The Journey Begins Challenge (2D) Entry: Cliff Cramp

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Old 03 March 2006   #31
Thanks everyone. I'll work on some of those suggestions.
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Old 03 March 2006   #32
Coloring WIP: Mouse Trip



Another small update. I still have to work on the ancor.
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Old 03 March 2006   #33
I had an idea like this in my mind too Looks cool
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Old 03 March 2006   #34
Hey, Cliff, nice strong shapes in those comps.
Have to admit, though, that i get confused about the direction of travel. Compositionally I would guess that the 2 mice are getting ready to board the boat. The addition of the figures in the lower right supports that... But I keep reading their body language as the left one lifting the right one up from the rope, so they are travelling left and away from the boat... like a journey ending. I'm not sure what you could do to their bodies to make it read more clearly, but I suspect you want the motion to read as rightwards-bound...

Good luck!

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Old 03 March 2006   #35
walrus makes a good point.. i suggest amking the mouse on top of the rope arm straight so it seems he is lowering the mouse down rather than bent like he is lifting a weight. also the lower mous could have his body twisted away from the supporting mouse with afoot on teh wood. just a suggestion. may not work but in my mind tahts what i would do
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Old 03 March 2006   #36
Coloring WIP: Mouse Trip



Thanks everyone for the comments, I think this helps to establish the going instead on coming.
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Old 03 March 2006   #37
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wow stuart little to the rescue! thats cute., gudluck
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Old 03 March 2006   #38
haha, i love the concept! always loved the idea of little heroes , i'm gonna keep watching this one!
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Old 03 March 2006   #39
Originally Posted by SideAche: I think this helps to establish the going instead on coming.


It definitely does, what a simple and effective solution
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Old 03 March 2006   #40
Agreed. Good fix, Cliff!

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Old 03 March 2006   #41
great idea
 
Old 03 March 2006   #42
lol.. i just realised what i suggested made no sence.. for some reson i though that they were trying to get down from the rope to go onto the ship.. just ignore me duh!!
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Old 03 March 2006   #43
Coloring WIP: Mouse Trip



I'm starting to add a bit of detail and texture to the ship now. I also fixed the anchor, though haven't adjusted the shadow yet.
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Old 03 March 2006   #44
very very cool

this is great concept
 
Old 03 March 2006   #45
its going really well
the change to the rope has really made the story alot more clear
but i dont understand the guy in the lower right...do you really need him/it??? for the story i mean....or is it just just going to confuse....

anyway...its comming up strong
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