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Old 11-07-2012, 03:24 PM   #1
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Piano model

Hi there,

I was wondering if anyone could give me feedback on this piano I modelded a while back.
I use Maya and want to make lots of models to add in my portfolio, I dont go deep into rendering yet because I first want to learn allot about modeling.

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Old 11-07-2012, 03:33 PM   #2
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Nice start. Glad you are taking a disciplined, focused approach.

Is there any particular upright piano model that you are recreating?

It would also help us to judge if you posted a few wireframe views.

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Old 11-07-2012, 04:41 PM   #3
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First of all thank you AJ.
The first image is the reference I used to model it and the second is the wireframe, sorry for the late reaction, but I didn't know how to do a wireframe so I searched it up, the keystrokes are almost totally white and I cant help that, there arent that much polygons on them.

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Your level of polygon density is way too uneven. You have some areas with way more polygons then you need in order to define the surface, and others where you have huge planes that need to be broken up a bit.
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Old 11-07-2012, 05:02 PM   #5
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This is what it looks like in the viewport.

 
Old 11-07-2012, 05:09 PM   #6
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Here is a good write up about wireframe rendering (maybe you've already read it).

http://blog.ayanray.com/2010/01/the...eframe-in-maya/

I would try turning off smooth mesh, and just use the bevel tool under edit mesh for your edge bevels.

Also, most of your components look too thick. Are you going for more of a stylized look?

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Old 11-07-2012, 05:57 PM   #7
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I did use bevels around the edges only after that I used smooth preview, maybe thats why it is shown in the renderer.

Is this more like you mean?
 
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It's obvious you spent time on this and have a good methodical approach.

The front legs of your piano (the last one you posted) look too thick. The legs are a key focal point on uprights and tend to be slimmer and neat. A bevel or some other relief would help. The support bar for the keys could also look better if it was less deep, and the far end key stop looks to be a little lower than the keys when it should be level or at most a tiny bit higher.
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Originally Posted by Dillster
It's obvious you spent time on this and have a good methodical approach.

The front legs of your piano (the last one you posted) look too thick. The legs are a key focal point on uprights and tend to be slimmer and neat. A bevel or some other relief would help. The support bar for the keys could also look better if it was less deep, and the far end key stop looks to be a little lower than the keys when it should be level or at most a tiny bit higher.


Thank you for your reply and feedback.
I changed the thinges you said would be better and I agree.
Here is the model so far.

 
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Those are good improvements.
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