Seeking a critique for "The Quiet Place"

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  07 July 2017
Seeking a critique for "The Quiet Place"

Hello. *Looking for critiques and opinions on this. *Wanted to do a surrealistic place of rest and meditation. *No technology at all. *Place carved out of rock with some windows. *Very basic, no distractions. *Wondering if the repeating bump mapping is obvious and sticks out or if it's not noticeable. *Also wonder what others' impressions are on the lighting. *What works, what doesn't work etc...(do I need more beveling? * Thank you for taking a look.

Last edited by BrianRedoutey : 07 July 2017 at 09:04 PM.
  07 July 2017
I can't figure out why it's putting asterisks at the end of every sentence. *Maybe it's just my browser.
  07 July 2017
The image is pretty small so hard to get a good look but here is what I would suggest-

- If its carved out of rock, make some decisions about what specific rock so you can get some texture information. It needs variation in color and texture
- You can't carve perfectly straight lines in rock so it should all be damaged and bumpy and lumpy and just feel like it took effort to create this place
- Feels like theres a lot of light sources, obviously the one from the stairs is the "entrance" to the place but whats the white bar in front of the bed and to the side of it and coming from the doorway?
- If a 6ft person fits on that bed, those stairs are pretty big. So the beds are too small - unless this is a place for children which could work but then needs additional elements to sell that
- The ceiling alcove thing not being centered bugs me

I would start with making some concepts if you can, figure out some of those imperfections and structures and different light sources. Since the piece is tranquil and basic like you said, the idea and the lighting and the feel of it should do the bulk of the work. Needs really really good lighting. This is gonna be a hard task, but the idea is unique!*

Here is an image for you*

Note all the incredible detail and variation and the feeling that its carve and eroded, it has imperfection. You don't have to make it look like this of course, theres tons of images out there, but it should help get you started!
  07 July 2017
Thank you for the critique and feedback

I'm flattered that you noticed the alcove, but perhaps it's being noticed for the wrong reasons.

Looks like I've got work to do to refine and change things.
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