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Old 12-31-2012, 12:52 AM   #1
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Moody Evening Scene - Critique request

Heya!

Looking for some critique on this one:


Mainly I think in a "where to go from here" sort of way. I think the painting pretty much represents the entirety of my skills, so I'd like to know what it's most lacking in, ie. what I should work on next. I think the sense of scale could be a lot better but I don't really know how to execute it properly.

Thanks!
 
Old 01-03-2013, 02:11 AM   #2
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I would work on the lighting. Make it more dramatic. Right now there's full colors all throughout and compositionally there's not really a focus, but if you make the right darker and really improve the lighting that'd probably bring out the true scale a lot too to have more dramatic lighting.
 
Old 01-03-2013, 11:28 AM   #3
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Originally Posted by flumba
Heya!

Looking for some critique on this one:


Mainly I think in a "where to go from here" sort of way. I think the painting pretty much represents the entirety of my skills, so I'd like to know what it's most lacking in, ie. what I should work on next. I think the sense of scale could be a lot better but I don't really know how to execute it properly.

Thanks!


It's an ambitious piece, and while nothing really stands out as THE problem, I think instead of tearing it apart, I'll just say, keep going, it's a great start, and you've learned a lot, and have a solid foundation to build upon. Keep working on composition, lighting, textures, figures, and you'll be fine.
 
Old 01-11-2013, 09:34 AM   #4
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Hi!

Thanks for the replies! The lighting stuff I definitely agree with, and it's an area where I'd like to get badass at the most. Will certainly keep at it
 
Old 02-02-2013, 11:46 PM   #5
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The figure on the left doesn't seem to be casting a shadow?

The lighting on the ground is a bit odd. It's bright at the left edge as if lit by the direct sunlight, but then it turns dark in a gradation, which doesn't look like cast shadow, but if it's not cast shadow, why would the ground just turn dark like that? Clouds?

The cast shadow of your figures have more red in them than the ground, but why? What's coloring their cast shadows more reddish compared to the ground, which is also dark and not getting direct sunlight? The shape and direction of the bird's cast shadow also doesn't seem to match the lighting.

When you put a cool rim light on the shadow side of the figures, you have to think about how bright they should be and what color. If your sky is red/orange all over, then the sky dome will be bouncing that same color onto the shadow surfaces. But in your painting, the rim light is bluish, which means there's either a lot of blue in the sky on the right side of the scene, or there's a strong artificial blue light to the right of the scene. If it's meant to be the sky, then why does it bounce such strong light onto the rim of the characters but we don't see the same strong blue being bounced onto all the shadow areas in the scene--they are all under the same sky after all.

These are thing basic fundamental stuff you have to think about as an artist, and you must master this type of foundational knowledge in order to level up as an artist.
 
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