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Old 07-02-2013, 01:52 PM   #1
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Verb TV show

Hi all,

I am currently busy building up my Showreel. I decided I wanted to create a Talk show intro called VERB. Verb is aimed at teens and they try and create awareness about all kind of issues from education to the music scene. Please let me know your thoughts good and bad.



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Old 07-02-2013, 04:01 PM   #2
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Very cool concept. The color choice is nice. Some very picky comments:

I would suggest to shrink down the bottom "Verb" logo a tiny bit so it doesn't cover up the specular highlight on the stand. The signs on the stand look like they are floating (which might be what you are going for). The rhinos stand out because they are the only things that do not have volume.

Other than that I would urge you to play with your composition. There isn't anything wrong with it right now, but pushing it to extremes is always a good exercise. For example, try spreading everything out across the frame. You have a lot of unused space in the current framing that you can play around with.

Again, this is all very picky stuff. Overall it is looking good, keep it up!
 
Old 07-03-2013, 01:59 AM   #3
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Hola,

Not a bad start! I agree with what Nick wrote. To expand upon that, your lighting looks a little flat and straight on. Try experimenting with sharper rim lights and colored fill lights.

Your highlights also look too round and wobbly. It looks sharp to have nice, long continuous highlights that outline your shapes. A good way to get those is to turn off specular highlights in your materials, and turn on raytraced reflections. Make some large white planes in your scene out of sight of your camera, and try turning up their reflectivity multiplier.

How did your female model turn out btw?

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Old 07-03-2013, 05:56 AM   #4
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Smile Morning all.

Thanks for all the useful comments will give them all a shot today.

I am working on my female model on and off, but it is taking so long. I decided to move on to other items on my list as I have to get a move on with my showreel. I need to apply for jobs soon, because we are moving to England soon. The South African animation business is very small still and I want to really get myself out there and learn from some of the best. Hopefully things turn out the way I plan

Thanks again.

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Old 07-03-2013, 11:25 AM   #5
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Hello there

Hi there,

Here is my progress thus far, would love to hear your thoughts.

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Thanks again.

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Old 07-03-2013, 11:29 AM   #6
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I really dig your concept but feel, and excuse the pun needs to look more "3d" to get more funkyness over, again love the concept but looks a little safe at the moment (though this is only the beginning so my comments should maybe be taken with a grain of salt)
 
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Hi ArtDigital

Trust you are well.

I get that you feel it is too safe, but don't fully understand when you say it should look more 3D LOL. Thanks for the advise.

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Old 07-03-2013, 12:35 PM   #8
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Hi Bianca-Lee, I am very well thank you, I guess I'm saying maybe the character and stage be more of a focal point in the foreground (a small depth of field perhaps) with the landscape frame in the background less in focus...
 
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Hi Bianca-Lee, I am very well thank you, I guess I'm saying maybe the character and stage be more of a focal point in the foreground (a small depth of field perhaps) with the landscape frame in the background less in focus...


Thanks for that. I get you now will work on that.

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