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Old 12-18-2005, 12:04 AM   #1
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Glimmer

It is with much apprehension that I'm posting my senior Project, "Glimmer." I wasn't planning on doing so until I finished it, but Roberto kept encouraging me to post it:

*Edit: Took down the divX version because I felt it was too dark*

*Edit: I just looked at this on my CRT and noticed it's really really dark. Here's a link to the quicktime version*

Glimmer (Quicktime Sorenson 3) 50.09 megs

*Edit 12/27/05* Added mirror:
Please only use mirror if above link does not work

*Edit Dec. 20: Added wireframes*

Music was composed by my friend, Yang Li:
ylpj8@yahoo.com

There's a lot more I want to do with the character animation and lighting (well, and everything else for that matter!), and there are more than a few rushed scenes. The glitch/problematic-areas/scenes-to-be-improved-upon list is about a mile long

Feedback is very welcome

Some renders:
















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Old 12-18-2005, 03:26 AM   #2
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this is a very nice animation YeeWu, i love the eyes the whole style very much accentuates an anime style, would you mind if i ask how long the whole production has taken to date?
 
Old 12-18-2005, 03:55 AM   #3
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Neat. I love animations with pretty lights! I'm not even being sarcastic. I do.
I was aghast at the ending and felt very lonely. So I was definitely engaged and brought into the "place" of the movie.
Animation needs work (I know you're aware of it, but what kind of critique would this be...).
She is weightless, but not in a purposeful way... her feet slide a little bit and nothing on her body moves but her legs. Her hands need a different pose every once in a while.
Lighting: I see from one of the still renders that her eyes are purple... get some light into them in the film so that they arent just black blobs with giant spec highlights. Even so, for most of the movie, she is too well-lit (it doesn't seem like the light is actually coming from her lantern), and so we dont notice the effect (which should be dramatic) when more lights turn on around her.
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Old 12-18-2005, 04:20 AM   #4
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well!

It is really fantastic....I like the moode.

no comments except the ones mentioned by HenningK.
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Old 12-18-2005, 05:39 AM   #5
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Hi, Great work, I really like the work you have done on this character the dress is lovely! I love the painted backrounds and the bridge scene with the light reflecting from the water is very beautiful. I like this piece it is different and interesting. I find that working with lights is difficult and I think you did a great job using your lights.

What I like best about this piece is that you are not only focusing on animation, but this is the whole package, You have a nice character, lighting, beautiful textures, animation and a nice concept here. I find it very mysterious and the end does make me a feel lonely. When you finish the rest of the 40 missing seconds you will have a great short
Great job 5 stars.
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Old 12-18-2005, 07:16 AM   #6
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Donald,

Congratulations on the front page plug! (And no, it wasn't me who did it). I know how hard you have worked on this, and it is fairly incredible that you've turned in such a beautiful piece given the fact that there is quite literally one Maya class at Mason. You've definitely gone above and beyond, and deserve whatever opportunities which come your way.

I was quite excited to see the screening of your animation during your senior show ~ the scene with the bridge and it's reflection is quite stunning, imo. I very much enjoy how you have combined the 2D bkgrd elements with the 3D; and the music is just right ~ haunting, lyrical, just a bit searching as well. There is an incredible maturity to this piece which one does not often see. Great work, and congrats again!

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Old 12-18-2005, 07:20 AM   #7
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D.Alexander: Thank you. I started doing sketches about a year and a half ago. I really wish I could say that I had spent the entire year and a half working on this, but I barely had time to work on this at all during the course of a few semesters. It wasn't until these past two months that I really started working on this feverishly. It's hard to quantify, but I'd say it was a year and a half of work off and on, and in my free time.

HenningK: Great critique! I absolutely agree with everything you said. I definitely will address these in the future I don't have much experience with character animation, and it's been a real effort getting this to where it is now. But I will continue to try and push it!

Alom: Thanks!

Ines: Thanks so much for the kind words! It's been a fun semester

*edit - adding Rebecca* I'm very glad you could make it to my senior show. You'll have to thank my friend Yang for the music. He's a wonderful musician. Thank you

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Old 12-18-2005, 07:26 AM   #8
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As I promised, you have been plugged.

You are VERY talented, and I hope to see more of your other animations in
our forum. As I told you, your animation is full of style and grace.


Later

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Old 12-18-2005, 07:43 AM   #9
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very nice animation, i quite enjoyed it.
keep up the good work!
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Old 12-18-2005, 07:53 AM   #10
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Thats pretty good, but her eyes were way to dark making it kinda creepy.... and i don't get the ending...
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Old 12-18-2005, 08:13 AM   #11
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very very well, especially the hair dynamics and lighting
and... wonderful music, it reminds me Zatôichi movie
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Old 12-18-2005, 09:05 AM   #12
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Great job Donald - Congratulations on you plug.
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Old 12-18-2005, 09:24 AM   #13
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I have a little crit about the animation.

Firstly, the lantern that the girl carries has it own movement, without consider it is a constrain movement that is attached with a string. That is not realistic thru, especially at the scene when the girl is distracted by a group of lanterns and she makes a turn, the lantern's movement seems out of control.

And her lefthand is almost paralyzed thru the animation. If the sleeves of the kimono has extension that is OK if she keep the hand like that, but it is not.

And a little crit about the modeling, as you see that the girl's eyes are a bit flatten when in the side view, due to the face contour isn't deep enough to show eye sockets.

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Old 12-18-2005, 11:39 AM   #14
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Really nice looking *thumbs up*

a question about the eyes though:
We're you able to fit a sphere in the model for eyes, or did you use a FFD(box) modifier ?

i've tried anime faces before and always had trouble with the eyes, using an FFD modifier has given me some succes though.

thanx
 
Old 12-18-2005, 12:02 PM   #15
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I don't think this piece need the scrutiny of CG-experts, but to judged by the story itself, or the film as a whole. I understand you're pretty new to animation, and I'd say - no matter which medium or tool you choose - this is a very emotional and beautiful film. CG skills can always be obtained and improved, but subtle story telling like this is something different, you made the right choice in posting it.

Good work!
 
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