your comments and considerations are in deed a great help… I totally agree with the fellings of Patricia during this voyage, that’s exactly how I felt she was.
As for the Frant, well, it seems I completly forgot the sadness and the brown eyes issues… but it’s not to late to fix that… I guess.
Now, I’m gonna have to find some time to start working on Olmy and in the ship’s interior… if you have any considerations about that too… fell free my friend!

Thank you very very much.


#23

Well, here’s my Frant… for now.
I must start working on Olmy.


#24

hey claudio… thx for support … ur fran and models are looking great :thumbsup: lately i been asking a lot of questions and ur next :twisted: are u modeling is subs ? or poly then to sub easy qustion :wise: hope im right


#25

Yeah, looking good! My only suggestion right now is to add reflection to the eyes; they will come alive!


#26

Hello all, here’s my Olmy’s head, I hope you like it!

Leotril - Yap, that’s right… I convert a box into a editable poly, and then start to subdivide the all thing with extrudes, cuts, chamfers… and so on.
I found this technic more compatible with my yeat not so good experience in organic modeling.

SNoWs - I’m glad you like it, I agree with your suggestion and I will do it… but for now, I’d better get the all scene ready first.

Thank you very much.


#27

About the ships interior?

Well to be VERY honest… I really couldn’t picture it properly and was planning on avoiding it as best as I can in the trailer.
But I would recommend furnishing that is almost aerodynamic, as if it has all been melted into a smooth surface some how
and the usage of decorative marble-like surfaces is very often mentioned in their culture and furnishings.
The interior is T shaped, but as I gather, the rear region is a lot less lit in most their voyage back. So only with lighting tricks you may be able to get away with a lot less work.

[color=white]Olmy looks petty fine
but I would advise that if you are having difficulty with the ears
you can actually get away with not modelling them and instead placing little lumps and a whole. Since Olmy has a “modified” body that is very durable and has all his openings closed off for sustaining water.
I gave mine ears
but as a result I could have left it also.[/color]

Back to the [color=white]Frant
I had made the EXACT same mistake of the “silvery thing” last night on my Frant. I had thought that it meant that the silvery cloth was covering the arms

—> Reference Text (From Page 165)

Its two long arms emerged from the torso well below where the shoulders should have been and were covered with something similar to the foil ration packets.
buuuut it apparently meant to say the shoulders.
I know this from a later text that I recalled all too late;
—> Reference Text (From Page 446)

There were three Frants, cloaked in the shiny foil jackets that seemed to be their usual clothing away from Timbl.
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So I am going for something like a bolero jacket
As hard as it might get :sad:

Well I REALLY have to get back to work

Will be visiting later on to see how you go Claudio.

Hope this was again of some use

Black


#28

Hello all,

Black - I’ve read your great description of the Frant, and this is what I’ve came up to… what do you think?
As for your suggestion about Olmy’s ears… well… I do really appreciate it, but I’m begging to like the idea of animating the ears, as if they were some kind of extension of his facial expression. So, for now :slight_smile: … I think I’m gonna leave them as they are.
Your help is always welcome my friend.
Thanks.


#29

I think the jacket is VERY fitting… It is now capable of being called “A shiney jacket”… And also would be able to have a soldier think of it as a “Cloth” covering his shoulders in his first sighting…

I would say nice done.

As for [color=white]Olmy… I think I can understand what you are getting at… I’d like to see where you take it.[/color]

Black

Edit… The [color=white]Frant again… I don’t know HOW much you want to stick to the book, but since now I am very occupied with finishing up mine, I am pretty fresh with data on him… he aparently has short and thick legs (Another mistake I did and regreted a lot, because I had liked the long slender limbs :sad: )[/color]

[color=silver]It stood about seven feet high, skinny, narrow head like a sidewise board with two jutting and unblinking eyes regarding him calmly. Its two long arms emerged from the torso well below where the shoulders should have been and were covered with something similar to the foil ration packets. The legs were short and powerful looking. Its skin was smooth and reflective—not shiny or slimy, but polished like old wood.
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#30

Hello, here’s some tweaking on the Frant.
Black - Thank you very very much again :slight_smile:


#31

Hello, here’s my Olmy… for now!
He’s still missing his short black hair but I’ll think about that later.
I like the idea of Olmy being some kind of a priest, so… I hope you too :slight_smile:
Comments are more then welcome.


#32

And now… with hair!


#33

Hello guys, here’s a little update of my Patricia.


#34

Hey all, here’s a first look of the ship’s interior ambience.
I was almost giving up because I had some problems with my PC, I still dont know if I’m going to be able to finish it… but I’ll try.


#35

Hello, it’s getting very dificult to finish this in time, but… here’s a postcard of the characters.


#36

Hello, here’s another update.
The characters are not in their final poses, and I dont really know if they will ever be… I have so little time to continue with this.
Well… see you soon, I hope.


#37

Good Stuff Claudio.

consider the color comp of the scene i would do a more for a brighter color to make the characters stick out.


