My Animation Short

That's CICLO (Cycle, in english). Feel Free to watch and comment.

http://vimeo.com/73827794

There's some really good moments in this short. All the parts where the characters are being sprung into the air are great. The end where they examine the dollar together made me chuckle too. The color pencil rendering with a side perspective works well for delivering the story as well. So overall I would say this is a great start!

I wasn't really feeling the whole wind blowing sound, it felt really out of place and kinda got in the way of enjoying the animation. What needed the most attention for me would be the pace of the whole thing. It was really slow. For instance, on the first jump where the character fails and lands on the springboard. Instead of having him pause on the board, sit-up and pause, then look at the camera and pause, and finally look back up at the ledge and pause, just take some of those out and have him only pause when he looks at the camera. This way everything won't feel so evenly spaced out and it'll keep the story moving along much better. I think you could take a lot of the pauses out without confusing people.

Hope this helps! Good luck!

Oh, I do think it'd be ok to have the wind come in at the end where the money blows around. I just don't think it is necessary to loop for the entirety of the short.

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