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  07 July 2013
New dialogue shot

Hi guys!
Started a new dialogue shot and I would love some feedback.

http://vimeo.com/69674873
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  07 July 2013
Did a bit more work on this shot
http://vimeo.com/70157556
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  07 July 2013
great blocking so far!

Two things that stand out to me:

- there isn't any variation in the shape of his eyes. like he's always squinting or eyes half closed. Even on the "T" for twitter when his brows go up, his eyelids do not (which they don't have to but that could be a potential place).

- overall his arm poses seem too over the top or over acting. Especially the last two poses, two much going on too fast it just seems awkward and not natural at all. Unless of course when you smooth it out, it could all come together. At this stage it just looks too all over the place all the time for such a short piece of animation.

- Ok sorry a third thing :P Just his lip sync at "all the time" doesn't seem like it's hitting the words, perhaps it's late? maybe try selecting those mouth keys and dragging them back 2-3 frames to see if that works.

Great stuff so far! It'll be sweet once you're done.
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  07 July 2013
Thanks for your feedback Phredrek. I had to make major acting changes to this shot so il be putting up a new version shortly.

-Yasha
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  08 August 2013
Taking this shot in a slightly different direction

http://vimeo.com/71494974
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  08 August 2013
good going pal was watching this http://vimeo.com/71494974 well sure this one is more refined than the other two
 
  08 August 2013
Thanks buddy!
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  09 September 2013
Decided to take a quick break from working on the Twitter shot, so i knocked out another quick dialogue test in a about 2 days
http://vimeo.com/73993581
All C&C's welcome
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  09 September 2013
I keep putting off finishing this shot, so i decided to do another quick test.


C&C's welcome and encouraged
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  09 September 2013
Hi Yasha,

That last clip-- needs more lip closure on tele"V"ision in a "M"onth. ALso when he says "brown" if you swiveled his head where his chin started into an arc and his forehead delayed into the settled head pose I think it would add to something. (Just a thought)

All the best,

Noah
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  10 October 2013
Thanks Noah! il fix it up when il get back to that shot.

In the mean time I did lots more work on the original shot



Once again all C&C's are welcome
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