#38

Hello digikris, thank you very much for your comment.
The colour issue is not quite cleared in my mind yet because it will have some variations of blue and green lights near the center of the cabin where Olmy is laid… so, I will have to do some tests to find that compromisse between those lights and the semidarkness of the cabin as the script says.
I will post that part of the script in a minute.
Thank you again.


#39

Hello all, this is the segment of “EON” that I’ve chosen:

Patricia awoke to find the cabin in semidarkness.
She had rolled to face the window.
More than twenty kilometers below, the corridor’s surface was dark and scarred.
Great gashes crisscrossed the mottled ground, the edges shining dully.
She rolled to look across the cabin. Her captor lay wrapped in a net of twinkling blue and green lights. Sparks shot between each light in the net, and within, his body was enveloped in a translucent greenish fog.
She had enough weight in the cabin to feel the difference between up and down. Slipping out of her molded berth, she reached across to touch the net of lights and see if it was real.
Before her fingers made contact, a voice stopped her.

Olmy’s ghost_ “Please do not disturb.”

Olmy stood at the front of the cabin. Patricia looked between the figure in the couch and the Olmy that had just addressed her.

Olmy’s ghost_ ”I am a partial personality, an assigned ghost. Olmy is resting, performing Talsit meditation. If you have any business with him, please allow me to substitute.”

Patricia- “What are you?”

Olmy’s ghost_ “An assigned ghost. While he rests, I perform any duties he may have which do not require physical activity. I have no substance. I am a projection.”

Patricia_ “Oh.”

She frowned at the image.

Patricia_ ”What’s he … doing? What’s happening to him?”

Olmy’s ghost_ “Talsit meditation is the process of being surrounded by carriers of Talsit data. His body is cleansed of impurities and his mind of obstacles toclear thought. Talsit data informs, reorganizes, criticizes the mental functions. It is a kind of dreaming.”

Patricia_ “Are you just a recording?”

Olmy’s ghost_ “No. I am connected with his thought processes, but in a way that does not interfere with rest.”

Patricia_ “Where’s the—”

She was about to say, “boojum.”
She looked to the rear and saw the flat-headed, knock-kneed brown creature curled in its own berth, watching her with calm, slowly blinking eyes.

Frant_ “Hello,” it said musically.

Patricia swallowed and nodded.

Patricia_ ”What was your name again?”

Frant_ “I have no name. I am a Frant.”

Patricia_ “Who’s piloting?”

Frant_ “The ship controls itself at the moment. Surely you people have craft that can do that,”

The Frant said, its tone admonishing.

Patricia_ “Yes. Of course.”

She turned back to the image.

Patricia_ ”Why has the corridor changed?”

Olmy’s ghost_ “Centuries ago, there was a war here. The surface material brought into the Way—the corridor—was severely disturbed. In places you can see the Way itself.”

Patricia_ “A war?”

Patricia peered down at the mottled landscape.

Olmy’s ghost_ “Where Jarts occupied the Way. They had traveled from gates hundreds of thousands of kilometers farther down. Those gates have since been blocked or tightly regulated. When the Axis City attempted to pass, and to regain control of the Way, the Jarts resisted. They were driven out, and this stretch of the Way, the entire distance to the Thistledown, is now blocked and deserted.”

Patricia_ “Oh.”

She lay back and watched the lights twinkle around Olmy.
She was exhausted. Her eyes were sandy and her throat scratchy; her chest ached and her arm and leg muscles were tense and sore.

Patricia_ ”I’ve been crying,”

Frant_ “You have slept for the last twelve hours,”

“You seemed at peace while you slept. We did not disturb you.”

Patricia_ “Thank you,”
”This Axis City—that’s where we’re going?”

Frant_ “Yes,”

Patricia_ “What will happen to me there?”

Olmy’s ghost_ “You will be honored,”
”You are from our past, after all, and very brilliant.”

Patricia_ “I don’t like … fuss,”

Patricia said softly.

Patricia_ ”And I want to go back and help my friends. They need me.”

Olmy’s ghost_ “You are not crucial there, and we decided it was dangerous.”

Patricia_ “I still want to return. I want you to know you are taking me against my will.”

Olmy’s ghost_ “We regret that. You will not be mistreated.”

Patricia decided it was useless to argue with a ghost, assigned or otherwise. She wrapped her arms around her shoulders and watched the raked and blackened landscape far below. It was difficult to feel anything for the past now, for whatever had happened before she entered the craft. Did she really want to return? Was there anything so important to her, anywhere? Yes. Lanier. He expected help from her. She was part of his team. And Paul, her family. Dead. She felt for the letters in her pocket, and then reached for the bag containing the multi-meter, slate and processor. They had not been disturbed.

Thanks.


#40

Interesting scene you chose for your entry. There are so many cool effects you could use for that Talsit mesh thing on his body. Also, Olmys ghost could provide a good vehicle for using some interesting refraction and transparency.

Good luck mate!

Cheers :smiley: