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Old 07-08-2002, 06:28 AM   #1
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Just a sketch: Children Cover your Eyes



Here is something I drew today to practice drawing females. I took some cues from Feng Zhu (http://www.artbyfeng.com) for the facial features. Critiques welcomed.
 
Old 07-08-2002, 10:05 AM   #2
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Talking wow!

Great body ! ...but try to work more on her face!

Anyway, post us more!!!
 
Old 07-08-2002, 10:13 AM   #3
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I could be wrong(and probably am ), but even for a stylized body, I think her waist is a little too short, and her neck and head are too small. They just need a *slight* adjustment. Otherwise, it's looking pretty good...you've got nice detail going. I think the way you've drawn the fabric is pretty convincing.
 
Old 07-08-2002, 03:10 PM   #4
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Thanks for the crits, when it comes to drawing women I'm pretty rusty. Art4Sayan: What kind of changes would you recommend I do for the face?
 
Old 07-08-2002, 03:50 PM   #5
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Talking A piece of advice for you



First, maybe that a larger head will fit better her body.
For her face, I think that more expression would be better...so try to make her eyes more expressive with bigger eyes ...maybe a lil' smile on her face will make the trick too!

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Old 07-09-2002, 06:52 AM   #6
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Update: Some proportional adjustments, eyeballs (knew I forgot something :P), and a splash of color

Now that I think of it I should have posted this in the WIP section. Oops

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Old 07-10-2002, 10:23 PM   #7
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Hmm... odd... the body looks really good. Well proportioned. Compliments for that. Love the lining and the sketch coming trough

Only the head looks like it has been sticked on, like a head on a puppet. That's because the neck is too thin.
You should also lower the head, including the neck. And I mean a lot. That way the neckmuscle, that goes from the neck to the shoulder gets a whole lot shorter and everything will look more natural. I think that will do the trick.

After that, you could try to get some lighting in, like light on one side and dark on the other, then the whole thing will come to life.

Just trying to help

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edit - Why should children cover theyre eyes?

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Old 07-23-2002, 09:51 AM   #8
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Thanks for the crits guys, the head was off-center and the neck was definitely too long. Here's an updated colored version.


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Old 07-23-2002, 11:05 AM   #9
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Shroomyyyyy..

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Old 07-23-2002, 05:14 PM   #10
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Well I've got lots of feedback about the face looking funny so I changed it

 
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Ah, better
But still could be better if you make the nose more like a triangle instead of a square.
 
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Well i like her breast very much~ but......MAKE HER SLIMMER~!! and that'll b very perfect~!
by the way work more detail on her face too~(makes her beautiful~)
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Old 07-23-2002, 07:26 PM   #13
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Sorry Psycho Ken, no like twig chics

I'll prob mess around with the face some more tonight.
 
Old 07-23-2002, 07:46 PM   #14
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It's coming along ... but there's still a few things about it that look odd to me.

The arms - almost mirror each other in shape and pose (even the hands), but the arm on the right (her left) is shorter. I suppose if you're trying to make the arm appear forshortened then you need to change the position of the hand.

The torso - seems almost dwarfish to me. Is she supposed to be standing or leaning against something with her behind? If she's standing straight up and down, then the area from her diaphragm to belly button needs to be lengthened. If she's leaning on something, then you need to add more folds in her dress near the waist to inidicate this.

The head - is still too small or has some other issues. General rule of thumb is that the face is the same size as the character's open hand (put your own hand over your face and you'll see this is true). The angle of her chin suggests that she as her head slightly tilted down, but the bottom of her lip and underside of the nose tell me otherwise.

Get a catalog from Sears or something like that and use the models in there for reference. Here's a pic from Spiegel that might be a good ref for the face.
 
Old 07-24-2002, 05:50 AM   #15
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Update:

-Enlarged the head and lowered her hairline
-Stretched the torso
-Scaled the arms so that they are closer to same length
-Shrank the hands
-Rounded off the chin a bit
 
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