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  01 January 2014

Hi all.

Here is the final image of my little project I had in mind. I love me some retro-future sci-fi space babe, so here you are.

Step-by-step below...
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  01 January 2014
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  01 January 2014
This looks pretty good. There are some technical issues here and there that shouldn't be too hard to fix.

The perspective of the gun is kind of a mess, having contradicting angles from the front to the back of the gun. You should always map out the perspective of everything in your image (including the figure) when still working on the structural layout, so that everything fits together properly.

You gave her wrist a bump on both sides, but there's only a bump on the underside of the wrist.

The readability of her facial contour is low, due to blending with the background. Vary the background value/color so her face isn't so similar in value/color.

Her right shoulder looks wrong because it is pushed back to much compared to how forward her chest us jutting out. You should ALWAYS shoot photo references of a real person doing the same pose, to see exactly where the limitations are of the range of motion, so you don't end up with awkward placement of body parts that are pushed too far and breaks the structural integrity of the figure.

The back of neck flares out too much, as if the back of her neck is severely swollen. Again, you need to have a real person pose--even just posing in front of the mirror yourself will help a lot.

There's a dark line on her neck where you're trying to clarify her neck muscle, but that line doesn't look like it's integrated well with the rest of the rendering. I suggest you get rid of that line, as based on the rest of the image, lines are better kept to defining contours of shapes and details, and not as separators of more subtle forms.

You might want to try a different hue/saturation/value for the background--it's a bit bright and doesn't really complement the subject that well. Try a few different variants and see which one looks best.
  01 January 2014
Thank you a lot for those detailed comments. It is appreciated.

I'll keep those advice in mind, and apply them to my next piece. This one is done, though I know it could be even more polished and refined.
And definitely, the perspective of the gun is off !
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  01 January 2014
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