Dystopia cityscape drawing

#1

Hey dudes from critique forum, this is my current WIP drawing/sketch in 3 point perspective, could you please, if you have the time and so feel inclined to it, kindly give me some feedback? Someone told me I should make big mushrooms and make them very detailed, or make a thousands of smaller mushrooms to give a sense of scale better. I got reference from my hometown and made it messy, dystopian and made it grow mushrooms all over. If you could critic on the scale or any other elements you feel that are out of place, crop, perspective, etc… I’ll paint it next… I’d be very grateful, have a wonderful weekend ahead!

#2

Are giant mushrooms relevant/important to the premise and the narrative? If not, then why so many mushrooms? Wouldn’t a more balance variety of plants be logical in a post-apocalyptic world?

#3

I do not have a logical reason for the mushrooms, I’d be full of %&/# if I said I do. I just wanted to re-invent the cliche of a dense urban forest that is seen in all other post apoc images, I was based of a scientific research about how mushrooms used to be all over Earth before the dinossaurs and how big they were.
I have been told it needs more plants other than mushrooms though. You’re probably right, I made an update, and I’ll work on this a bit more.

I’m having trouble uploading the image to the forum, so dropbox goes: https://www.dropbox.com/s/xnuryxlbbjqohhc/sycrra2.jpg?dl=0

Have a good day

#4

The mushrooms are still quite conspicuous. Keep in mind that whenever you depict the premise a certain way, the audience/viewer will automatically use whatever visual clues you’ve given them and construct a probably narrative in their minds. So unless you want your viewers/audience to think there’s some special thing going on with those giant mushrooms, don’t give them any reason to think that.

And more importantly, whenever you are depicting a visual narrative or premise, always first think thoroughly about the actual premise/narrative you want to portray. You can’t be just a guy who draws and paints pictures–you are also a visual storyteller so you must also think along the same lines as writers and movie directors too. Your visual narratives have to make sense, and you must know your own premise and narrative well enough to make very deliberate decisions about how you’re portraying it.

#5

Thank you. That was a excellent point on the narrative, I need to work a bit more on that!