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Old 07-04-2013, 12:09 PM   #1
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many hours spended in this 3d animation

Hello guys, I am getting old but still learning a lot.
I did this animation as a Intro template with a mucician friend who did the music for this video.

Please I want to hear all you critics, because the only place I can share it is the following website, where you can embed your 3d youtube videos and share it, so cool if you want to increase visits for your personal videos.

I did the animation in 3ds max, vray, and particles with trapcode particular, and optical flare in after. music was holliwood strings in Cubase...

http://www.my3dscene.com/tutorials/...h.7XX1zhBp.dpbs

any comment will be very very welcome!!
 
Old 07-16-2013, 06:19 PM   #2
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looks cool and nicely rendered.

I would just say that your camera work needs the most attention. When that light thing is flying around, perhaps have the camera move a bit up and down with it. Because right now when that light thing goes close to the water, you've got all this empty space that doesn't really need to be there.
So when it goes underwater, have the camera tilt/pan or whatever slightly down then come up again as it shoots out, so that the viewer is a little more involved with your subject.

at the 20 second mark all the way to 27 or 28seconds, the top part of the screen just stays empty and everything is hugging the bottom. making that whole stretch pretty boring to look at.
 
Old 07-21-2013, 11:35 AM   #3
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Thanks Phredrek for your comments.
At the moment I am working in a new scene, but I will consider your advice in terms of the camera.
The projects is pretty much similar, but rather than oceas, the "light thing" is playing between the clouds...

http://www.my3dscene.com/detail/int...h.B7Jg6xXp.dpbs

I did the clouds in this video... but still working to look it better.
Regards!

DAvid
 
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