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  12 December 2010
almost finished, but not.



Hi everyone. This is something i have been working on for quite some time . Digital painting is something new to me and i considered it finished, but on advice of some people (that know way more about digital painting than me), am posting it here for more tips how to improve it. All comments are appreciated.
 
  12 December 2010
Good work.

But is that a stingray on the left side of the painting?

Last edited by SliceNDice : 12 December 2010 at 04:24 PM.
 
  12 December 2010
Looking good vi0lator2k!

Some things I noted:
  • Is her skin supposed to be blue or a skin tone in moon light ? If it's the latter, than it's too blue an dyou need to introduce a few skintoned hues.
  • Her right arm (with the dagger) is longer than her left.
  • What are those dents besides her belly?
  • The fallof of the orange light is too strong. If the lighting on the floor on the inside is that strong, it won't be that weak on the floor outside. That or the light on the floor on the inside is too strong.
  • Her left hand looks like it only has 3 fingers.

You have a few tangents:
  • The top of her head and the shadow behind her.
  • Her right palm and the bottom of the window behind her, and the fingertips and wall of the building. This makes it look like they're connected, while they're not.
  • Her left arm and the vertical inside of the window behind her, which then flows into her left thigh, again making them look connected.

It's better to have stronger overlaps or clear separation.

I have some links to tutorials / blogs on these subjects if you need additional info:
Tutorial on tangents, with examples
Is Moonlight Blue, by James Gurney

Looking forward to updates!
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  12 December 2010
Thanks , that`s a big list. I am going to try to fix it.
 
  12 December 2010
Nah, it's not that big a list. I gave a 2 year old painting of mine a self critique the other day and it was about a full standard letter sized paper long ... Good luck!
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  12 December 2010
Originally Posted by RicoD: Looking good vi0lator2k!
  • What are those dents besides her belly?


Maybe she was with her boyfriend recently?
 
  12 December 2010
That would explain the bloody knife ...
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  12 December 2010
Originally Posted by RicoD: That would explain the bloody knife ...


LOL...indeed.
 
  12 December 2010
Her right shoulder/neck area looks odd because of that slight yellow tint that's seeping through. Technically that area should be in shadow because of the hair on top of it.

I love the print texture you have for her top... it would be cool to see this on her slip also. Nice start!
 
  01 January 2011

Small update.Trying different skin color, still fixing stuff mentioned on RicoD`s list..
 
  01 January 2011
The skin looks better already! I think it could use more colour, but for the moment it no longer looks like she's part of the Avatar movie anymore. Good progress.

Small heads up: you created a new tangent between the tip of the dagger and her right thigh. Not sure if this was intentional.

Best wishes for 2011!
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  01 January 2011

Aanother update. I will start working on background now.

Last edited by vi0lator2k : 01 January 2011 at 03:43 PM.
 
  01 January 2011
I find the color of her skin, esp. the face, still a little blue-whiteish. Might be just me but it doesn't fit the environment lightning or at least seems somewhat inconsistent in itsself.

I think from her belly downwards it looks okay but the upper torso and face are to bright, pale and unappropriately contrasted.
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  01 January 2011
I really like the overall atmosphere and the mysterious soft and glowing quality of the skin in this new version. With a little more work I think it could be a fantastic piece.

There are a few things that bother me. First is the hand clutching the dagger, it looks sort of like a plastic hand, and the blood spatter looks like the kind of fine mist that would come out of a can of spray paint rather than stabbing someone. I would tone down the blood a lot, on the blade of the dagger as well...the consistency of blood would not cause it to stick like glue. Less is more.

Second I don't really like the expression in the eyes. Her expression seems to be saying, "can you help me find my mommy?" which doesn't go along with her being a cold-hearted back stabber. The shape of her eyebrows also doesn't look quite anatomically correct.

Third is the hair looks a bit too lumpy, especially on the right side of the head where there are a few large clumps with light showing through. Hair just doesn't lay like that. The hair over her left eyebrow has an odd shape that does not accentuate her face well.
 
  01 January 2011


Make the handle of the dagger more visible in her hand. Or if not that, make that palm of her hand that's holding the dagger a little lighter.

And imo, the blood spatter on the right needs to be changed too.
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