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Old 07-06-2005, 08:39 AM   #1
Jakub Koźniewski
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Smile Shisha... My first post here.

Hi all !
This is my first post here on CGTalk...

The image above is my personal project and illustrates my friend enjoying
shisha in one of the Warsaw clubs...
I know that my skills are not on the top level (comparing with some masterpieces I've seen here) but I'm 19 and still learning ...

So, I'm waiting for your comments, advices, critique...

Jakub Kozniewski.

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Old 07-06-2005, 09:20 PM   #2
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welcome to CG!!

well, mybe you hasn't level, but everyone start from the beginning, isn't?

add more detail, background, lighting and shadows...

BE PATIENT! with the time, you get great images

keep it up!!
Old 07-07-2005, 05:38 AM   #3
Jakub Koźniewski
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@ Ducklator

Thanks for your reply....


Any other comments from anybody ?

Old 07-07-2005, 08:20 AM   #4
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Hey, I really like your skin toning, it's done really well, it really reflects the warm colours in the background. And the perspective is nice, too. Probably if you're still working onnit I'd suggest you gave a bit more texture to the hair of her fringe, it looks a bit overly shiny with just the highlights. Nice picture and welcome to CGTalk!
Old 07-07-2005, 06:57 PM   #5
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Nice piece, I wish I could see her entire right arm holding that thing coming out of the lower right corner. The face is very nicely painted, not too much detail but just enough. Loved the glow.
Old 07-07-2005, 09:35 PM   #6
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Her eyes seemed a bit off to me. I did a quick edit to show you what i mean.
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Old 07-07-2005, 10:53 PM   #7
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Kuba czego szukasz?
I looks good, definitely needs a little more detail and some lighting work. It could be left as is and be a very nice piece of art, but I think you can puch it much further.

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Old 07-08-2005, 08:37 AM   #8
Jakub Koźniewski
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@ Lord Blue
You're right, her left eye is placed too high in my version...
In your version is a little bit to low
Lets find a compromise
(Thanks for your effort)

@ Terro
Czego szukam ? Ha, azebym sam to wiedzial...
Jestes mechanikiem - grafikiem ? Od dawna w Chicago ?
( Moze przejdzmy na PM zeby nie bylo ze po kims jezdzimy )

Hmm... I really don't know if I'm going to give this image
a final "finishing touch". I don't like too detailed and polished
artworks. I'll better make another piece, maybe more realistic
this time...

Thanks for all your comments...
CGTalk is a really outstanding community...

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