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Old 12-11-2012, 06:46 AM   #1
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Early 1980's Freelance Programmers Office

I modelled this IBM 5150 out of pure boredom on an international flight a few months back, and have decided to put it into a scene. The premises is; this environment is used by some sort of 80's programming freelancer. So lots of coffee, lots of late nights... that sort of thing.
Besides from the computer the scene has had two days of work so far. I'm using 3ds Max and Vray.
Any C&C would be appreciated, especially if you were actually doing this sort of thing in the early 80's. I would like to make it as 'authentic' as possible, since this was roughly a decade before I was born >.<

 
Old 12-13-2012, 05:56 AM   #2
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Nice idea of doing a 80' work table scene.
Maybe a window beside the table? shine some lights in and show what's going on outside ( busy street or rainy night). And some table clutter would be nice, like reference books, left-over pizza, all in messy arrangement.
 
Old 12-13-2012, 06:21 AM   #3
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Great ideas on the clutter, I was at a loss actually of what more to model (I guess I should just look at my own desk though har).
Interesting idea about the window as well. I was planning on it looking as secluded as possible though so we'll see how we go.
 
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Today's progress:

 
Old 12-16-2012, 07:59 AM   #5
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The progress continues. C&C welcomed.

 
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Getting better. Wallpaper is a little too clean.Light from the lamp is not convincing. Why isn't the inner side of the lamp lited?

Smoke from the mug would be a nice touch. How about those big floppy disc holder.
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Old 12-16-2012, 01:35 PM   #7
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Thanks for the tips. Btw what do you mean the light from the lamp is not convincing? Do you mean it's not lighting the scene convincingly or just the fact the inner rim isn't lit?
 
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Thanks for the tips. Btw what do you mean the light from the lamp is not convincing? Do you mean it's not lighting the scene convincingly or just the fact the inner rim isn't lit?


Both, I would think.
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Old 12-18-2012, 06:38 AM   #9
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Okay, in this update I have done quite a bit of lighting work:

 
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Hey man,

The image has really improved from your first post. Nice work so far.

I think the lamp might look good pointed down to hide the bulb, leaving the computer screen as the brightest point in the image. You could aim it at the keyboard or desk, and have some nice bounced light to illuminate the computer body.

The scene could also use a chair, and maybe a few dirty dishes and 80's cola cans.

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I think the Atari poster looks out of place. Maybe better if it is game poster instead.

Or maybe a movie or road band, or pin ups from the era poster.
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Old 12-18-2012, 10:47 AM   #12
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Great idea pointing the lamp down... I'll get right to it. As for the chair, I've tried but I can't really think of a way of integrating one without it blocking everything else.

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I was thinking that Atari was a bit too generic, better slip into the archives...
 
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Hi,

Cool scene - PKD had a good idea about the old floppy holder; don't forget there should be sleeves for these things too. One thing I was looking for were old dog-eared reference manuals or some old computer magazines. Perhaps more clutter on the shelf?

I agree about repointing the lamp... used to get enough radiation off the monitor!!! Any opinions on the colour of the light? I was thinking it should be warmer (yellow) since we didn't have halogen lights in the 80's.

One other thing about the monitor display...shouldn't it be black with white or green text on it? Only problem with that is it will change the lighting of your scene.

Cheers,

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Old 12-20-2012, 02:56 AM   #14
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Thanks, BonzaiGopher! Some very good information there, I'll be doing some more work on this scene today and I'll definitely take your ideas into consideration
 
Old 12-20-2012, 02:23 PM   #15
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Hello,

Nice progress. I would second that the screen should be black with green or gray text...
Also, the spot light is acting as an area light.. If I ever have my spot lamp on it casts quite sharp shadows, and that cone would definitely cast a circular shadow around the perimeter.

lastly the composition just doesn't grab me, It seems to dull. Perhaps you will be adding to the scene and changing the camera angle, but as it stands I just don't think it is as dynamic as it could be - it needs to really tell the story of what was happening in the room and capture the stress and no doubt frustration, but also the geeky playful side that would probably go along with that job? Just thinking out loud so feel free to disregard.

All the best!
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