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Old 05-03-2013, 06:23 PM   #1
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Let's work! Soon I'll post some sketches...
 
Old 05-07-2013, 01:16 AM   #2
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WIP Card Challenge - A of Hearts_first sketch

Hi guys,

the letter "A" is the vowel more open and easy to talk to and is usually one of the first syllables spoken by babies. after reflection, I decided I'd like a more playful theme for my drawing.

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Old 05-10-2013, 06:49 AM   #3
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It's cute.

Try flipping the drawing horizontally so that the overall composition isn't just a diagonal slash, where you are unintentionally connecting the two A's at either corner.
 
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...At this stage, I flipped the composition to neutralize the diagonal line that had formed (thanks Lunatique). Here I defined the character and decided what colors fits better. So I preferred to use the reds analogous colors because other types of palettes weakened the color identity of the suit.
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The new face isn't nearly as cute/charming as the sketch. It might be a good idea to keep it cartoony/cute instead of making the person more realistic/distinct. Think about appeal--how the character will be perceived by all kinds of people. The more vague/simple/cute the subject is, the wider its appeal, because it isn't distinct enough to repel any specific group. Compared to the previous vague/cute face, the new one is just some chubby guy with a round face who isn't attractive--who would he appeal to?
 
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I agree with Lunatique. I liked the charm of the first sketch more. See if you can bring back some of that whimsy and I think you'll have something awesome here. Any updates?
 
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I agree with you guys. I thought about it and I draw some alternative figures and choose the simplest one. I think that is soo hard to keep the power of the sketch live throughout the entire process. Often my sketches are much stronger than the final image. How can I handle it? Anyone knows some reference about this issue?....
....So, I simplified the clothes too because sounds more coherent keep all clean as the face is.

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Old 05-28-2013, 01:19 AM   #8
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blocking light and shadows...

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Old 06-06-2013, 12:42 PM   #9
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It's done! I guess....
.... Just waiting for your comments guys!
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Old 06-07-2013, 09:55 PM   #10
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Hiya, I haven't been around here for years, so hopefully what I say is at least a little useful for you!

The previous step was incredibly cute and charming: it made me grin! I think it's lost something again in the most recent version.

There feels like something of a mismatch between the clean shiny balloon and the brushstrokes on the figure.

The smoother rendering on the face and dark shadows of the mouth have made the left cheek/side of mouth look wrong - that corner of the mouth is too pointy and the line of the mouth too straight.

The new hair has gone a bit furry - I really liked the lines of the locks in the last version. I think next to the balloon the hair is lacking shine and all the little highlights. It doesn't really clump and tangle enough, if you know what I mean.

I think in general the balloon grabs too much attention away from the figure because it looks more finished.
 
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Great observations Carlolo, very helpfull!
... Let's push it more!

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