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  02 February 2013
Any tips to improve my piece ?

Hi everyone , i'm working on a piece ( a wizard house ) that i plain to add in a video later in this style :

i used some basic modeling technique , and for the lighting i want to have that blue moon light , so i used 3 cool vray planar light , and a spot in the front to have a warm light , i don't know if its good or not , i' waiting for your suggestion ( and sorry for my English )

Last edited by dragonkille : 02 February 2013 at 09:44 AM. Reason: writing mistake
  02 February 2013
step 2

so this is the matte painting i did , and that i will add to the composition in after effect , i know its not good yet but its my first one
  02 February 2013
The building looks cool and quirky, I wonder if you could push the quirkiness a bit further though? Maybe have the top levels on a bit of an angle, make the door frame a bit lob-sided, things like that.

The texture for the dark wood seems a bit too rough and also has obvious tiling, especially around the door frame. The lighter coloured wood seems much nicer although I can see some tiling there too.

The building does not appear to be sitting very nicely in the environment, it looks too big, tilted down towards camera and too saturated. The night for day conversion on the background needs some work too, it should be darker and blue-er.

Keep at it!
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  02 February 2013
thank you

thank's for your advices , i tried to hide the tile a little bit , and also i pushed the quirkiness a bit further without changing a lot from the model :
  02 February 2013

Also , for the environment , is that okay now ?
  02 February 2013
The new building is an improvement.

The colours in the environment seem a bit add to me, it should be more blue instead of green. It should also be darker overall. I don't know if you plan on putting a sky in later but at the moment it is too bright.

Bits of scenery closer to the camera should have the biggest contrast and the blackest blacks. You have items in the foreground that have less contrast than the mountains behind them.
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  02 February 2013
I like the design of the hut, but I think you could do a lot more with the textures and shading. It looks like the entire object is using the same shader which makes all the different surfaces look the same - add some variation. Wood should have a different quality to stone, and so on. With the textures, these could be developed a lot further to be more detailed and fitting to the geometry details themselves. Try rendering an occlusion map and then using that as a base for adding some dirt and stuff that will enhance the shapes of the structure themselves. Occlusion in this way is really useful for cartoony stuff because of the way it defines the shapes and gives things a slight storybook feel.

I'm going to be brutally honest and say the environment is really poor quality. I'd totally lose it and find or create something completely new, because there is just no way that environment is ever going to work. The scale is bizarre, the colours unattractive, there's no atmosphere and the blurry bit on the left is downright unsightly. I think your hut would be much more suited to a forest environment with some moody lighting.
  02 February 2013

thank you guys for your time and advises , finally i think i will put the house on a real 3d environment instead of that matte painting , which will give me more control about what i do , i will improve the materials and texture and upload an update soon , thanks again
  02 February 2013
litlle uppdate

This is it , i finally had a little bit of time , i put the house in a more convenient environment , waiting for your critique , also i need to find a good lighting to the scene , thing i'm working on
  02 February 2013
last update

Hi everyone , so this is the last update of my Wizzyhouse , any advice or critique ?
  02 February 2013
I think I like most, the very first version you posted.
Even it's without textures, the shading look better then you have later.

As for the last render, I think you need some better (more interesting) composition, and also, more interesting background. Remove Dof, it doesn't look very natural. The glow in front is confusing, and it distracts from your house.
The problem that I often see in 3d art, is that most of the people is lacking traditional art knowledge (including me). That's being said, I strongly suggest you to read some traditional art stuff about composition(rule of thirds, for example), about color harmony, about various surface properties (that will help you make a better materials)... etc.

Your grass needs some translucency, and also, why don't you put in there some mashroom, roots of the tree, maybe some flowers, snail.. etc?
Now it's the time to be extreme!
  02 February 2013
thanks for your time man , i can't disagree with you about the composition , now the next step is to make the illustration more fun to read , i will also add some element ( mushrooms , here i come ) and try to not make the scene full of useless elements
thanks again
  02 February 2013
I think you need to take a step back from the environment and carry on with the modeling of the building.

I see that you are going for a 'small' house. Something you can look at doing, to show the scale, is to build the house up out of natural objects of a 'known size'.

Make it much more irregular, adding it bark, leaves, and actually growing moss over certain areas.

You also need some awesome dirt and grime on the house. I would imagine that a house that exists, surrounded on all sides by nature, would get rather dirty!
  02 February 2013

thanks Pyke for taking time to look for some inspirational pieces for me , i have changed the composition and add some elements so it can look really small . i tried t use sss for translucency but it wasn't good , must practice it more , also i think i will add some dit in the post production part ( note that the render isn't th final one , no post production yet ) :
  02 February 2013
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